What happens when a young adult goes out of his way to save two of Equestria's princesses disguised as humans from being hit by a car at the cost of his own life? He gets reincarnated in Equestria as a dragon!
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Well, I don't qualify as a cooauthor, but if I was more reliable I'd apply as an editor, since I fit the other three criteria
oh my god this got INTENSE!!!
Don't worry too much. I am certain even the real Man of Steel would melt by their cuteness.
Okay, things escalated fast.
Damn. That 3rd criteria kills my chances of being the co-author.
heck cant wait
this is a good chapter and i like the cliffhanger.
i wish you the best of luck on your new story idea, i will be watching it as i love TMS by Dudeler.
it is to bade life turned crappy for him and he moved on from writing MLP.
Dont wanna ruin it for people not caught up truthfully to be told the moment the guard mentioned the princesses ordered it i was like ??? aren't they not around did the author make a mistake and when he pushed down fluttershy i was like oh shit your carrier just ended you piece of s**t. But that ending explained everything. It was like ooooh ok. To bad for them transporting something by wagon is slow enough for them to be intercepted by the princesses who can teleport and fly. Plus magically ...toothless left alot of material around ...blood maybe a few scales ripped off due to the manticores claws so maybe they can use it for tracking.
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I believe I mentioned how the lead guard used a teleportation spell. So there isn't a set if tracks they could follow. Not trying to sound mean just letting you know.
Damn, what a whirlwind
Keep up the good work my good man
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At the end it sounds like their on a road ... after toothless made a noise due to a bump...unless hes a princess i dont see him going to far teleport wise ... with a cage ... with other guards. Actually itll be even easier for them to track If he used magic.
I hate how some stories portray the princesses as incompetent ... celestias is 10000 years old she knows every spell ever invented except maybe some that are kept specifically in a family. I could see them not finding him before due to them not having anything to go off of but now they have materials.
Well truthfully him fighting in a arena could be entertaining story wise. Plus who says it has to be ponies who save him. Id like to see some dragons tare those sobs apart.
There have been very little Spiderman stories here, and even less successful ones, so taking in a Spiderman fic is serious stuff, but I hope you succeed, we can do with more Spiderman crossovers :D.
gg, things have gotten really interesting.
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Thank you I'm gonna need all the luck I can get if I want to make as good as this story
Thanks for the chapter ^_^.
Hmm. boo? or not to boo?
If there was a like button for every chapter, they would all be lit up green for me, keep up the good work and I hope you're doing alright.
Thanks for the update! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Well.......
$!*@........
First time sense discovering fanfiction, CURSE YOU CLIFFHANGEEEEEERRRRR!!!!!!
Yeah but neither Nightmare Moon nor Discord tried to actually kill them, and they used the Elements to defeat both of them
Wow, biased much
No, no they didn't
Ok. Time to hunt some speciest arena hunter-a-holes.
I loved Model Secretary! It's one of my faves.
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I'm so sad that it never got finished 😭😭
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Same here. It would have been great to see it finished. But at least it's still up for all of us to re-read it again
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Yeah, but that's why when I do find someone to help me with my spiderman story, I'll make sure that The Model's Secerty gets its due
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I wish you luck my friend. I want to see the ending to that tale.
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Would you be interested in maybe helping me. Like giving your opinions and stuff?
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I'll give you my thoughts and opinions but that is as much as I can help with. Sorry. I'm not a good writer.
that reminded me of this https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8UjWwMtrETk
So... this guard was just wandering around the palace, bleeding everywhere and nopony stopped to help? Because if he's inside the palace he would have passed a guard pony somewhere.
It would make more sense if Shining were outside and the pegasus came flying in.
Okay, but where? The Everfree is a big forrest, and there are bound to be other towns nearby, so that's really not enough to tell anyone where it actually is.
I would make this, "it ran into the Everfree Forest, a few miles south of Ponyville."
I'm the same way. Whenever I see a cute animal, all traces of my masculinity vanish
This is incredible out of character for Twilight. For one, she would be much more logical, considering this is supposed to be hypothetical. Also, I don't see Twilight just saying all dragons must be evil. I can see her being skeptical, but not reactionary.
I would have her responses be calm and logical. When Fluttershy adds the bit about knowing the dragon is good, Twilight could just as easily say that it's still dangerous because they can't know if the dragon was only trying to pretend to be good in order to get help.
Yeah, this is already rated as 'Mature' and tagged with gore. If anyone reading this has a problem with gore they shouldn't be reading it in the first place. This just breaks the flow and immersion.
And it looks exactly like that corpse in the middle of town! Seriously, how did he miss that?
Expositiony exposition exposits much exposition. Seriously, if you name one of these guys Blatant Exposition, I will love you forever.
Anyway, while this chapter had a few things that I found annoying or got a facepalm, it was over all enjoyable. You have potential, but you aren't quite there yet. Keep at it, though, and you'll only get better.
I await the continuation.
Ah...cliffhangers....my mortal enemy.
Moar plz
Did not see that coming.
OH you mean the city that has "not so noble" nobles that every brony and pegasister despises due to how they act
Love the reference to Avatar.
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And I love that you caught that 😁
That poor guy has had some terrible luck... I'm hopeful that the Princesses can rescue him before he gets thrown into the arena. It might give him some combat experience, but that's not necessarily a good thing. Just ask any of us who have.
I'll also agree with some of the earlier posts, that was a pretty out of character response by Twilight. It just threw me for a bit, like, what?
Lastly, I liked the response from the Princesses. Too often they're portrayed as being either incompetent or just... cold and haughty. It was nice to see them actually showing some real emotions. It shows how much him sacrificing himself, and their consequential emotions from seemingly not being able to help, affected the two sisters. I'm looking forward to seeing them finally reunite with him.
Damnit!
I sense that their plan to get rich will fall short on the selling part. Afterall… Who would buy harmless, toothless dragon who can only breathe hot/warm air and would rather lick its captors than claw their eyes out. (Tearing throats out would imply having teeth😉)
Bringin that to arena would mean massacre and onesided figths arent very intersting.
Or are you saying our MC isn't intelligent enough to do this to piss off those poachers?
Im good at ideas and stuff, and also, even if I hit those words and stuff, I chose to write a out FoE so the ratings were trash lol
Saw this on derpi, thought of this fic. Go figure.
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That doesn't mean a good guy can't scan for similar signatures of the scales/blood left behind.
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That doesn't mean a good guy can't scan for similar signatures of the scales/blood left behind.
How close is next chapter
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I finished the outline and now working to write it up. But I've gotten more hours at work so it will take some time. Plus I still need my editor and proof reader to look over it.
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Cool.
blood smells like copper, not iron
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Horseapples.