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No offense, but the chapter felt a bit rushed along with there being some grammar errors. If you like, I could become your editor and help you pace the story a little better along with fixing any grammar errors.
nice work
I would accept good offer
Concept is nice, but this really needs more time editing.
nice work
And it's being rushed like chill
This story is a collection of run-on sentences.
This story is almost too incoherent to read.
I do apologize for my previous comment your story is amazing its sweet simple and to the point
you were creative, you had a great idea with great potential, but you were very fast ... having a rapid development and having a quick history are two different things, I say this without criticizing that you did it too fast, but thinking that you planned do something more dynamic and objective.
a pity that ended like this and nobody wanted to continue this story with so much potential, but who knows one day ...
hope is the last candle to go out.
How is it their fault?
If he had a problem with them lying then why not confront them when he saw them?
That’s an interesting way to take down a hero.
I thought they said it was an accident or suicide.
But they keep changing the story.
Isn’t it your fault for not being careful with your identities?
Well that sucks.
Hello there I was wondering with your permission if I could continue this story. I really enjoyed this and I definitely saw the direction you were taking this and I would love to finish off the masterpiece
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Go ahead