Equestrian Satanister

by Reizthefakebrony

Grevious announcement

Author's Note:

Although only few would be interested to this fanfic, I have to say it, this fanfic is on the verge of being cancelled. Yep. That is what I should had talk about. But first let me tell you something. I had a "momentary mental breakdown" that I won't even spoil the details that lasted until 2021... although I don't want to be in the same condition ever again... There's nothing to worry about since I had recovered for now.

What I had done in this whole 2021? Three things: lazyness, focusing on other things and taking the time to focus on the future of most of my fanfics. Let me explain. I have the intention to revamp some of the chapter of the works that I had rushed in few moments before 2021 and, in this fanfic case, something really different, in a small sense.

In this fanfic case... well. I am going to reboot it. Especially since the original fanfic made by Midnightmare247's the Elements of Insanity (with the Mane 6 turned into their creepypasta selves not the InvertedShadow version) being the source of this really admitted infamous work has been disappeared along with her now being abandoned account of fanfiction net.

Probably because she was harassed by EOI toxic fanboys and grown disgusted with the toxicity of the community, which prompted her to abodoning her account or delete it entirely from the web deviantart included before migrating into another forum but this is a blatant conjecture of mine so don't take it as a gospel.

Don't try this at home.

So, talking about this thing, I will eventually cancel this fanfic and replace it with his own spiritual successor in the same day of release. In the meantime, if you want to take some slight note of some of the cringiest moments of the fanfic in order to elaborate something better than what I had wrote in that current plot, you are still in time... well... because I have other things to do in this moment.

Sorry for the disturbance in your activity.

And have a very serene day.

Edit 1: grammar fixed in this announcement

Edit 2: the ones who wants to ask somenthing about this decision are welcome

Warning. Eviction. This fanfic is going to be cancelled in the future. To the ones who want to download it's pages before the complete erasure from the site can do it until they can. I hope that you weren't bothered with this inconvenience since this fanfic was a obvious fail and that lazyness won't even screw with me in the last moment. And with that good day readers.

Comments

[Starlight Nova]

What was so bad about this story?

[Reizthefakebrony]

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Despite having retained the idea looking particulary cool, that should be obvious since the first chapter, it has many flaw.

 

- rushed development addorned by a terribile cover

- grammar, characterization and storytelling errors

- plot holes

- a writing worth of a sixteen grade Fallout Equestera copycat

- poorly executed ideas accompanied with a generic anti heroine with nearly to zero personality

- most of the dialogues being uninspired at best, meh at middle and lousy at worst

- the manga being almost if not compatible with the context of the fanfic in which it was involved

 

I get that you may have found the concept being interesting but this fanfic was done in a very lazy fashion.

 

Keep in mind that I have ponderend about the grand scheme of how the story should come out. I had some ideas about how it should be developed. But as the time passed by, I came to realize that maybe I wouldn't work in this way.

 

Also, about the elements, crowd logic wants that if you want to put the effettive rappresentation of the creepypasta counterparts of the mane six, maybe bother to give more reason behind their turning wicked point, instead of being one dimensional, something which I fall into it unintentionaly.

 

I deemed the manga Satanister being incompatible with the context of the story because of it's context.

 

Let me explain.

 

The manga is a psycological horror action conterei around the Satanister, a golden spiked gauntlet armed nun close to the devil, going around investigating the wherebouts of a serial killer while bashing any psychopaths in her way. She is quite of a punk. And took a middle school girl with her as her unwitting disciple. Her ordeal leader the duo to a literal fucking fighting tournament among psychopaths from around the world on a forsaken island hosted by a cultist like mafia.

 

And there is a problem with this.

 

I couldn't get around this issues withous having these two things clashing on some points. Because there is not enough satanic elements to play with since the occultism is used as a background. Yes, ok, the Satanister has a esoteric background, the gauntlets contains the spirits of the psychopaths killed by the nun, there are some unnatural elements and during the finals of the tournament there is a ritual where the winner will sacrifice the corpses of the losers to summon a demon, obtaining evil powers or some bullcrap like that, but putting aside these things, I couldn't make this mix work even if is setted years after the events of the manga.

 

Also, there is another visibile issue, specifically the fight scenes. The way the first two twisted elements, Applejerk and Butchershy, were defeated.

 

In the original now deleted fanfic Elements of Insanity by Midnigthmare247, her equivalent of Elements of Insanity (the creepypasta versions, as she intended, not the Inverteshadow's one) were so powerful to cruently overthrow Cadence, Luna, Celestia and even their corrupter Satania. I don't even know if Satania intended this to happen but whavever. In the beggining of this pseudo sequel however they had even killed Discord.

 

And yet it was enough for the protagonist, Sara Morgani, to kill two of them with just fireweapons and brute force in the most lamest way possible, something which actually, of course, I literally admit now.

 

Even thought Applejerk was seemingly the weakest of the group due to having just her brute force while Butchershy being a weapon master when she doesn't use her tools to dissect woodland creatures while corrupting other animals, the way their fight was written looked like that, as powerful as the two twisted mares can be, almost contradicted what was enstablished in Midnightmare247's original fanfic, something which I think, I realized too late. Sara destroyed them like they were not challenge to her, nevermind the fact that they were individually alone.

 

I would have checked up the original fanfic this one was based on to take some reference bit, as I said before, both the fanfic and her account were deleted them declared abbandoned.

 

This is the whole pletora of flaws that this fanfic has. And as I was writing I came to assune that this fanfic is not terribile. Is just only inept. I don't mind mediocrity as long as doesn’t become too annoying to ignore.

But seriously even if I fix the many errors of the current story, I don’t think that will come out as I had once liked, it’s like a fact of story extetics.

 

As I said before, this story will be rebooted, but that will be made in a new form after being rebuild from scratch. However I will download the chapters of these to use as added basis to combine with the direction I will take.

 

I will thanks the ones who watched this story, collected this work and even the ones who voted dislike for whatever reason they had because I could see why.

 

Until the next time.

Edit 1: grammar fixed in this comment

Edit 2: be warned that the reboot thing would take some time so take it easy