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The Dapper Changeling


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When Fluttershy stumbles upon a half-drown, injured Changeling, she decides to take him in and nurse him back to health. She finds, as time goes on, that, not only is the changeling as bad as she thought, but the whole of the hive isn't as evil as she believed!

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Sorry, I'm terrible at describing my works.
Special thanks to Nate Redblood for editing for me. (Check him out here!: http://princeredblood.tumblr.com/)
Special things to RyuRedWings for Tarrlok and the Chrysalis legend. (Check her out here!: http://fillyqueenchrysalis.tumblr.com/ )
Image found on DA, by ditistomzel.

Note: Optional Chapter means it's merely a side-chapter, often a skit, or a "behind the scenes" scene. These are not nessecary to the plot, nor are they necessarily "canon" to the rest of the story. It's all up to you, dear reader.

Chapters (10)
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Since I may or May not get some flack for this,
No. Chrome Quill, and (by extension) Imago, are not ME. I made their names for me, but they evolved into their own character. So...

Oh damn this is now getting to get good i wonder how this will turn out ..... keep up the good work look foward to ur next chapter

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The names are you, self insert blah blah, nah this joke is lame. I'm enjoying this very much. Please proceed.:twilightsmile:

The wall of text is disturbing. :pinkiesick:

But, I like this story. Favorited. :pinkiehappy:

Dun dun dun!!!:pinkiehappy:great story so far!

Is that a Scootaling I see? :scootangel:

Scootaloo as a changeling? Didn’t see that one coming.

Now this is getting really interesting...

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Why do you think that? Pretty sure I've never heard Sweetie Belle or Apple Bloom (or anyone) call Scootaloo "Skitters" before.

This is a sweet little story, even if do think some of the chapters could be a bit longer cause not sure how long gonna be, with building up to romance and now the battle(?) in Ponyville. I think love your explanation for how Changelings feed on love is interesting, even if somewhat typical (though can't say expected love of a pet, marks the first time read a story with such a concept). And Scootaloo is Changeling? :pinkiegasp: That's interesting... :scootangel: Well, tracked and now looking forward to coming chapters! :heart:

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And why not? Just because don't call her on-screen, doesn't mean can't off. :raritywink: Plus, if read the descriptions about two friends and an idol, and how young the Changeling is and that no one knows she's a Changeling, not hard to connect the dots (even if I didn't at first, but I had read this whole story while tired kinda :twilightsheepish:). :derpytongue2:

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Ah, no, no, she said called, as in past tense. She meant back when she was at the hive.
In my current head-canon, the other CMC have no idea that she's a changeling, and she doesn't intend to let that slip.

Honestly, I did want Scootaling to be a...kinda "is she, isn't she." thing to readers, but with a fresh story idea (after this one. So I don't get distracted, and abandon ACH.) STARRING Scootaling would kinda completely remove the mystery.

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As for length, that is something I'm working on. While I've done fan-fics for a very long time, I never have done them chaptered like this, nor have I ever pre-wrote the story in notes, like I am now. So, hopefully there will be more longer chapters. And you have no idea how happy I am to hear the fans don't hate the budding romance between Shy and an OC.

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Well, the ones who are reading and commenting, anyways. :raritywink: Supposedly, lots of (or at least, quite a few) people hate Mane 6 member x OC shipping, even though not sure why that is. Maybe cause it's overdone (here anyways) or just seems cheap or is not well done, usually. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cloudchaser_dealwithit.png I myself have no problems with it though and will read anything, as long as it catches my interest. And meant no offense by length or anything, but glad to hear!

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No offense taken. And I think it's because most people hear OC x Mane 6 ship, and immediately assume it'll be one of those "I get sent to Equestria so I can be with (Insert pony here)" or "Dark Demon King Ravenblood the Alicorn of awesome X (Insert pony here)." Or maybe because a lot of OC X M6 tends to make the mane 6 WAY out of character.
But I digress.

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Well, there are quite a few like this one (at least in my time reading/viewing stories on this site) that aren't just a HiE story or sona insert, but even so. Not that I currently have any such ideas like those. Wasn't even THINKING about HiE or ponysona insert stories, mainly ones like this, even though this does seem to be doing okay so far. :facehoof: At least, maybe of ones I'm aware of that have read, but could be wrong now that thinking of specific examples. So I digress. :twilightblush:

Anyway, sorry for the ramble and somewhat needless post, I shall wait and hope to see another new chapter soon! :twilightsmile:

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A female changeling nymph with tiny wings, energetic mannerisms, two pony best-friends, and who immediately mentions having an idol, just sounded very much like Scootaloo. The "Skitter" part was the only one that didn't fit perfectly, but it could either be what other changeling-friends called her, or possibly the other CMC do know, in this story. It just seemed to hit too many details to be likely as a coincidence.

Plus, Scootaloo seems to be a popular choice for an X-is-a-changeling setup, with the lack of known family and all... and Scootaling is possibly the cutest changeling-nickname.

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I've seen that, yeah. OCs romancing one of the mane six tends to hit all sorts of warning alarms, especially since they not only often have the canon characters acting OOC in order to support it, but it's commonly associated with poorly-made stories. It made it seem very ironic (And left me a little confused) when I had a story where an OC developed a (unrequited) crush on Rainbow Dash, and the (few) comments I got on that part were disappointed that it didn't develop into a full romance. People are confusing! :twilightoops:

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Well, "called" could still refer to something that is still called that, for example, "The doctor called his invention 'the Z-array.'" -and children/nymphs are not the paragon of correct grammar!

Still, you haven't established much Changeling lore in this story (yet), and while Imago mentions friends back at the hive (I think; I'm too lazy to look for any specific mention), Changelings using nicknames is new information (I think--I'm reading way too many Changeling stories to keep all the various fan-lores separate... GAH!)

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Coincidences can still be coincidences... it's easy to be too assumptive when Changelings are involved. :trixieshiftleft:

And I don't know about "Scootaling" being best Changeling nickname... I really like "Flutterling" (but I love Fluttershy, period), and I'm partial to "the Pinkielective" (since it's been used to describe one of my stories).

:scootangel: scootaling! I am loving this story. More updates!

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True enough.
:derpytongue2:
But then, context is my savior here.
"My friends called me."
If she was referring to the CMC, that'd be a current tense. But I can see your side to.

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And yes Phoenix, that was my intention, that she was called it back at the hive...

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As for the Changeling Lore, I know, I know, it just hasn't come up as much as I like. I've put great thought into how Changeling society might work. Oddly enough, that was my next idea for a story, for Twilight to try to publish a "study of Changelings" sort of thing.

Scootaling! Yet another point for this story.:rainbowwild:
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Wait, they're attacking already?! That was fast.:rainbowderp:

and the he just couldn't help himself.
She was wondering, if only for a moment, if he should let

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Been kinda intending to reply to this one, but wasn't sure if I should, but I think I will now. :twilightblush: Even though said I didn't have any OC ideas to the author of this fic, I forgot I have had possible idea with possible OC/canon pony (not saying Mane 6, if I even do it) and a couple HiE ideas (one with a human who won't be myself :twilightsheepish:), with OC/Mane 6 stuff (not sure about romance, but I digress). I HAVE had several ideas in fandom used to be into (still am somewhat) that were more original with original characters and such (even if never did them, being a lazy-ass writer), though I have had quite a few with ponies as well (despite most featuring canon ponies), even though most of my current ideas (that have yet to start/do) center around some common(?) pairings, but with a solid storyline imo.

Of course, there can be fics that stretch the possibility of a ship logically working I think, even WITH just canon ponies, even if can't recall any off the top of my head. But I hopefully won't plan to do such, for some I MAY do someday for some lesser-done ships (namely ScootaSpike, TwiBurn, and I guess SoarBurn to name a few), if I do them at all, that is. Merely saying. :coolphoto:

And also, kinda sorry to hear about that with your own story, but I'm sure drew people in when you were writing it (since I didn't read it when so and haven't yet, if I ever do), and then kinda sucked to find out you DIDN'T. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png

This is starting out really well. It sounds a lot better then how my stories would start.
I applaud thee:twilightsmile:

Why would you cancel this story?

OMG, a new chapter of this story?! :pinkiegasp:

Anyway, did seem a little choppy, can't remember if the other chapters were like this... and not sure I remember much of what else happened in the Optional Chapters, when we saw some of the things with back at the Changeling hive. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png Was a little fast-paced too, even though none of the other chapters were very long, but could've at least drawn it out a little more, if you ask me. And some spelling and misusage of words (like Applejack as Apple Jack), though can't really remember or feel like pointing them out, not to offend. :twilightsheepish:

Well, if this continues and gets done soon, looking forward to see how things end up! Though honestly, had expected this to be rewritten before we saw anything new for it. :twilightoops: Sorry for the somewhat negative review, when your new story may be a bit better than this, but haven't read it as seemed like wasn't my cup of tea. :twilightblush: And you did seem to imply it wasn't as good yourself... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Fluttershy_lolface.png

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No worries.
I knew I could do better, and to be fair, I would've liked my editor, lol. But, besides, it's better than the first draft was. A lot better.

Time had passed much quicker now, with Sapphire at his side and the cottage, more often than not, alive with conversation between the commander and his savior. Fluttershy still rarely initiated any conversation, but Imago’s sense for emotions told him the truth, that it was more due to her shyness than her fear anymore. The little cottage was becoming a comfortable home. And this was terrible. Imago knew this, knew that becoming to accustomed to this pony, to this comfortable life was not what he wanted. Imago needed to stay and be pleasant long enough to heal, then leave. Find and reclaim his place beside his queen. Even becoming her friend was not an attractive prospect. After all, once he healed, he’d not be returning to ponyvile for any good reason ever again. Still, as he looked over to the yellow pegasus, currently feeding and talking to her animals, he knew it was too late. He knew he’d miss her upon returning to the swarm. He shook his head. Here he was, a commander of the Changeling Swarm, befriending a pony. And one that had helped defeat his people, no less. He looked down, regarding the bandage on his leg that had been freshly changed by his own hoof. The break was growing smaller by the day. Soon enough, it’d be time for him to return home. Imago looked forward to that day, simultaneously eager and dreadful for his departure. He longed for his own people, for the Swarm, those whom he had grown from nymph-hood with. He wanted to be back at his queen’s side, beloved by many, feared by plenty, but respected by all. Yet, as he watched the mare, he knew he’d already sunk to far, and that he’d miss his friend once he left. He hated himself for letting himself get attached, but it had happened. Now he’d have to deal with the consequences. Feeling the kitten rub against his leg, he looked down to Sapphire, who was begging for attention. Of course, what would he do with her? No way would the little love-ball survive for a minute around the Swarm. She’d be a husk in seconds. Imago buried his head into the couch, where he was fairly sure he’d made an indent. Maybe all this lying around, being stationary, was getting to him. He needed something to happen, and soon.

Dear Celestia!
Use your enter key once in a while dude :derpytongue2:

“That’s it. I pinkie promise I'll be back…” Seeing the small smiled on the mare's face, he turned. “Alright, I'm ready to head back…Father.”

:twilightoops:

Many lols to be had....unintended of course, for some reason my min keeps registering Imago as amigo.:derpyderp1:

NO LONGER CANCELED!!! :rainbowwild::pinkiehappy: :yay:

The Dapper Changeling i got a question when will the next chapter come out for this story

4478470 Funny thing about that is I had just gotten the next chapter started. I want to wrap this story up, since, being my first FIM story, it has a kinda special place in my heart, and I hate to leave it unfinished like this. Now that life has settled down, just felt right. So, I can't say when exactly, but expect it within the month of June, I promise that.

yes you are a sinker for doing that xD and ok

4481195 It felt so right to end it right there, but I wanted to assure readers I wouldn't leave them hanging again, now that my writers block has went and left me alone.

Wow its live :P

You make Apple Bloom sad for leaving this chapter in a cliffhanger. :applecry:

I'll give a like and favorite on the story, please take your time on this, there's no need to rush. :twilightsmile:

4482584 Don't tell me that, last time someone told me that, it nearly took a year! XD
But seriously, the chapter's already done. I'm just being a butt :3

*gasp* THERE GOING TO DO SOMETHING TO FLUTTERSHY! :pinkiegasp:

Oh and love the story :yay:

Not sure bout Scoots though....

4485648 I've always been a fan of Scootaling. It always makes so much sense to me, and it's just a fun concept to play around with. Besides, this was old XD

i love it and i can't wait for the next chapter when that comes out

Well that ending was a tad rushed. If it was a little less quickly paced, that last line would have given much more of that warm fuzzy feeling...

4506407 Yeah, I know. I've been a bit sick recently (head-aches and dizzyness do not make for a good writer :pinkiesick:), but I wanted to get this out to y'all. And be done with this bloody story! :rainbowlaugh:

4506339 As I said, It is finished, but thank you for enjoying the fic!

4506441 ok and your welcome :pinkiehappy:

Who am I to stop love?

*Le gasp* :pinkiegasp:

Yaay!

I love Chrysalis a lot now.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

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