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whats the image source?
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I'll pm you it
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ooh source?
nice work.
Needs a bit of touchup, Shining is referred to as Gleaming Shield without it being mentioned that is what she is going as, and Cadance once refers to her as 'her son'..
You could probably attract a lot more readers with fewer typos in the description.
Heh, would be funny if shining got knocked up
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Yeah sorry heh though it was a bit of a joke and refrence from milf club though my mistake. I just went in and fixed it though so it no longer says watched her son
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Ill have to fix that mind letting me know what my mistakes are?
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Lowercase 'she' and cut second comma.
Package can have italics, but not capitalized.
Both 'S' words lower cased.
Cadance, she'll be
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I got those fixed thank you for letting me know. I appreciate it Here have a thank you Pinkie
You should definitely not have the source linked on the cover art
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can you pm the image link to me as well
Pm the image source pls
I would love to read this, but the grammar issues are keeping me from truly enjoying the story
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Mind sharing that source image over here?
Other people have already mentioned grammar problems, but there are also some things that just don't fit together properly. Something I suggest is to read the entire story once you're done before publishing, just to double-check that everything makes sense.
Here are two examples of things that don't fit:
Clouds aren't clear. I think you mean, "The sky was clear..."
But they already know who it is! The question should be Why is Cadance bringing Shining Armor? I'm guessing you first wrote Cadance's letter without mentioning Shining Armor but then you changed it later. Except now the part after doesn't fit.
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crap I'm sorry for those mistakes. I'll most likely fix them eventually, when i got time but right now I've got some plans to work on. Thank you for pointing out the mistakes
Looking forward for a little Momlestia when Spike goes in to see her, and hopefully both Silvia and Sweetie Belle are with him. It would be nice for Tia and Lulu meet Silvia again, particularly because Luna seemed to be Sivia's master before Spike...