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Popping Candies


hope your day is just as sweet as candy! 🍬 💓

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Discord decides it's a really good idea to invite all the villains of Equestria, well at least the ones who almost conquered the world, to a slumber party. Good idea, right? Nope! Also, a certain great and powerful pony is mad she didn't get invited. She's a villain, right?

Pranks happen, and mayhem is the main theme of this whole ordeal. How will these four deal with each other and the many villains who are mad they weren't invited to the evil lair of sleep?


Coverart: https://www.deviantart.com/ssalbug/art/Villains-479112035

EDIT: Yes, I changed the title slightly and the cover art.

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Comments ( 8 )

There are a few signs that you're a beginner, but you're a beginner who has some idea of what you're doing. You put effort in and it shows. A few grammatical details could use some ironing out, but I still loved it. I wish I could explain exactly what the issues are, but it's past 1:30 am at the time I'm posting this, so I'm not nearly coherent enough for that.

9723312
omg i get that! haha, i really need a proofreader since i write this late at night and overlook things, i just don't know anyone who'd do that for me. but thank you so much!

Nice work.

9723317
thank you! means a lot.

Though there was a few mistakes, this- just like your first story- was another good read.

9723332
ty very much! i'll try to get a proofreader.

This was a great read! Love to see what else you come up with :D

9725157
oh, tysm!! means a lot to hear. :twilightblush:

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