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A night in June. A concert in a large venue goes from joyful music experience to horror show in an instant. How does one handle themselves when a dear friend/loved one lay on the brink of death? With just one. last. song....
Cover art is not mine. I would gladly give credit to the artist.
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I like this... Good job.
9666406
Thanks.
Where'd you get the cover art?
9666516
I believe I just looked up "angel MLP" with the tag "pony" on Google images.
A little fast-paced, but still rather nicely done sad one shot. I have to say, one thing that prevented me from fully enjoying the atmosphere were the technical aspects of the story. Leaving aside some random typos and words missing here and there, the faulty punctuation in direct speech is what really caught my attention and prohibited me from directing it back to the plot. Same goes for the redundant slashes, parentheses and the one *sigh*. This is a piece of literature, not a comic strip. Such things should never appear in a story for how distracting they are. I can explain more if you wish.
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I'm going to be as polite as I can right now: While I appreciate your criticism, I am in no shape to edit where edits need to be. Primarily because of my eye sight being no-so-great (hence why I have my phone rather close to my face as I type).
9667597
I apologize and I’m sorry to hear that, I understand this is a sensitive matter for you. I myself struggle with a worsening autoimmune uveitis, having to look at my phone less than ten centimetres, so I can imagine what you are going through. Also, feel free to disregard my question, but have you tried contacting someone who can edit your stories for you? I believe it would really help them shine.
9667663
I understand. Unfortunately for me, my main editor and my backup editor are both out of town (in fact, one is out of state). With this being said, I was on my own essentially. Now I'm already on a tight schedule and I wanted this story out before a specific date. That's why it feels rather rushed.
I remember seeing Grimmie's death on the news.
10951298
As do I....and it was a hard day for me.
10951347
You should write about October 1st, 2017.
It deserves recognition.
10951363
I wish I could, but I was too terrified that day. My aunt that I live with was in Las Vegas that week. When what happened happened I was frantically trying to get a hold of her or her boyfriend. I didn't know what they status was until that following Tuesday (thankfully they were fine and got home safe).
10951481
shit maybe i'll write it
10951499
Go right on ahead dude.