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After almost a thousand years of banishment, Luna has plans. Plans for how she will avoid being banished again once she's free, plans for what she will do to the sister who banished her unjustly. But plans can change, especially when a certain newborn Unicorn enters the dreaming for the first time.
This story has been rattling around in my head for a long time now and I hope I end up doing it justice. It's mostly influenced by the early seasons of the show and older stories, with very little draw from the newer seasons. I aim to take that inspiration and weave it into something resembling a fantasy novel.
chapter one is already done and chapter two is almost there, both will be released in the next few days, after that I'm aiming for at least a chapter a week.

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Hmm, the characters and story idea seem interesting, looks like it's going to be similar to other things I've read, but I don't mind that at all. Hope this story goes well, and good luck author!

Interesting start. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Interesting, I like this take on Luna and how she is interacting with Twilight. I wonder how those outside the dream will react to or if they will even notice she is getting these lessons. This has a lot of potential and I look forward to seeing what happens next.

Keep up the good work.

Hmm, definitely a good follow up to the last chapter, this story is proving to have an interesting story already. Also, I noticed an error that you may want to tend to

“Ok, lead the way. I’m curious to see what kind of foul managed to catch your interest.”

I'm sorry, but Scootaloo is the chicken. And this isn't even the right spelling of fowl to be a chicken. But I'm pretty sure you were going for foal here.

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Thanks for mentioning it. I absolutely hate it when I look at something I posted a month or two later and realize that I missed an error like that.

Ooohhh so Trixie is related to Luna

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The first time I saw Trixie's name, I misread it as Lunamoon. After that I always wanted to read or write a story that included the idea that Trixie was luna's descendant and the pronunciation of her family name had simply shifted somewhat over the course of a thousand years. Given everything else that I have panned for this story, it just seemed to fit.

This is very well done and engaging. Im eagerly waiting for more.

The Monk
“On her doorstep was Twilight Sparkle. While Derpy deeply respected the mare, like most in Ponyville, they wished she'd either switch to decaf, or start hitting the harder stuff.” -Dan_s Comments

A Sundance ship. What a rare site.

And the Archon is giving me a Mensk vibe

Wait did Luna just say Ebony Lunamoon? I wonder could she be ancestor of Trixie Lulamoon.

There will soon be two new Alicorns living in Equestria. The elements of harmony are finding barriers.

Should be bearers, though the typo gives it an interesting different meaning.

“W is for Winnie, embedded in ice.” Luna singsonged as she hugged the foal against her with one foreleg and pointed to their progress on the Griffin made alphabet poster with the other. “X is for Xerxes, devoured by mice. Y is for Yorick, whose head was knocked in. And Z is for Zillah, who drank too much gin. As she finished, she simply held the foal and let her stare at the poster for a time.

This feels like a nod to creature features gory demise.

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