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bakersong


favorite character is applejack and i have been a brony for a while now

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very interesting concept/backstory

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Had this idea for a little while but it took me a long time to figure out how I wanted to present it. Thanks for being the first comment by the way!

I’m surprised this got approved since I thought ponies had to be in the initial upload also i’m Waiting for the Chevok’s Gun that is the forgotten introduced in Chapter 1

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I don't think you need them in the first chapter or anything, as long as it's setting things up. As for the memorial for the forgotten, there may be just a little more too it but I ain't gonna share what that is right now.

Edit: Don't quote me on that though, but otherwise if it was a requirement then it would make it much harder for some stories to get started. But these first few chapters are just trying to do some world building and all that.

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i just finished reading the chapters and i like it. setting up a future for earth like this and for ones a plausible way how humans and pony's meet.
lucid dreaming genies ! :D

there's so much potential for back and forth interaction and bringing even new/more characters into equestria

hope we don't have to wait too long to see the reaction of the pony's to a human ghost xD

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It's coming very soon, after orientation they get assigned to a squad. Depending on when the last time they traveled will depend on when the person gets to go on their first mission.

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Yeah I just heard once that I’d say chapter 4 has ponies then you’re suppose to post or at least upload all four chapters to the site I guess it’s to ensure that a pony fiction website actually has pony fiction

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Well, looked over the rules of the site and didn't find anything that suggests you have to have them in the story early. But the upcoming chapter should start things off, so hopefully, it'll be all good either way.

awesome cant wait for the next chapter :)

they took it pretty well, the guard is not that easy to scare. good she meat them first i guess ^^

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Yup, though it'll be a chapter or two before she gets to go tours around. There are a few questions she wants to ask, and then there are living arrangments to be made. Then she'll be allowed to go around town so to speak, and another thing is it's night time in Equestria at the moment so not many regular ponies out and about.

Edit: Not to mention the ponies she initially saw were more in one of the major cities in Equestria, hence why there were more out for her to see.

i love it how and where this story is going, keep it up :)

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So, are you okay with the rating switching? Also, what is your opinion on what is going to happen with Long Shot? Because somepony has to notify him for his termination, and that job usually falls to the commanding officer.

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the rating is up to you, im ok with that.

i think longshot would fit good for a short ore even long term antagonist character.
i expect him to flipp out and having rai on the sideline wont help his tempertandrum then xD
he had it coming tho.

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:pinkiecrazy: He'll be around for a minute, though he might be just a little hesitant later on with what's about to happen or it might just fuel him even more.

very nice chapter :)

this one was very enjoyable to read, relaxing. cant have a first day in ponyville without pinki ^^

awesome fun chapter ! :D

It's interesting that her soul body needs food and water. Would have imagined only her physical body would need such things. Or is it tied to the magic turning her body opaque again?

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It's more tied to the magic thing since it essentially gives the person a type of a second body. Thus needs nutrients in order to sustain it, at least while she posses it.

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