• Member Since 7th Feb, 2012
  • offline last seen Jul 17th, 2013

WeirdDreamer


It is a mystery.

Comments ( 16 )

You know, I'm not entirely sure how to feel about a filly that's young like Scootaloo getting some action from a grown mare like Bit Slit. It just doesn't roll well for me. However, I can't deny that this was very well-written! Just because I don't like the material doesn't mean it doesn't deserve a thumbs-up. I highly suggest this clopfic if you're someone that enjoys cub porn or however you want to label it. :pinkiesmile:

Awesome. Too bad this says complete, I would love to see more of this.

1068496

Thanks! I was originally going to use Rainbow Dash instead of Scootaloo, but then decided that this would work better as a coming-of-age story. In my mind the crusaders are at their early teens, and cutie marks are roughly equivalent to breasts as signs of puberty (or at least Diamond Tiara's behaviour strongly suggests so). Basically, Scootaloo's hormones are going nuts, and Bit Slit couldn't pass the opportunity to give her a good first time - it's her special talent, after all.

And I suggest "fillyphilia".

Mmm. That was pretty good for being as short as it was. I will admit I have a little bit of a thing for Scootaloo. :twilightblush:

Scootaloo kind of talks more like Rarity than Scootaloo here. Phrases like "am I not" and "all too well" sound funny coming from her. Also, please don't use "plot" in-character. That's a real-world joke, not something anypony in Equestria would ever say or think.

There's a strange shift in the POV from Scoots to Bit when Scootaloo starts going down on her. You should try not to do that.

Please write that C.M.C centered sequel!!!!! PLEASE?!?!?!?!?!?!? :unsuresweetie: :scootangel: :applecry:
Scootaloo: Oh my Celestia, Twist is here!!!!!
Sweetie Belle: Oh dear!
Apple Bloom: Oh, buck.
Twist: ...... *grins devilishly* Can I join in?

3A
3A #6 · Oct 8th, 2012 · · ·

1187919 I bucking agree:trollestia:

.....was that oc purposefully designed to look as ugly as possible???.....

Whoa now, haven't seen some originality for a while. This story deserves a read!

Excellent read! Very sweet and sensual and to the point. I prefer my clop a little longer and more detailed, but I still really enjoyed this.

I wanted it longer, or at least a sequel:twilightsmile:

Awesome story you have here :scootangel::twilightsmile:

Verry nice. Now, I must be off. I've a sock to find.

Sequel!!!!

Login or register to comment