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SC14


Objectively I just prefer coke.

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Sweetie Belle can’t take the way her life is going at this point. Her sister abuses her to no end, her friends are detaching themselves from her, and she’s constantly being bullied by Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon. One night, while suffering the blows of her elder sister, the little filly snaps, and retaliates against Rarity, ending with a broken lamp and injured Rarity. Not knowing what to do, she runs away, hoping to escape the wrath of her sibling.

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A bit too fast paced in my opinion, but I’ll keep reading. Hope it get’s better from here.

9681578
Thanks for the feed back
I will try to slow it down from here!

9681579
Also, I’d get an editor, just in case, okay?

9681585
Yeah i really should.

I like the actual story and plot, it has a lot of potential and I think I'll continue to follow it. However, it could really use some editing. I hope you can find somebody to help you with this. :twilightsmile:

9682162
Thank you!
I am currently looking for an editor
I hope you choose to follow along!

Well, it’s not that bad. At least you tried.

What song does

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make you think of?

10082300
Sorry. Thought this was your page.

10082301
That's fine. Thank you for the follow though.

Oh boy!

Are they going to keep her prisoner?

Force her into severe physical labor?

Hold her ransom? If it’s ransom, is Rarity going to refuse to pay?

Comment posted by SC14 deleted March 8th

Applejack is one word in this case. The cereal might be two words.

Does Scootaloo have a crush on Sweetie Belle and just didn’t have the guts to tell her?

Who is the filly that Sweetie Belle is going to meet?

Will the Mane 6 (including a reluctant Rarity), Apple Bllom and Scootaloo are going to search for Sweetie Belle? They are the police should go to the train station and ask the ticket pony where she went.

Is the line from a mob movie? Maybe The Departed or Goodfellas? I haven’t seen Goodfellas, but I should one day.

10131711
Well, two of your predictions were right. I will just let you figure you which ones:raritywink:.
(Also thank you for telling me AppleJack is one word)

10131714
No. but that is a good guess.
My only hint is that it is from a 60's Disney movie.

Are they going to turn Sweetie into a gangster?

10148398
Thank you for that and your continued support of this story!

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