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Had some fan-fic ideas I mulled over for a while. Then wrote part of them, but they didn't get a whole lot of attention on DeviantArt. So, I figured I'd try my luck here.

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Lurking in the background of the crowd, Fluttershy sees through the guise of the Great and Powerful Trixie.
Sympathizing with Trixie, Fluttershy sets out in the dead of night to see if she can do what she does best: listen. Even if Trixie won't talk, Fluttershy knows she has to try, even if her own timidness threatens to stop her before she gets there.

But helping Trixie doesn't just benefit only her. Fluttershy has problems of her own, and she may have more in common with Trixie than they both realize.



While not very well written (or thought out), it's a story written from the heart, and needed to be written.

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That was sweet. :twilightsmile:

A very sweet story. I wonder what their secret is, but a nice story nonetheless.:twilightsmile:

Very nice, the paragraphs could be seprte so it does not look like a wall of text but in all honestly it's not so bad, a very cute couple....hmm...I like this pairings. Please write more if you will.

1072723 It's implied that the 'secret' is that both Trixie and Fluttershy are fillyfoolers.

This is a very sweet one-shot, and a pairing (even if unromantic in this fic) that I rarely see done.

"You’ll never really be alone anymore, because you know that I’m out there, looking at the same sky as you."

Few actual romances have lines this good.

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Thanks for the feedback. I'll work on my formatting in the future.

This was better than ya give it credit for ya bean bag.

SON OF A MULE!!!! They're lesbians? Homosexuals? Are you nuts! What does that even have to do with being a boastful performer? You know what, that's the last story I'm reading from this author! I am done!

I enjoyed this story as a whole! I knew what was coming half way through the story. :pinkiehappy: You managed to portray the scenario quite well! I must say it was something that had to come eventually. It is nice to see somepony seeing the good behind Trixie. The way to story flowed was astonishing as well. I didn't notice any errors my self so bonus points to you! I would like to know what is to become of Trixie though, it would be sad if she was to just continue roaming Equestria, but still great! Liked, favored and watched! Hopefully I can enjoy more of your work in the future! Keep up the creativity and have a great day!

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Well that's a shame. I have another story that you'd probably like (no homosexuals in that story. At least, not yet).

Though I have to ask, if you aren't just paraspriting, did you really not see that coming? I mean, the tag on this story is romance, and two female characters are tagged as the main characters.

1073570 Never a problem, hope to be seeing more soon.

I was hoping eventually Fluttershy would try to help Trixie (even in a fanfiction).

I'm actually kind of glad, I know this is going to be a great story.

I give you 5 Fluttershys! :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

Well, my suspicions were correct. This is an amazing story.

This story is really cool, it has a good plot (as far as I can tell), and it's SO AWESOME! :rainbowkiss:

:yay::trixieshiftright:

1074393 What's wrong with being homosexual?

Amazing! this was reeeally romantic and pretty well written! good job sir! i enjoyed this reading!:pinkiehappy:
And I don't see this pairing much, but its quite good. I would like to see another fic like this!
5 Trixies :trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

Well you guys are all awesome. Just wanted to say, thanks for reading! (I've never gotten this many readers before :pinkiesad2::pinkiecrazy:)
I was gonna keep working on my adventure/history of Equestria fic, but if this is what's popular, then I might just write another shipfic.
Seriously though, in the interest of getting my other story more widely read, I would strongly encourage you guys (and girls) to read my other story I'm working on, "The Everfree Conspiracy."

1080712 I'm telling ya man, people eat shipping up like its made of nutella.

1 minor thing about this story.
1 minor-ish thing about these type of stories in general.

1) When Fluttershy says “Curses!” It just doesn't seem like the kind of thing she'd say. Maybe 'darn it' or some such. Yes I know, it's a stupid thing to point out, :facehoof: , but what can you do?

Other than being a little more forward than you expect her to be. I thought you did a pretty good job of keeping her in character.

Now these kind of Trixie stories in general...
Why is it everyone always leaves poor Trixie homeless?
:trixieshiftright:
Shouldn't she file a claim against Snips & Snails parents for neglect or something? *Everything* she owned was in that trailer.
Along with props for her shows.
Letters from friends, family & fans.
Pictures of her (possibly) mis-spent youth.
Money she earned before getting to Ponyville. Everything. :trixieshiftleft:

Those 3 come along, ruin the show for everyone else. Cost her money AND her home. But we're supposed to think they're ok, because they 'taught' Trixie a lesson? C'mon. They need an ego check more than she does.

* If Rainbow spent as much time on practice, as she does telling everyone how awesome she is, she'd be the Wonderbolt Capt. :trixieshiftleft:
* And unless Applejack can provide a letter from an independent testing agency/laboratory stating she does, in fact, have the best apples in Equestria, then someone should call her on that. :trixieshiftright:
* Rarity is the only one Trixie didn't beat. So she gets a pass. :raritywink:

Also, I like the way Twilight just lets someone run into the dangerous forest. Knowing full well, anything they need to make it through safely and more comfortably has been destroyed.

I'd bet half my fingers and all my firewood, she was the first one going through poor Trixies things.
:trixieshiftleft:
Wonder if her friendship letter included 'And we learned that if we get outsiders to run away, we can rob them blind without ever having to worry about the police coming for us...yay!'?

Sorry about the rant. It just really does bug me the way that ep came across.

I will be sure to check out your other work. :yay:

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haha I enjoyed that rant. My Fluttershy is a little out of character, this story was actually written almost a year ago and has been sitting alone and unread on my rather pathetic DeviantArt page for almost as long, right after the EqD pre-readers tore me a new a**hole when I submitted it.

I'm still working on getting these confounded ponies to stay in character when I write (practice, practice, practice!), but it sounds like to me that your issue isn't so much with my fanfic as it is with the actual canon episode. I would try and alleviate your concerns, but as I am not on the writing staff for MLP: FiM, I can't suggest an episode where your concerns are addressed.

1086676

haha I enjoyed that rant. My Fluttershy is a little out of character, this story was actually written almost a year ago and has been sitting alone and unread on my rather pathetic DeviantArt page for almost as long, right after the EqD pre-readers tore me a new a**hole when I submitted it.

Glad ya liked the rant. :pinkiehappy:
I don't know why they ripped on you so much, it was a pretty good story. Especially if it sat for a year.

I'm still working on getting these confounded ponies to stay in character when I write (practice, practice, practice!), but it sounds like to me that your issue isn't so much with my fanfic as it is with the actual canon episode. I would try and alleviate your concerns, but as I am not on the writing staff for MLP: FiM, I can't suggest an episode where your concerns are addressed.

Oh no, I liked your story, it could have been fleshed out a little more, but that's just me. (no offense by the by)
And brother do I have a problem with that actual ep! :twilightangry2:
Trixie and Luna have so much to offer the series, if only they'd go into the backgrounds more. Ok, might be asking too much from a kids cartoon about talking ponies...but still.

There are alot of good fic writers, and like I said, this was a good one. Like you said, practice practice practice. Some time check out the lunaverse. Trixie has, more or less Twilights gig, but can still act like a jerk. :yay: But that may give you an idea, they don't all have to be cannon. Hell, you do this for fun, have fun with it.

Just promise me, Trixie comes out on top.
:trixieshiftright:

Also, keep in mind, I don't write fanfics, and the last thing I did write. was a brilliantly bitter and smartass review of a movie. That one I just sent around to friends.
Man I wish I still had that. I crack me up! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Anyhow, keep plugging away! Not everyone will like it, but as long as you do so what.

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Thanks for the encouragement, it's much appreciated. And believe me, I do have fun with my writing, I find this to be great practice when I'm not working on stories of my own imagining.

"I noticed I was different from all the other fillies and colts" so... hermaphrodite?

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More like... Hydra Penis.

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