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Wise Cracker

Just some guy, who likes chaos magic and ponies. That's about it.


Apple Bloom is proud to join her grandfather on a trip to the Vanhoover Food Court: the biggest annual gathering of every pony who's anypony in the food business.

While doing her rounds as a proud representative of the Apple family, she finds a Unicorn colt with a unique cutie mark problem: he wants to be a farmer, but he doesn't know how. Everything he tries seems to be missing something.

Luckily for him, Apple Bloom is perfectly qualified to show him how to find the true meaning of his talent and figure out what he needs to do to be happy with his work.

And absolutely nothing will go wrong.

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 8 )

You should tell real life to get out of the way and let you write! :pinkiehappy:

Looking forward to the next update!

Heh. Thanks, and don't worry. I always publish with enough backlog to keep updates at least consistent. Chapter 2 is as good as ready, it's the other two that still need tweaking.

As for telling real life to get out of the way... I'd get in trouble with the government if I did that, let me put it like that :twilightsheepish: It's job stuff, mostly. Distracting job stuff.

I'm surprised Flim & Flam aren't in the Health Food Section.

They had their representative in the first pavillion during Chapter 1, along with the rest of the scammers :twilightsmile:

Can't imagine why they'd be excluded from the more prestigious halls, though... :trixieshiftright:

Based on your Author's Note at the end of Chapter One, I reckon you made a good decision changing the story to the way it is now.

The first chapter is great.
It opens up the story well.
I like this Apple Bloom you have created.

Liked the bit with the Yaks, that was nice and very in character for them. The idea that while yaks smash, smashing isn't random or wild, but exact and controlled, is a good one. I bet there might be a minor language issue where they have lots of different words for degrees and types of smashing (you know, the old 50 different words for snow myth), but as there is only one word for it in ponish, it all ends up sounding the same.

I think Apple Bloom's growing realization of what the truth of String Bean situation is was handled really well. I was worried that the fact the he was obviously Poppyhock kid would be played as a big reveal, but having her quickly put it together relieved that. It's going to be interesting to see what solution she comes up with.

When cheerleading, sure. Gotta make absolutely certain the outfits don't spontaneously explode in the middle of the routine, after all...

It's at the end that things need to explode, for a big finale. :pinkiecrazy:

The yaks were fun to write, glad it worked. With regards to Poppyhock, there's always a fine balance of managing expectations like that, and subverting them where appropriate. String Bean's family situation is one such example.

Oh, and on a more random note: yes, Mister Sock will be in the last chapter, and he will be pointy-eared and logical. I'm already this far down with the Star Trek references, might as well. :rainbowlaugh:

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