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Ok, this looks to be a lot of fun, definitely wanna see more.

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Heh you will and it'll be a future book for Amazon i promise

1. quickmeme.com/img/aa/aa04545ca38e8696e00c8cb698da9a0b2190d12110f952461ad6ab2e41992576.jpg seriously needs an editor

2.

"Oh god, Keep going.” Sparks seemed to be flying as he felt Twilight going right back down, as it seemed like the two had switched places his head was pulsing as he thrust his hips up into Margaret's lips, as she seemed to gag

he thrust his hips up into Margaret's lips, as she seemed to gag

Margaret's

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Having read your comments, you are one magnificent bastard.

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Pfft oh god XD i just realized that mistake well margaret is Trixie or her character in the future book god i feel so silly missing that XD

I think you definitely need an editor.

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I'll be getting my normal editor on this for when i get it ready for the book adaptation don't worry

Besides the grammar and spelling errors, it's great. I'm looking forward to more and the book version

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Thanks heh i promise it'll be better when its in the book small changes and additions but it'll be pleasent

I'm sorry but this is unreadable, please get an editor.

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This is the rough draft the good version is set up for Amazob when the book is completed

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I will be, even said that it'll be an actual book lol

.....Prussia was a real country. Its where the Germans came from.

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... I actually forgot about that, I feel stupid and silly. :pinkiegasp: Please forgive me XD but if it's conseltation her book counterpart thats in the work is Cathreen the great from russia

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Also her name is Catherine.

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Which I did immediatly XD thank god for rereading and editors

“Another thing is an older relic; I hate to pass off as such an old and valuable item to me. But for such a young strapping mine, I think I’ll make do with about a hundred dollars.” Astral raised his eyebrow looking at the woman. He wondered; ‘Is she serious?’

Is she the merchant's granny or something?
Bcoz dat sounds like he would do

“As you wish Master.” There was a second before Astral heard fingers snapping. There was nothing at first as he began feeling a small tingle around his cock. Then without warning, it began to glow. He watched over it some as He was surprised his cock glowed bright red, and changing from its five inches, growing till it looked to be nine inches long, while stiff as a board. He couldn’t help but think it looked even thicker.

Astral: "Oh gawd, i have a radioactive dick"

What is monsterotica anyway?

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Genies are considered Monster girls

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Wait my bad Monsterotica was a word i made up its basicly Monster and erotica combind. A little bit of fun and laugh for a series involving Monster girls and human fucking. It's also a goofy pun

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Lol you asked XD its basicly an idea for a book series also

did you also post this on Fanfiction as a Naruto story? Because I've seen this over there as well, with the MC as Naruto

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That I did lol, Mr.Midnight01

You seemed a little inconsistent with the years Twilight and Trixie were last out of the lamp.

Chapter 2 they said 800 years. Then last chapter Twilight said 500 and immediately after it Astral says 300.

Well you kind of lose track of time while being in a lamp. For a while and also im sure people can get time wrong XD

Quick tip: writing conventions commonly suggest putting a comma before the name when characters address one another. That helps avoid misunderstandings. Take this example:

"I want to come inside Rainbow Dash!"

versus

"I want to come inside, Rainbow Dash!"

I hope you found this comment useful. :twilightsmile:

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heh I'll make sure to fix that for the book XD thank you great derp

Wasn't it Astral Shadow?

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Yes I just discovered the mistakes and currently fixing them I must have not gotten them all when i was doing the normal book changes and fixing it all

His wish is gonna backfire on him

o please tell me he bangs raven

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It could happen though remember this it's going to be a future book so in the actual one it could happen heh

Poor Trixie and oh shit!

flabbier gassed

R/Boneappletea

Great... I hope he wished Blueblood forgets the existence of genies

Kidnapping is pretty evident now

Why didn't astral wish for Blueblood to forget about the genies? Seems like an obvious thing

.....KILL HIM.

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Genies cant kill lol also astral needs to find him well hopefully

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Cause plot wins. And Astral can be too trusting

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