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This is a Telltale: Walking Dead + MLP crossover.
Game is owned by Telltale.
MLP is owned by Hasbro.


Earth, the homeworld of the human race is plagued by an unknown virus which causes the dead to reanimate and eat living organisms without any sense of consciousness, emotion or hesitation.

Before the virus, there was a man named Lee Everett who comes from Georgia. His Father, Mother and Brother worked in a pharmacy, which they owned. Lee was a history teacher who worked in the University Of Georgia. He had a wife, who has a job which causes her to travel around a lot. Lee wished to have a family with her but her occupation prevented them from having that.

One day, Lee left work due to feeling sick and found his wife having an intimate moment with a state senator. This sends Lee into a state of blind rage and he kills him in a fight.

Coincidentally, at the start of the outbreak. Lee is being transported by a sheriff to prison. They were on their way out of the city and the sheriff engages in a conversation about a prisoner he dealt with in the past. The sheriff does not pay attention to the road which later proves to be fatal for him. He does not see the person on the road, Lee yells from the back of the car to watch the road but is too late.

They collided with the unknown individual and sends the car out of control. The car busts through the rail of the road. They fall deeper into the forest and Lee is knocked unconscious.

2 months have past since then...

Chapters (33)
Comments ( 108 )

Finally, another walking dead crossover. I like the way how the main six went to the human world and also how Ben Paul, his friend Travis, and their teacher David Parker were doing before David's or Travis's demise.

"YOU CALL THIS FUN? WE ARE BEING SUCKED INTO. A .PORTAL!" Rainbow Dash yells.

It's just Pinkie being Pinkie, don't worry about it Dashie

I'm very glad David Parker survives this, oh yeah and also Travis.

I'm not trying to offned or criticize your story but you have to kill off one of them later. In the world of the undead, many characters would either die or went missing. Also how will you get good ideas when you change the plot of another plot you didn't made will make it more difficult for you to continue the story. I already experienced that cause I was also writing a crossover of MLP and TWD: The videogame. You must study the plot of the game and make sure you can overcome the problems along the way.

Anyway, good luck.

wow, honestly i'm surprised. i'm really enjoying this. i ran out of things to read, so i just searched a few random things. glad i found this, and i'll definitely be reading every chapter that comes out.

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Thank you, sir!

I am very thrilled to hear that you're enjoying this story!

I'm kinda enjoying the story except for maybe a few grammers I think. Just double check the grammars and see if there are errors.

Mm... I really expect Rarity to faint, but it's fine cause in the walking dead, BEN FAINTED WHEN HE TRIED TO CHOP LEE'S LEFT ARM LATER IN SAVANNAH

Do you played the game?

Lee would probably give the rations to Clementine, Duck, and maybe Ben if this was a movie instead of a videogame.

I couldn't imagine giving the axe to Larry though, but i think it's a good choice since Larry is one of those ‘friend to foe’ characters.

Wow, Travis' death reminds me of Mark's scrapped death where he got shot by an arrow and died while David is the amputee of the st.johns. all of the scenes were scrapped due to unknown reasons.

Lesson for everyone: marshmallow mare doesn't trust her magic.

I really liked the new episode.

wow, i actually kinda forgot about this story already. xd
glad i have the story on tracking. :P

good chapter by the way.

Our "kind" hasn't even gotten to the point of teleportation yet, but I don't we will get there now though

Our "kind" hasn't even gotten to the point of teleportation yet, but I don't think we will get there now though

I did briefly wonder why you had the mane six come in at start of episode two, but I quickly realised that it wouldn’t work with them coming in before they got to the motel. I had to pull up the wiki to remind myself of some of the characters as it’s been so long since I’ve played season one, but so far not bad and I’m looking forward to more.

I liked it, especially how Travis’ death affects Rarity and the rest of the group

"The talking horse is right," Larry says, smugly but Applejack doesn't pay it any attention.

Was that sarcasm? Or he actually agree? I couldn't identify if it's sarcasm or not.

Is Telltale: Walking Dead in any way related to the comic book series The Walking Dead?

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Only Hershel’s farm and the prisoner (the one with glasses) which the police officer from the episode ‘a new day’ mentioned.

Pst: and also Shawn's death

I remember this part of the game from when I watched a play through of it on YouTube. Can-dees_Murder_Weapon's retelling/re-imagining of the game was made better by adding adorable brightly colored Ponies.

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nice crossover, but Rainbow isn't THAT stupid that she doesn't know what 'Examination" means

Does anyone remember that other mlp and telltale walking dead fanfic?

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You mean this one. Haven’t read it but it looked interesting, though it hasn’t been updated in almost a year.

Instead of moaning for "Braaaaaiinnnnnsss" The trotting dead are moaning for "Frrrrrrriiiiieeeeennnnsshhhhhiiipp".

It IS magic, afterall.

It would be interesting if they save Beatrice. i'm waiting for the bandits though

Shes been ignoring her ever

She's.

I hit something. we gotta stop

We.

a'hm sorry

A'hm sorry.

Well comparing to the last chapter this one is sliiiiiightly better but you still have a lot of job to do before I could call this story at least enjoyable.
And man what's wrong with you and past tenses? Why do you keep using a present ones?

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Hello!

I appreciate the feedback, it's helpful. I'm actually typing the story out in present tense and at the time, I didn't realize that I was using past tense.

I just found this story and i really enjoyed it!
I cant wait for when the hiathus is over. :)

Well I have to say now it's much better than before, much smoother, easier and comfortable to read, have you rewritten previous chapters? Cause if you didn't you should do this at some point.

The train was pulled to a hard stop, causing a loud hissing sound making everyone causing everyone aboard to slightly tumble around.

Leave making everyone and add "and" before it.

Christa wanting to know more about Clementine and how ended up with Lee, asked if it was okay to get to know her in which he said "of course". And with that everyone was left do their own thing.

Add "she" after "how".

Applejack went to go get a quick look inside the station most of the windows were boarded up, preventing any sunlight from seeping throat, making the room dark but she was still able to see due to the now empty doorway. There was a section of the room that was completely barred with metal bars. Not spotting any walkers, she presumed the station was empty. She turned back to the two, "Ah don't see any walkers."

I'm pretty sure it's through not throat.

Haven't seen rushed moments here, like the story so far even though it follows original tell tales TWD story with a few little changes, seeing mane six adapting to the new world is quite interesting.

And we're slowly getting into the city.

Rarity scowled at Twilight who looked as if she had done something good. "Have you no shame, Twilight?"

This question is off, either "Do you have no shame Twilight?" or "Don't you have any shame Twilight?"

She wanted to ask Kenny if was alright, dealing with his family's passing. She decided against it, not wanting to bring anymore grief to the man.

If he was.

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Ya, i can see where this really has the same feel of the Telltale games here. Well done.

The six mares are lift off the ground and are pulled into the gateway. Before they were able to get dragged into the portal, they all latched onto separate trees. Twilight looks back to the orb and sees that it has grown into a dark vortex.

Teleport away


Hang on tighter

Teleportation! Twilight thought. "EVERYPONY LISTEN! I'M GON-" the vortex did not let her finish, instead the force became much more stronger and the ponies (unfortunately) were not able to hold on any longer. They all let their graps slip and they were all sucked through the vortex before Twilight could teleport them out of the Everfree Forest.

Comment posted by denneylaw deleted Aug 10th, 2020

Well I have nothing to say quite decent short chapter.

"Right, I'll check the second floor." Rarity made her way to the stairs. She spotted Lilly in the living room, she was seated and leaned up against the window looking out of place. Like she wasn't apart of the group. Rarity couldn't help but feel sorry for her, she would never tell her that though. Judging by her personality, the woman wouldn't want anyone pitying her.

A part.

Once she climbed the ladder up the attic, the first thing she noticed was the putrid odor. Like something was rotting, gathering up all types of bacteria and fusing them all together. Then she heard the soft growls of a walker. Her guard was up ready, for it.

That feels off, simply climbed up the ladder will be better.

Well that's going smoothly and the fact that I pretty much forgot the events of the first TWD just makes this read a tiny bit better.

Pretty much all they know is that she was a reporter, that was it. Even if she was right, she'd be powerless to do anything about it. She wouldn't even try anyway. Without the weight of being the leader on her shoulders, she was able to think more clearly; ever since she'd been given a second chance to be with the group, but not as the leader, she noticed that she hadn't been as stressed as much when she was the leader.

This much is unnecessary.
That'll be all waiting for the next chapter.

Carley was listening to the conversation, just as interested as Lilly and David. She already knew what Equestria was. It was their home, country to be exact. But as far Celestia? She had no clue who that was. Probably some pony god or something.

I have a feeling that this should be for.

Fine job as always, keep it up.

Rainbow shot up in the air, hovering above the pink pony, not caring about the pain that ached her wing. "But that's no excuse to start hurting your friends!"

I think it should be ached in her wing but I can be wrong.

"Like you're the only one who's dealin' with this! We're all sufferin' here!"

"Some more than others."

"I wanna get home too, Pinkie but you don't see me hitting my friends and flipping out all over the place!" When Pinkie stayed quiet, she continued. "And besides, we all made the decision to follow her out there! She didn't know what was gonna happen! We could've said no, but we didn't. We have no one to blame but ourselves!"

"You were just as mad as I am right now, back at the motor inn. Remember? When we first got here?"

Honestly I've lost who was talking there for a bit, try to avoid making this much dialogue without indicating who is speaking which line.

Twilight was sat beside Fluttershy who had a wing draped over her, comfortingly. Pinkie was right, it was her fault. If she hadn't of let curiosity get the better of her, as well as her selfishness to bring everypony along; they would still be back in Ponyville. How it was supposed to be.

This of shouldn't be here.

But yet here she was, the complete opposite where she took smiles away rather than give them. Deep down in the depths of Twilight's heart, was a new form of anger that began to grow. Frustration. Hatred but not for her friend but for herself.

Get rid of the first but and add comma after hatred, it will sound better.

It was the very ever first time she acted like that. That wasn't like her at all. Obviously, she would flip out about the little things she cared about but never like that. Rainbow Dash recalled back to when her and her friends decided to plan a surprise party for her. When they finally got everything organized, she went to go get her only to come across an almost insane-like Pinkie; talking to various objects. A walk in the park compared to her meltdown that happened a mere twenty minutes ago.

This ever breaks the sentence, delete it.

Rainbow frowned at her stutter. "Really? I find that very to believe, Fluttershy."

I think you've meant very hard to believe.

"Do you know what, Pinkie was talking about? You know about, Ben?"

Move that comma to after know.

Kenny's face turned sour. "No, Molly said they were no boats in Savannah. So, basically we're all fucked!" Clementine flinched at the man's bark.

I know Kenny is accented dude like AJ but I am sure this should be there are.

"Oh for love of god, would it kill you to not be so damn vague?" The woman who was named Molly, came walking back toward the group with an annoyed look on her face. "Yeah, I use bells to get around. Whoop-de-friggin' do, it ain't my fault that you guys were dumb enough to walk right next one."

Right next to one.

A few hours had gone by. A few of hours of idle chat. Twilight and her friends were beginning to worry about their friend Rarity. She'd be gone for a few hours, they knew she was going to be a while but they didn't think she'd be gone that long.

Is the first she'd suppose to be she should or she had? If it's she had that it should be she'd been. And I think you've meant she was going to be out for a while.

Rainbow Dash had suggested to go out and look for her but Applejack suggested to give it more time. Kenny was no longer as impatient as he was entering the city. Ever since finding out that the whole of Savannah was completely empty of boats, he'd been dunking down that bottle of Jack Daniel's. Unbeknownst to the everyone, it was what Pinkie drank before she flew off the handle.

He was when entering the city.

Speaking of Pinkie Pie. The pony hadn't been seen ever since she disappeared up in the second floor. The ponies rarely mentioned her, it had been on their minds. Yeah, but they hadn't spoken about the argument at all. Fluttershy thought about going up there to see her but ultimately decided against it, thinking it would be best if she was left alone for that moment. She'd come down when she was ready, she thought.

Better change it to she'll come down when she is/will be ready.

"And, Lilly," Applejack pointed out.

Remove the first comma and change the second one to a full stop.

More mishaps then usually, hard week or something?

And we slowly nearing the point when everything will go to hell, though it is going here already, don't do alcohol guys.

Against her hopes, that outcome never happened. They were aimlessly waiting for something that they all knew wasn't going happen and Twilight could no longer prevent the inevitable.

Going to.

If I remember TWD plot correctly, next chapter should bring action.

Oh, the tension.

A couple of mistakes here and there but I'm too drained after today to point them out, maybe tomorrow.

10584162 She'll try to hide it & tell everyone she's fine, but eventually she'll be found out. Typical zombie apocalypse senario.

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