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I actually forgot I wrote this. It sat ready to publish for about two weeks until someone over on PTFG asked me if I was going to publish the changeling TF story I'd been hinting at. Well, the answer is yes!

Heck I love this, only thing I would have added is him pleasing her dick with his other holes.

Frickin amazing work!

"Of course you do. Let's get my big, hunky stallion home so we can get more cozy and you can relax ." Starling stood up, and the last word she spoke practically dragged me to my hooves—I would follow her anywhere.

You are geting veeeery sleeeepyyyy...

I really enjoyed reading this and I’m not one for flop of any type!

This was a great story. And furthermore, a show of how love can cross even the greatest of gaps; blast through thee greatest of barriers. Sappy? a bit, maybe. Trite? Absolutely. But still true.
Standing Proud and Iridescence learned to love each other for who and what they are. And judging by the description, they Reformed together. I say that that love like that should be celebrated.

Speaking of, this story gets the full 10 on the :yay:itude meter! I say long life and happiness to the two of them. I'll be watching for more stories oof this quality!

I absolutely loved this story. There was a whole lot of emotion in the writing, and the developing relationship between Iridescence and Standing was a joy to see unfold.

Heavy armor sat comfortably on my back

I really wish he'd stop doing that, other ponies in the Guard were starting to talk. :derpytongue2:

A wonderful little story :heart:

I WOULD have liked this were it not for the whole "Queen Mandible to test Canterlot's defenses. We selected a number of targets that were to be tested, and placed limits on what her changelings would be permitted to do during the attack." She focused on me. "Turning one of the Royal Guard into a changeling was not part of the conditions.""
I know thats not whats happening but it gives kinda rape-y vibes to me and makes me really uncomfortable. I get that ultimately nothing morally wrong was done besides them paying her to mind control this guy but it settles really awfully in the pit of my stomach.
Even if it was an actual invasion and she did that I would have been okay, but it being just an exercise makes me feel eugh

9753849 That was the whole gag of the story. She was penetration testing.

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Oh you're dreadful hahah

This is... almost perfect. Not sure which I'd choose faced with alternatives like these, but otherwise the experience is amazing. The big sell - he seems to have none of the hive mind thing going, so he remains who he is mentally (although whether or not changelings actually are like that here is unclear). And the body is just a shell, in the end.

Honestly did not expect to enjoy one of your stories sensually. An excellent job.

What a beautiful story :) I'd have made the same choice in the end, and I love that he so eagerly enjoys the feeling of another's power within his mind the same way that I do. I wish there were more stories that explored that kind of thing, far too many stories just use mind control or hypnosis as a tool to accomplish some other act but I love it as the act itself.

Infinite food! Changeling hunger solved!

You've also somehow made the feeling of skin sloughing off sound really nice.

9773883 I'll spare you from the images that inspired this. It was a somewhat gory comic about Twilight becoming a dragon.

Actually, here is where they start. You have been warned—this is gory.

any plans to write a sequal?

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Nice comics.
Days later and I still have a craving for more changeling transformations. Dammit Damaged I think you've awoken something in me.

9777808 Heh. Well, might I suggest some other fics?

TOnce Bitten
Ponies are going missing, and despite his wedding being just months away, Shining Armor is willing to do anything to get to the bottom of it.
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EShining Chitin
Shining Armor finds a hole in his hoof. It goes all the way through and, along with other recent changes, makes him believe he is turning into a changeling!
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Would you continue Shining Chitin Redux? I am under the impression that it wasn't finished. At least the changeling express incident is still waiting to happen.

9808669 Further continuance is not planned at this time.

"You're a big idiot, you know that Standing Proud?" She rocked to the side and onto her hooves. "I could disable you and completely destroy your mind, then leave before anypony noticed."

Was really hoping they actually go ahead with that and do something like this (with consent), but oh well. Giving that he's turning into a changeling, and also giving off love, does that mean he'll become brightly colored?

I loved the beginning and the clop part, but the ending was kinda...unconvincing. You just defied the very basic law of physics, and that's it? I mean, I can imagine Standing being able to feed her because he still has a pony mind, but how the heck did it work in the opposite direction?
It's disappointing when an otherwise good story ends with some irrational plot twist like that, without even an attempt to give some believable explanation.

Loved this.

The ending was odd. A new changeling queen, Cadence, test of defenses, and more. All immediate and right after another. If spread out among a few chapters it wouldn't have felt so overwhelming.

10080543 The end was more as a gag. Iridescence was penetration testing (red-teaming in this case) Canterlot's defenses.

I love this... I'm going through your stories, and I'm liking all of them so far!
There's not enough mind control and TF for the sake of it on this site. It's always just a tool, not an emotional and physical experience, which, to me anyway, completely misses the point.

Oh, I was listening to a Helltaker fan song, "Take Me" by MiatriSs, and the lyrics fit the story really well! Maybe it'll inspire you, should you decide to bless the world with more lewd bug pony stories?

10319232 Yeah. Too often I see mind control used and then done, where—like you say—it's just a means to an end.

For me, the chase is better than the catch.

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