Mine For The Taking

by forbloodysummer

Heat

Heat. The overwhelming sensation was one of heat. Near-tropical humidity, friction of bodies against each other, an endless ocean of hair. Massive walls of curls falling either side of her face, and more above her forehead. Ginger-hued, when their presence didn’t block all light. Air trapped inside like a sauna. Rivulets of sweat reaching out to grasp at more hair, plastering it to skin.

Lips on her own, and on her body. Hungry lips, never sated, soft over sharp teeth. Seeking out the innocent places, the neglected places, and the best places. Burning as they touched, chilling as they left. Lips that whispered while they teased and staked their claim.

A new sensation with each movement. Explosions of colour as hips rolled. An inner furnace flaring as a back arched. Passion fruit overwhelming her nostrils, whisky in her veins.

Then bodies shifting, cool air on her face. Hair lifted away, hanging a foot above her. A lion’s mane, silhouetted in moonlight, framing a face as a vessel of primal passion. Moving over her, like an animal.

Comments

[Lore Horse]

I.......... don't know what to say. Wasn't expecting it to be so short. Well written, but short.

[Boltstrike58]

Huh. That happened.

[forbloodysummer]

9778207 Been thinking about how to reply to this!

It's short for a few reasons, really. I didn't want to push the story beyond the teen rating, and I think showing much more would have risked that. I also wanted something that was more about sensations and impressions than definite events, like it's seen in a fever dream or a drug-induced hallucination, and I think taking it longer would probably lessen the surreal sensation? Alcohol often hits people way more the second they're horizontal, and those two have had quite a few drinks by this point (though I'm saying nothing about whether they were horizontal, vertical, diagonal or anything else in their orientations), so this is not the perspective of a sober person who's had plenty of sleep.

Furthermore, though, I don't really like detailed sex scenes, in any medium. The characters hook up, and then head into the bedroom, and I kind of think the viewpoint shouldn't follow them in. We don't need to see them kissing more and undressing and stuff; we know what's going on and what'll happen next. If we're going to be in the same headspace as the characters, we kind of need to be aroused, and that's then disappointing if it doesn't lead to proper M-rated territory. And then becomes distracting for the rest of the story. Whereas if we're reading it when not at all in that mood, then it's just kind of awkward and you want them to skip to the next bit?

[Roundabout Recluse]

I’m excited to see where this goes; thanks for recommending it!

[forbloodysummer]

9780615 Thanks, I'm really happy you like it!

[Tethered-Angel]

This chapter sparks jealousy.

Beautifully done.

[forbloodysummer]

9836037 Thanks! I think we can all be jealous of those two, that's a night of a level no one else is going to come close to

[Undome Tinwe]

Well, that's one way to write a T-rated sex scene. Marvellous prose, and still very very evocative without being explicit.

[redandready45]

The chapter is passion written well.

[forbloodysummer]

10213470 Thanks! This one was fun to write, I'm glad I thought of including it