A Broken Sea of Ice

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link4

link4 #1 · May 10th, 2019 · 1 · · Ch 4 ·

there's potential here. careful though, that 3-5 month time skip could come back to bite you.

kudo's though, GGG as a timestamp for the show.

gundamexia34

gundamexia34 #2 · May 11th, 2019 · · · Ch 4 ·

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What do you mean it could come back to bite me? I'm afraid I don't understand.

link4

link4 #3 · May 11th, 2019 · 1 · · Ch 4 ·

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time skips can be useful. but too many makes a story seem fast paced.

gundamexia34

gundamexia34 #4 · May 11th, 2019 · · · Ch 4 ·

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Ah, yes I am aware of that. The time skip in this case was more because I doubted anyone wanted to get into the nitty-gritty details of forging the ring, which was the main focus of the start of this chapter

link4

link4 #5 · May 11th, 2019 · 1 · · Ch 4 ·

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maybe in a video... lol but yea, in a story? nah. not unless you're depicting the epic forging of 'the one ring' :P

Hero of time

Hero of time #6 · May 11th, 2019 · 1 · · Ch 3 ·

“Okay, okay Hades, chill.” He said to himself, “So your plan to conquer the world via that dumb bug failed, so what. There are other ways to break free and win, you just have to find them.”

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