Letter Unsent

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Relationships can be a very complicated thing. Sometimes there's more going on than what one would be able to gauge by simply looking at the interactions between the two members of one. Sometimes there's more than one of them might realise. Sometimes someone might have no idea of how much they changed someone else, how much they mean to them, or how much the other would suffer without them. And sometimes, maybe, things should stay that way.

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The Voice in the Water

The Voice in the Water #1 · Jul 31st, 2019 · · ·

Oooooph, that hit right in the feels.

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Wanderer D #2 · Jul 31st, 2019 · 4 · ·

It seems very emotionally involved, but if the description and the final paragraph hadn't mentioned Sunset, I honestly wouldn't have been able to tell it was her writing it. It needs more context, I think for it to have true impact. Maybe some sort of intro, rather than jumping straight into her letter.

Csquared08

Csquared08 #3 · Jul 31st, 2019 · 3 · ·

I felt like this lacked character? If it weren't for the story description, I wouldn't have known it was Sunset writing the letter. The story just felt lacking.

MixMassBasher

MixMassBasher #4 · Aug 1st, 2019 · 1 · ·

Thrilling but unless you read the character tags and the cover for this story. You wouldn't know if this was Sunset or not.

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #5 · Aug 7th, 2019 · · ·

As others have said, this is a heartfelt but generic take on a long-distance relationship. True, not many others have this sort of discrepancy in what one owes to the other and how dangerous their lives are, but the voicing of the letter still feels like Generic Wistful Lover #17 rather than Sunset specifically.

Plus, I like to think that Pinkie found the abandoned letter and transcribed the contents into the journal. Because screw drama and regretful might-have-beens. We have a Pinkie!