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Somnambulent

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“Luna? Is everything alright?”
“All is right, sister, just a peculiar incident that doesn't leave my mind. A week ago, one of our subjects told me there is a pony that doesn't sleep, and I am beginning to believe her.”

A thanks to an offsite friend, who prereaded and persuaded me to publish this story.
Also available in russian.

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Rockstar_Raccoon

Rockstar_Raccoon #1 · Feb 7th, 2023 · 2 · ·

Huh, neat: multiple little twists in this one. I will say, I felt the ending was kind of abrupt, and would have liked to see more of that play out, rather than just be told that she fixed it by drawing an art piece.

Spectre-srs

Spectre-srs #2 · Feb 16th, 2023 · · ·

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in retrospect it does feel kinda crumpled, but l haven't really had anything more to say there and l still don't know how it could be made better
l guess l'll try better the next time

Rockstar_Raccoon

Rockstar_Raccoon #3 · Feb 16th, 2023 · · ·

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Could add another chapter, if you're still inspired on this one. I'm a bit surprised it didn't get more attention, seeing as it's a decently written mystery: I got linked to it from the Optimalverse Discord as such.