• Published 11th Jun 2019
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Anon a MYSTERY - ALoneWolf



Twilight thinks she's forgiven them, but soon she will find out the truth

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YOU DID WHAT?!!!!!!

Quick note, the flashback sequence will be told from Applejack's perspective to better clarify the events

Flashback

When the day arrived for our week long trip to camp everfree everyone especially Fluttershy was so excited to see the wildlife . We even got permission to invite some of our buddies from crystal prep Lemon Zest, Indigo Zap, Sugarcoat, Sour Sweet, Sunny Flare, and the human version of ya . Also we along with Flash's gang decided to take our instruments with us to do a little performance on the last day of camp as there was to be a party on that day. Apple Bloom and the others were even allowed to go as well but the principles had instructed us to supervise them throughout the trip. Everyone was ready to go all except one.

Sunset showed no interest in going as she didn't want anything to do with us and risk getting bombarded with apology attempts. However she did find the idea of being out in the wilderness pretty soothing, plus it might help her unwind and clear her mind so she reluctantly agreed to come along. But she asked the principles if they could put her in a separate cabin which they agreed to. Once we got on the bus we looked around for Sunset and feared that she might have changed her mind but when we looked outside we noticed her get on her motorbike, guess she wanted to ride there herself and not get crammed inside the bus with all of us cant say ah really blame her.

Once we arrived we met the owner Gloriosa Daisy and her brother and camp counselor Timber Spruce whom our Twilight showed a fancy to. We all greeted them while Sunset remained coldly polite. On the first day we got to work unpacking our belonging and making ourselves comfortable in our cabins.

On the first two days we got into the spirit of camp by doing all sort's of fun activities swimming, jet skiing, Hiking, bird watching (as suggested by Shy), campfire stories where Timber told the legend of Gaea Everfree, Rarity hosting a small fashion show, rock wall climbing, and helping out in the mess hall. However Sunset just sat near a tree the whole time and indulged herself in a light novel she didn't even bother to touch the supper and dessert me and Pinkie made for everyone.

However things started going downhill on the next day when Diamond Tiara and her father Filthy Rich arrived unexpectedly. We were surprised along with the CMC as to why she was here, after she got expelled when her secret got posted.

Intermission

"Expelled?"Twilight asked.

"Oh yeah" Applejack answered as Twilight ushered her to continue the story.

"You see sugarcube, one night Diamond Tiara and her now former friend Silver Spoon broke into the school late at night and stole the test answers for the final exam. As you know being the way they are they cared less about being educated and simply took the cowards way to pass with flying colors. They even went as far as to sell copies of them to sum of the students. Apparently The girls silently caught them somehow and posted it to the Anon a Miss account. To make a long story short once the secret was posted they were immediately called into the principles office after the CMC confessed. Diamond Tiara was soon expelled but as for Silver Spoon she admitted that she didn't like the idea to begin with and wanted to back down but was afraid of what Tiara would do to her. So the principles decided to let her off easy with a one month suspension as she was the only one who felt guilty. After that Diamond Tiara renounced their friendship and swore vengeance on the three girls who started all this.

"I see, I see" Twilight said "Cheating is never the option no matter what your grades are. Please continue Applejack"

"Ok Twi" Applejack answered as she continued the story

Flashback

When asked why they were here Filthy Rich stated that he wanted to turn the camp into a Spa Resort and his daughter was all for it. Guess this was her way of getting revenge especially after finding out Silver Spoon was now friends with the CMC. He offered the siblings a check for $500,000.00 but Gloriosa refused the offer as this camp has been like a home to her. So he along with Tiara decided to stay a few days to get them to change their mind. But that was the least of her problem's.

The next day weird stuff started to happen throughout the camp. There was an earthquake but luckily Timber guided all of us to safety, at first we thought it was normal but after we witnessed a mysterious gem like dust substance emerge from the aftermath we came to the conclusion that there was magic evolved. Without Sunset we knew solving this mystery would be impossible but we had to at least try for Sunset's sake. Our crystal pep buddies even offered to assist us in this magical mystery. Throughout the day we began to gather clues when we overheard Timber and Gloriosa arguing with Timber saying the camp had a long run so maybe it's time to retire but she angrily refused saying she'd protect this camp no matter what and ran off with a huff. As she ran we noticed a strange looking necklace she was wearing that had some sort of strange crystals attached.

Later that day we decided to follow her to see if she was the true cause of all this. We saw her enter a cave and once we entered we took a peek and noticed her chanting some type of spell. when we finally confronted her she admitted that she was the cause of the earthquake and plans to do much more to save her camp. we pleaded with her not to do this but she didn't listen and trapped all of us in the cave as she walked back to camp to begin her rampage. Luckily Indigo found a small enough gap in the cave to crawl out of. One we helped each other out of the cave we quickly ran back to save the campers. Once we arrived back to camp we were already too late.

Gloriosa had transformed into a creature resembling the monster Gaea Everfree and trapped most of the campers and Diamond Tiara into a giant bramble like cage and summoned an army of possessed wildlife who began to wreck the camp. She also had Filthy Rich in her grasp and was ready to execute him. We tried to help but without magic she quickly overpowered us. Sunset who's been hiding since the rampage noticed the whole ordeal and ultimately decided to help us out just this once. So we joined hands to get ready to harvest the magic from Gloriosa, Twilight was a bit nervous as she had little experience with this whole magic thing but she knew Timber and her friends needed her so she agreed to help out. We felt the magic flowing in our bodies and before we knew it each of us ponied up and launched a powerful blast straight to Gloriosa freeing her from the corrupted magic and saving the rest of the camp, once she was free we noticed the crystals from the necklace suddenly transform into seven different pendants each representing our elements. As soon as we tried them on a powerful surge of magic entered our bodies and before we knew it gained some new powers. I got super strength, Fluttershy gained the ability to communicate with animal's, Dash got super speed, Pinkie gained the ability to shoot explosive sprinkle infused energy blast's, Rarity gained the power to summon diamond like force field's, Twilight gained telekinetic powers, and Sunset was given the power of magical empathy to sense others feeling's which she didn't care much for.

When we confronted Gloriosa she apologized and stated that she didn't mean any harm, she was just tired of businessmen like Filthy Rich threatening to shut the camp down and didn't have anyone to support her, Timber apologized to her as well for not realizing how much this camp meant to her. After that filthy Rich realized they wouldn't let go of the camp anytime soon and decided to let them keep the camp but before he departed he gave them a small donation to ensure the camp stays there for years to come, much to the annoyance of his daughter who left with a huff.

On the final day of camp everyone pitched in to help clean up the mess from the magic rampage, as soon as everything was finished we saw sunset staring out into the lake. so we cautiously approached her and thanked for the help. She gave us a silent no problem but as she began to walk away she tripped on some type of weird looking stone. After picking herself up she investigated the object that made her trip and reluctantly picked up the stone but that's when the unspeakable happened. As Sunset inspected the stone a weird glow emerged and flashed straight into Sunset"s face and she soon collapsed. The girls and I quickly went to her to see if she was okay.

When Sunset came to we asked if she was alright which she replied "never better"with a smile, but what caught us by surprise is the sudden happy mood she was in. She no longer had the cold demeanor she wore these past few month's and was happy to see all of us. When we questioned her if she remembers whats been going on these past few months and the Anon a Miss incident, Sunset stated that she doesn't remember a person named Anon a Miss and all she remember's is saving the camp from the corrupted Gloriosa and saving all of her friends. Hearing her call us friend again made us instantly know something happened and realized that it had something to do with that stone. We instantly came to the conclusion that it was some sort of memory erasing stone.

We knew we had to fix this but Rainbow Dash had other crazy idea. She suggested that we don't fix it in order to leave the Anon a Miss thing behind once and for all. All of us especially Fluttershy called Dash out saying how selfish and insane that idea was, but after realizing how much we missed having Sunset around and didn't know how long it would take for her to forgive us and not wanting to go through another month of getting shunned by her, we put it to a group vote and reluctantly reached the verdict to let the event's of last christmas be erased forever. So we tossed the stone deep into the lake and helped our friend up as we escorted her to the party.

That night the party began we showed off some of our new abilities to our friends, did our performance along with Flash and his gang, Twilight got to dance with her crush, and what made the night light up more was seeing Sunset happy again no longer the cold distant girl she was these past few months. The next morning we said goodbye to Gloriosa and Timber who promised to visit Twilight much to her enjoyment. After that we got on the bus but not before the five of us took one last look at the one place where the Anon a Miss incident had been erased once and for all.

Back to the present

"So yeah sugarcube thats what happened" Applejack said after finishing the story.

Twilight was speechless when Applejack finished the story her expression hidden in the bangs of her hair. She just couldn't believe it. They witnessed a magic stone erase Sunset's memory of the events three months ago but instead of helping her they went along with it just to erase the Anon a miss incident like it never happened.

The five girls started to get worried as Twilight hadn't said a word for what felt like ten minutes. Fluttershy finally gained enough courage and spoke.

"Twilight are you ok?" She cautiously asked

'you..........did.............................WHAT?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Twilight boomed. she screamed so loud the passersby outside even heard.

The five girls trembled at Twilight sudden change in behavior but they all knew this was gonna happen the second Applejack finished the story.

After calming down slightly and catching her breath Twilight once again spoke.

"Let me get this straight you witnessed Sunset get her memory erased my some sort of magical stone but made no attempt to help her and instead went along with it just to put the whole Anon a Miss thing behind? Is that whats going on?

"Yes that's exactly was going on" Pinkie said in her usual tone which earned her multiple annoyed looks from the girl's at the table.

"I Don't believe it" Twilight said disappointed. " How could you do something so selfish. You just allowed Sunset to have her memory erased, do you realize what might have happened if she lost all her memories completely? She would've been in an emotional mess."

"It's not as if we didn't like it darling we just wanted our friend back" Rarity replied.

"THAT'S NO EXCUSE!" Twilight shouted "You don't ever force forgiveness that is not the way to seek redemption"

"We know darling but......

"No you don't know Rarity" Twilight retorted. " I have never been so disappointed in all my life. Overloaded with work or not I knew I should have come here sooner, and now thanks to me Sunset's had half her mind erased and I could have prevented it"

" Twi don't say that It's our fault what we did was selfish" Applejack said

"Damn right it was" Twilight shot back. " You could have just waited and everything would have been fine with all of you in time, you also could have had me talk to her to ease some of the pain but instead you resort to following the footsteps of those three siren's"

Those last word's that came out of her mouth were to much for Rainbow Dash to handle. Angered she grabbed Twilight by the collar of her shirt and began to fight back"

"YOU THINK WE DON'T KNOW THAT PRINCESS?!" Dash shouted. "I KNOW WE SHOULD HAVE WAITED OR STOPPED THAT STONE FROM DRAINING HER MEMORY BUT WE DIDN'T. WE STOOD THERE AND LET THAT ROCK DRAIN HER MEMORY BECAUSE WE WERE SELFISH IDIOT'S! Rainbow Dash continued shouting as tears started forming in her eyes." WE DIDN'T WANT TO DO IT I DIDN'T WANT TO DO IT IT BUT DING DING DING WE DID IT ANYWAY, DO YOU KNOW WHAT WE'VE BEEN THROUGH THESE PAST FEW MONTHS THE PAIN OF GETTING SHUNNED EVERYDAY, HAVING OUR NUMBERS BLOCKED, GETTING ATTACKED PHYSICALLY AND MENTALLY AND........." Dash said no more and released Twilight from her grip and collapsed on her seat crying her eye's out as Fluttershy wrapped her arms around her into a comforting embrace.

After a few minutes Rainbow finally calmed down and Twilight continued to speak.

" Dash you said something about getting attacked physically and mentally, what did you mean by that did she hurt you guy's?" Twilight asked

"Kind of" Dash sniffed" You know how we've been trying to approach her?" Well we've tried talking to her multiple times these past three months but like AJ said she just ran away or just ignored us all together. Last month Fluttershy and Pinkie successfully managed to walk up to her in the hallway but she managed to slip right through him. Shy didn't want to waste this chance so she made a death wish and grabbed Sunset's arm before she could walk away and boy that was a big mistake"

"What do you mean?" Twilight asked

"She attacked me and Pinkie" Fluttershy answered quietly

"She attacked you two?" Twilight asked shocked

"Yes" Fluttershy continued. " when I grabbed her arm pleading to talk to her she got real mad and punched me. Before I knew it she knocked me down on the ground and began punching me and punching me while screaming "I hate you" multiple times" Pinkie tried to stop her but ended up getting caught in the crossfire. She continued to assault both of us for a good five minutes non of the students watching tried to stop her out of fear of getting it as well. A moment later a couple of security guards ran over and restrained Sunset and carried her away kicking and screaming but not before she threatened to do the same thing to anyone who tried to apologize to her again. After that me and Pinkie were brought into the nurses office, Luckily our injuries weren't too serious, if the the guards hadn't arrived when they did we might have had to be sent to the hospital. After that nobody in the student body bothered to approach her, we begged principle Celestia to go easy on her, so she and vice principle Luna just settled on a two week suspension."

Twilight was now speechless she had no idea Sunset would resort to such a violent behavior especially to Fluttershy and Pinkie. While she remained slightly disappointed in the girl's, she would never have wish that for any of them. She then ushered them to continue.

"A Week after the attack Rainbow encouraged us to make one final attempt to talk to Sunset" Rarity continued." So we ultimately decide to visit Her apartment, Flash and Bulk Biceps came along as backup just in case she tried to attack us again. Once there we knocked on the door and waited for a reply. After 5 minute's we heard Sunset mumble "go away" not bothering to open the door. We continued to plead with her to open the door but all we got was the words "go away" repeated each time they got louder and louder. Rainbow even went as far as to break the door down if she didn't open it right now. After her threat we started to hear a strange noise coming from the other side. It sounded like something was charging up which made us nervous. In a split second we quickly got out of the way as Sunset shot a magic fireball straight through the door leaving a burnt hole in the middle. After she fired Sunset reached her boiling point and warned us one more time to go away and if we didn't she would burn all of us alive. We nervously tried to stand our ground but when we heard her charge up for another shot we got out of there as fast as we can. That was the last time we tried to approach her."

After Rarity finished Twilight remained visibly shocked, the thought of Sunset threatening to murder someone sent chill's down her spine at the thought of her friend going down a dark path.

"We know your disappointed in us sugarcube and we don't blame ya if ya hate us " Applejack says as tears started to form in her eyes

"What we did was not only selfish but uncalled for" Rarity tearfully added

"We just wanted Sunny back so bad we didn't think how it would effect her, your right were no better than the Siren's" PInkie added as her puffy hair turned straight and her own tears forming as well.

"I should have never accused her of being Anon a Miss!" Fluttershy tearfully shouted. "Regardless of how much of a bully she was in the past I had no right to accuse her like that I fucked up I FUCKED UP BAD I'M NO ELEMENT OF KINDNESS I'M A MONSTER!!!!!!!!!"

" Your not a monster fluttershy!" Dash shouted. "It's my fault if I hadn't came up with that stupid idea in the first place Sunset might have given us a chance over time but I chose the coward's way out . In the end I was only loyal to myself and not one of my best friends.

" I'm no element of generosity i'm a selfish bitch" Rarity said sadly.

"I'm no element of honesty I was only honest with myself and it almost cost me a family member!" Applejack shouted

" I don't deserve the element of laughter, I cant even make one person happy" Pinkie said as streams of tears fell from her eye's

The Rainboom's said no more and just broke down in tears. Twilight watched as each of them balled their eye's out. As disappointed as she was at them seeing them in this state was too much for her to handle. The pain they've been through these past few month's trying to make amends, getting attacked two times, there sisters punishing themselves , and worse losing the one person they called family. She thought back to her friends and family back at home the sad and depressed look's they gave her when they apologized for what they did to her at the wedding. After that she knew they cared deeply for her enough to show them how sorry they are and she knew deep down the rainboom's cared deeply abut Sunset and regretted everything they've done to her over winter break. After a few minutes Twilight made her decision.

"It's ok" She said

The five girl's stopped crying after hearing her response and wondered what she meant.

Pinkie sniffed and then spoke "What do you mean?"

"i'll allow it Pinkie" Twilight said

"What?" Rainbow Dash said

"I'll let this one slide Dash" She replied

"Twi are ya being serious right now, your just gonna let this happen?" Applejack said

"Yes i am" Twilight replied. "Now don't get me wrong I'm still and will remain disappointed in all of this but a part of me doesn't really blame you for resorting to such a drastic measure, especially after what Sunset did to you guys each time you tried apologizing. When I saw each of you break down it reminded me of my friends back at home. Something similar happened to me last year and my friends, brother and Princess Celestia herself spent the whole week showing how sorry they are. That's when I realized that they really did care about me and after hearing your explanations I can see you really do care about Sunset.

"Does that mean?" Pinkie nervously asked as her hair started to go back to normal

"I'll let you guy's continue with this stunt" Twilight answered

The girls gave a sigh of relief as Pinkie jumped up and cheered as her puffy pink hair finally returned to normal.

"But listen I still and will never approve of this. I want you to promise me, the next time you girl's do something to damage your friendship I want you to solve it the right way by giving a sincere apology or wait for forgiveness don't resort to magic to solve your problem's and if Sunset ever get's her memory back I wont help you this time you have to solve it yourselves, GOT IT?" Twilight sternly asked

The five girl's smiled and walked over and brought Twilight in a group hug which she happily returned.

"Thank you Twi" Applejack said

"We promise not to mess up this time" Rainbow Dash added

" We'll be the best friends Sunset's ever had" Pinkie reassured

"We wont let down our elements" Fluttershy said

"That's a promise of a lifetime darling" Rarity finished

" I know you will girls" Twilight replied. Once the group hug ended Twilight got up and was ready to depart but had one more thing to do.

"Before I go I want to give you something, please place your phones on the table" She instructed

The girl's did as she instructed and placed there phones on the table. Twilight then coated each of them with a stream of magic and a mysterious icon soon appeared on each of there screens.

" What's this?" Dash asked

" I placed a communication spell on each of your phones" Twilight answered. "If there's an emergency and Sunset's not able to use the journal just press the icon and text your message to me and I'll be sure to reply as soon as I can"

With that each of the girls said thank you to Twilight as she got ready to return to her world. But before she stepped out the door she took one last look at the girls and spoke one last time.

"Make me proud girls" Twilight said with a smile

"We wont let ya down twilight" They said all together

With nothing left to say Twilight waved goodbye one last time and headed out the door ready to return to her world.

Author's Note:

And there we have it my very first fanfic finished and boy it was a DOOOOOOZIE. Now im sure your all gonna be going "Why would you end it like that after what they did:twilightangry2:?" Well you see there have been many dark Anon a Miss endings where She doesn't forgive them right away or only forgives Pinkie and Fluttershy. I felt that Everyone deserves a second chance as said in the bible no matter what you did the lord will always forgive and forget there will always be second chance's. Anyways I hope you enjoyed my first fanfic I know it wasn't the most perfect fimfic on the site but like I said its my first attempt. I cant say for sure when I post another story on the site but I promise to improve and insure I have a Story to everyone's liking.:pinkiehappy: Anyways thank you all for reading My story and special thanks to The Blue EM2 for the pointers and the chapter 1 edit's, until next time see ya around folks😉.

p.s. if you noticed the chapter seemed incomplete earlier that's because I accidentally pressed save I didn't know it would still be viewed just thought i'd clarify that if any of you got confused:twilightblush:

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Comments ( 19 )

"I should have never accused her of being Anon a Miss!" Fluttershy tearfully shouted. "Regardless of how much of a bully she was in the past I had no right to accuse her like that I fucked up I FUCKED UP BAD I'M NO ELEMENT OF HONESTY I'M A MONSTER!!!!!!!!!"

Ok...SERIOUSLY WTF !!!!! Ok one Fluttershy is the Kindness.

lord will always forgive and forget there will always be second chance's. yes that is true...to bad NOTHING LIKE THAT HAPPENED! THERE IS NO SHORT CUT!! WHAT THEY DID IS WRONG!
Forgiveness must be given out of FREE WILL Like twilight did for her family and Friends and teacher.
You can't force it or trick someone or just erase their minds if not memories!

There Is nothing to show what happen is the same!
They took a massive easy way out, did nothing to return her memories! That is WRONG!
I get why they thought it was the only choice,but it no excuse!

Maybe if they had returned her memories it would shown how much they are for her. Maybe maybe be worthy of forgiveness!

the Principals should done something for Sunset transferred her out of there if it was that bad for her, or gotten her some bloody therapy!
Now Flash is Taking advantage of Sunset!

Ugghh!

Because Flash was also guilty of hurting Sunset as well greatly now that she can't remember everything she dating the same person who hurt her?!
It's no different then say a .....................I hate to say it I really do.

But it reminds me of this movie a girl was raped and afterwards met this guy who supported her and cared for her.
Went all out to take care of her, seem to be a great guy and was...too bad he was the one who raped her.

Yup it was the same guy! He started to take care of her due to feeling guilty for what he done to her.
She never knew till later, and no matter what it wasn't right.

Flash hurt Sunset and now because he feels guilty and such wants to make it up for ehr, thou he never get a chance WAIT. Sunset lost her memories she can't remember what we did what i did?! Flash smirks
Well well time to. Licks hands smooths hair. "To play my moves and get her Winsk at the audience and swaggers over.

Not bad
It's a bit rushed but not bad
Good job!

I just finished reading this and I was afraid this would happen, the Memory Stone came into play but I didn't expect it to be used like this and happen the way it did. Also quick reminder Fluttershy is the Element of Kindness. And now I'm sorry to say this but I hate how the story ended. I'm not a religious person or anything but while it's true to forgive and forget I can't agree with what the Rainbooms did. Forgiveness has to be earned, not just giving because what if something like this happens again?

Also it's funny how the Rainbooms welcome Sci-Twi who is a complete and other stranger with open arms considering they never meet. Plus what about the event's of the Friendship Games? Sorry I'm getting off topic.

Point is what the Rainbimbo's did was selfish, stupid and downright evil! It was bullshit that they took advantage of Sunset and she was brainwashed like that. I have to agree with Diablo4000 on how Flash is taken advantage of this because even he hurted Sunset with hate mail. If anything all the students at CHS and the Rainbooms had to do was just leave Sunset alone and move on with their lives! If she didn't ever want to speak to them again or have them in her life that was her choice. They should have done the right thing and give her memory's back so it would show that they truely did care about her and wouldn't take advantage like that. Though I will agree on one thing, I didn't want Sunset to murder anyone as she would later have the death of someone on her conscience. But the beat down should have been on AJ, Rainbow and Rarity.

I'm sorry but I just didn't like the ending at all. But it was your story so it was your call so best of luck on your next story.

Good Luck ALoneWolf.

It’s an interesting concept and not bad for a first story. I would advise though that you do more showing than telling on your next one. Think of reading a story like watching a movie, because for most everyone it kinda is like watching a mental movie. In this, all the drama and details have been told to us, especially that “flash back” by applejack. We don’t get to experience the memory, we are just told the details. So using my movie comparison, a great story will allow the reader to experience the events as they happen, which is where all the drama is. The way you have done it is as if we had a slide show of the events with a narrator providing exposition of what was happening. We don’t have time to get emotionally invested in those scenes because we are simply being told the events and not experiencing them. Of course, that would mean your story would be exponentially longer as the vast majority of it would be about the events before and during the camp, and it is daunting to write that much, but it’s the difference between a synopsis of a story and an actual story. Best of luck on your next one.

I can’t with this fic. It’s way too rushed for my liking, and the grammar was some of the worst I’ve seen

The fuck is this bullshit? So instead of solving a problem the right way, with patience, repentance and genuine emotion. I should instead, insist that I do not deserve the punishments I receive and instead take the easy as fuck way out because I cannot endure the very thing I put them through?

Great life-lesson you fucking idiot.

Edit: the lord forgives and forgets when genuine repentance is given. Never in the bible has superficial thought or actions lead to any positive outcome. A man must do the will of god as it is absolute, he would sacrifice his only son for god, by his obedience and absolute devotion, the one above provided.

These creatures of your making cannot endure the hell they unjustly made for another. And in their selfishness they understand their evil but DO NOT correct it or attempt to. This is the differance between a sinner and a saint. A saint is not one who is sinless but one who tries to repent and correct his mistakes. A sinner is one who sees his mistakes but ignores them, consequences included.

These mortal beings made no attempt to correct their sin. For if they truely cared they would help the one they called 'friend'.

Only by perseverance and genuine devotion is true forgiveness ever given.

I pity the fool who does not understand this concept.

9679595
I assume you are referring to Apple Bloom's attempted suicide?

9679626
I'm referring to this ending, this resolution, their action and everything else. No one actually repented. Sure they regret it because they got punished by the divine but that is it. They never wanted forgiveness, they wanted her. If they did want her forgiveness they would have acted like actual friends and helped her when she was wiped.

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Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed the story, I chose to just use the aftermath of the friendship games where they befriend everyone because I wanted to focus mainly on the last few months leading up to the memory incident at Camp. Also the reason i chose Fluttershy and Pinkie for the beat down scene is because since they're the most sensitive characters in the series they figured Sunset would give them a chance to talk to her.

9679659
Fair point. It wasn't the best course of action, but the best-laid plans of Mice and Men gang aft aglay.

9679661
I can see your point about Fluttershy and Pinkie. But in all honesty Twilight would not be okay with what the Rainbooms did. Hell if anything she would ask Discord to help find the stone and undo what they did. Because Orrm is right about with what he said the Rainbooms. Instead of being patient, trying to repeant the right way with Sunset they took the easy way out like a bunch of cowards.

There was a better way to end this and using THAT was a poor excuse.

I'm sorry 😒 but that isn't a good idea! I don't like the idea of the girls wiping out Snset's memories and Twilight going to give an okay on this. I really hope that you are making a sequel to this story and have Sunset get her memories back.

9679595

A man must do the will of god as it is absolute, he would sacrifice his only son for god, by his obedience and absolute devotion, the one above provided.

If God told me to strap my son to an altar, plunge a knife into his chest, and then praise God... I would tell God to fuck off. And go join the rest of His Goa'uld brethren.

And I wouldn't let God pull the "I provided you your son." thing either.

I'd tell Him "No. My son was provided for me when I put my dick in my wife. You had nothing to do with that. This is the 21st century. Get with the times pal. Unless you want a rocket launcher straight in the face. You want human sacrifice? Go to the past. Otherwise, fuck off."

9808361
My argument to god is simply metaphorical, you seem to have taken it literally.

Then let us.

Let God = True, for this equation. (Back to algebra we go)

If we say that there is an all powerful hand in the sky then, who are you to deny it? If God exists then all things are done by his will. Of we take your argument, the existence of a greater being, then we would have to acknowledge that indeed he is all and all is he.

And, in that case I ask, who are you to deny such a being?

In that case, you would be forced to have faith, no?


My point, oppose to your, rather confrontational statement, was to use the idea of karmatic intervention to express my faith that once a mistake is repented properly, all will be well. In doing so I pointed out a key flaw in this story.

For one bad action, one must do good or undergo penance in repose. The idea that a sinner who repents in equal measure shall be given mercy.

It is quite a simple concept.

For whatever reason, though, you appear to have missed it.

Edit: looking back, I suppose I pity you, a fool who appears to not understand, or perhaps you do and choose not to.

9808380

Then you should not have invoked the words "God" and "bible". For the moment you did, you brought up Christianity. Whether that was your intention or not. Let this be a lesson to you. In the future, choose your words with more care.

9808383
I have nothing to say anymore. I have already spoken, It was used as a metaphor.

Dear god, do I really have to bolden words for you t' understand?

If something is difficult, could I not compare it to hell? Language is a diverse thing that allows creative expression of ideas, of which I use freely. However, of one is unable to fully comprehend such language, and by extension the meaning behind the message, then I suppose such a person would be pitied, no?

I know not your quarrel with religion, and frankly I do not care. It is clear that you are, for some reason, taking deliberate offense to using anything "holy", despite the fact that It was a simple comparison and Christianity itself is not the focus of my original arguement.

Rather, I use an incident in the bible to orchestrate a point and in doing so I relate a 'lesson' comparable to one from a fable.

Thereby critiquing one of the strong flaws in this piece with a well-founded argument and a widely-known example that is simple to understand.

I will repeat, I am not a pastor for you to preach your frustrations on whatever religion you do not favor, I am an individual with a command of the human language and nothing more, it is not my problem if you cannot differentiate a main idea from a comparison.

And here I thought the comic was one giant steaming pile of horseshit. Now it's even bigger with this. And yes I read this, thing, before I commented.

Yeah, this is pretty weak. There's no way Twilight would just accept them screwing over Sunset so they could forget what unfaithful assholes they were.

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