Spy Glass is a private investigator, hired by the princess herself for a very special task: To find and arrest changling spys she suspects to be placed all around Canterlot. He is especially happy to hear that the pay will be great enough to get his life started with his wife, Melony, and his soon to be born foal.
But once he makes a shocking discovery, he will have to make a decision that will either crush his dreams, or begin his future!
Note: This story takes place after the Changeling Invasion, Long before they've been reformed. In this alternate timeline Changelings do not reform into colorful beings when reformed, nor does the entire race reform at once. But I hope you like the story anyway^^
Why isn't there an OC tag?
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It only let's you use a few tags. There would be a lot more if I could. Also, these aren't actual OC's, not yet anyway. They are just a few names and descriptions I made up.
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Also, there is no OC tag option.
I’m not complaining about your details because I like the Changelings original looks
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Hey, I like them, too! But the only reason things are done this way, is because it makes more sense to the story. That is all the the information I can give you without spoiling the story, unfortunately.
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Its okay
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But I do hope you enjoy the story nonetheless!
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👍
I hate POV swapping.
Psst! For all you fellow D&D fans, I do plan on posting my home-brewed monsters and campaigns on Wattpad. The stuff is orginally made for 5e, but if you play a different edition, I'm sure you can find a way to convert them. As of the moment I'm writing this comment, there is nothing up yet. But, if you keep checking in on it. You'll see something eventually.
My username is: @BrightMind01
Sooo this is dead?
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No, it is not dead, and I thank you for your intrest in it. I've just been jumping around jobs a lot, and I've had no time to work on it, but I would love to start getting back into it! I finally got back into my account and my time is still REALLY pressed until the 18th at the EARLIEST. But I'm sure I can work on a few paragraphs on the next chapter over this week, maybe even finish it!
Crap... Its been almost 2 whole years since I started writing this... Happy birthday DfL! I hope you are finished soon!
so that why Thorax Live in here
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Ha, I actually haven't considered that. Thorax is a rat, and that's why he was left alive! XD
Huh. I knew Melody was a changeling, but I was honestly expecting it to turn out that she herself didn’t realize before it was revealed.
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repeated word
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but instead to be here with him
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cost
extra word
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rogue
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cost
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the fear struck me harder than it did for any other changeling.
So I'm here to make you a deal!
rogue, it's misspelled 5x in ch12
The interplay of chrysalis and butterfly feels strange as its best friend and i'd kill you where you stand if I didn't need your information.
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This is a horrible plan endangering lives and damaging property when they could have made up a story and did whatever they wanted. Almost anything would have been a better plan than this including walking in the front door and walking out with the case, What big loss would it be if they fired him since he's implied to be loaded from years of regularly finding changelings at 200k each.
Then the photo burns and the mouse loses his tail all because somehow this was the best plan they could come up with.
Oh and he sent a foal into a burning building to get things.
At no point does anyone ever give any thought that burning down part of the building might have not been the best plan.
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her
lay
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repeated word
I'm not going to compromise
The time jump, especially considering one of the main characters is a private investigator supposedly one of the best and yet 5 years of nothing?
butterfly starts out saying in ch12
but then later in ch14
I think the subject was supposed to have switched from simon to spy glass but there doesn't seem to be a transition so it appears she's being told she won't be able to be with her son.
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Maybe you shouldn't have burned down part of your building as a distraction??
Really?? just like that? No attempt to deny it or flee?
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Thank you! I'll be sure to use this next time I have time to edit!