Questions and Wagers
I groan in pain and simply float in what I assume is water. “Where am I?” I ask the group of laughing people.
They eventually quiet down, and I recognize Luna’s voice speaking. “You’re in Twilight’s Library, Null.”
Very helpful…
“Yeah, okay, so why am I wet, floating, and in so much pain that I can’t be bothered to move or open my eyes?” I ask with a hint of annoyance in my tone.
Another voice responds this time, and I recognize it to be Pinkie Pie’s. “Because you’re in a bathtub silly!”
I guess I shouldn’t be surprised. If I’m at Twi’s place, a tub would be the most logical option… why didn’t I think of that?
“And the other half of my question?” I ask, wondering why they’re being so dodgy on the subject.
The room stays quiet for quite a while. Until… One particular voice, the last one I wanted to hear, speaks up. “You attacked me Null. I was left with no choice but to defend myself.”
I was about to say something, but what she said caught up with me before I could do so. Dumbfounded, and still in pain, all I could manage was, “...What?”
“You attacked me; or rather, your anger did. It seems you were split by your emotions. From what your happiness told us, we can only surmise it was due to Poison Joke.” she explained.
“...You wanna run that by me again?” I ask, equally as confused as I was before her explanation.
“Perhaps we should get null out of the tub and dried off before continuing this?” Luna offered.
“No, I wanna hear this now. What do you mean ‘split by my emotions’?” I state, starting to get impatient.
This time, Twilight spoke. “Well, from what I gather, you fell into some Poison Joke, which for whatever reason, split you into six different versions of yourself; each representing one of the core emotions: happiness, sadness, disgust, surprise, fear, and anger. Me and my friends found five of them, but the sixth, anger, found Princess Celestia.”
I float there in the tub, going over in my head what I was just told.
“...how close was it?” I ask, curious about how close I came to dying and or killing Celestia.
“Quite frankly, you should have died multiple times. The only reason you didn’t was because of some potions you had. A few revitalization potions, I’d guess some stamina and strength enhancers, and probably a pain nullifier...no pun intended.” Celestia answers.
“That sounds about right… Null was in possession of those kinds of potions… I’m not sure whether or not it was a good or bad thing that I let you keep those.” Luna states.
“Had I defeated your anger, you might not be here now. Though there was a time or two where you almost killed me as well. Take that for what you will.” Celestia tacked on.
“Hold on, so if I was on a pain nullifier, why do I hurt now?” I ask, not exactly sure how the potions I took are supposed to work.
This time, Starlight speaks up, and I’m surprised to hear her voice. I wasn’t expecting her to be here. “Because the potion doesn’t make the pain not exist, it just makes you not feel it for the duration of the potion's effects. Plus, revitalization potions don’t do anything for pain. Everything’s just starting to catch up with you now.” she explains.
“Mm… if you say so… how’d you get dragged into this though, Starlight?” I ask, genuinely curious.
“I was just walking through town, then your happiness found me. Didn’t know it wasn’t exactly you at the time, so we just talked while Rainbow Dash was leading you back to Twilight’s place. Twilight thought I might have been able to help, considering I was your friend; That’s how I got roped into this. But what about you? How did you wind up in some poison joke?” she asks.
“Hell if I know… last thing I remember was Luna giving me my own room… before that, dinner with Luna and Celestia, don’t ask… I don’t even know what Poison Joke is, so I wouldn’t know.” I admit.
“Wow, two thousand years old and you don’t know what Poison Joke is?” I hear Rainbow’s annoying voice quip.
“Rainbow!!” everyone yells.
“Ah, bite me, I wasn’t even there for well over half of it!” I yell.
Celestia clears her throat, which stops anyone else from adding their own two cents. “There is some Poison Joke in the Castle Gardens. It normally only plays a small harmless prank on whoever comes in contact with it. It’s only there because it’s a rare and exotic plant. It’s even in a section of the gardens closed off to civilians to prevent anyone from accidentally coming in contact with it, and everyone in the castle knows it’s there.”
“...Wait, in the gardens? You mean those blue flowers I fell in… that’s why that fucker was laughing! He knew!” I exclaim. “When I can move again, I’m gonna kick his ass!”
“Now Null, there won’t be any of that; Skyline will appear before a proper court-martial for his actions. You of course will have to testify, but I’m sure you won’t mind.” Luna states.
I’m about to tell her that isn’t really necessary, but another idea pops into my head. So I kept quiet. Instead, I change the subject. “Can someone get me out of this tub? It’s starting to get uncomfortable just floating and unable to move… bringing back some bad memories. Oh, and does anyone know any sort of pain spells? This is starting to get to be a bit much.”
I hear someone’s horn chime, and feel my body get picked up entirely, so as to not move me too much. Despite whoever’s gentleness though, I still end up screaming in pain; though I do bite my lip and keep my mouth shut, trying to hold it back. When the pain subsides enough, I feel myself growing incredibly warm, and wetness dragging down my clothes and hair seems to fade away. Next, the pain in my body starts to subside by a marginal amount. Not entirely, and still hurts alot, but not nearly to the extent as it once did. I then feel myself being gently set down on the floor. I make sure my footing is stable, then I slowly open my right eye, my left one still hurting way too much to try and open.
Looking around the room, I see the element bearers, Spike, Starlight, Luna, and lastly Celestia. Surprisingly, I don’t feel nearly as much hatred as before when I look at her. It confuses me to no end, but my attention is stolen away when I decide to look down at myself. Looking at my clothes, I notice a few things about them. Namely, a big hole just below my sternum. There are a few other cuts and holes scattered across my clothes, as well as a few spots of blood soaked into them.
“Whoa… I see what you meant when you said I should have died a few times… uh, if there were multiple copies of me, why did my clothes get messed up?” I ask, still reeling a bit from the state of my clothes making the fact I nearly died feel all the more real.
“Well, it was still you. You still feel the pain that your clones felt, so why wouldn’t your clothes be in the same state your clones left them in?” Starlight offers.
“I dunno… it just doesn’t seem like it should be that way.” I say with a small shrug.
“Well, they are clearly ruined, might as well do away with them; come now, let’s get you out of them.” Rarity says as she starts trying to pull my clothes off me. I yell out in pain as she forces my arms up to pull the shirt over my head.
“Knock that off, you ain’t takin’em from me!” I yell as I try to hang onto my shirt, which is currently over my head and tangled up in my arms. She lets go of my shirt and I pull it back down, with a huff, and hold my arms to try and alleviate the pain, though it does little much to help.
“Sorry.” she says with a sheepish grin. “Though,why won’t you get rid of it? It’s all torn up and covered in blood; there’s clearly no point in wearing it anymore.” she asks with a tilt of her head.
“Well, aside from the fact that it’s one of the last few things I have from my past, I don’t exactly have anything to change into; and while you ponies may not wear clothes, you’ll be hard pressed to catch me without any. Keeps me warm, keeps the sun off my skin, and keeps my privates hidden away.” I explain with no small amount of annoyance in my voice.
Some eyes dart towards my pants when I say that, some dart away to look anywhere but at me, and my eyes roll as I start shuffling towards the door.
I hear some mutterings behind me about nipples, assumedly mine, and some questioning my gender. I turn around and face them all. “I’m right here ya know; I have ears. Yes, I have nipples. Yes, I’m a boy. No, I’m not special to my race for having them, at least if the pictures I saw were anything to go by.” I say, my annoyance rising ever higher.
“Pictures?” about half them question.
“Another remnant of my past, much like my clothes. Maybe I’ll show you all, maybe I won’t; don’t get your hopes up though.” I say, turning back around and heading for the door once more. This time however, I end up tripping over myself, and find myself falling towards the ground with a yelp. Thankfully, someone catches me with magic, and I look back to see every single unicorn in the room with their horn lit up. Even Rainbow Dash looked ready to bolt to catch me, which makes me raise an eyebrow in surprise. I then feel a pair of hooves gently push against my chest, making me rip my head back to my front, seeing Pinkie Pie there, helping to right my orientation.
“How the hell did you get in front of me?” I ask her with a raised eyebrow. She simply giggles and winks while shushing me. I watch her walk out the door with my eyebrows threatening to fly off my face. I turn back to look at the rest of the group. “Did any of you see her move?”
My question is met with a few giggles. “Seriously, did any of you catch that? How did she do that?”
“It’s best not to question Pinkie Pie. I don’t even think your eye could explain her to you; though if it can, please let me know!” Twilight says as she walks past me out of the room.
I sigh and follow her out of the room, and everyone else follows suit. I turn back and raise an eyebrow at Rarity, who notices immediately and looks at me curiously. “What?”
“Despite you being so ready to trash them, do you think it’s even possible to fix my clothes?” I ask, honestly expecting her to just say no.
Instead, she looks more intently at my clothes. “It would be a difficult task, considering how badly damaged they are. I could probably do it though.”
“Is that you offering to or are you just saying that someone of your skill is required for it?” I ask with a bit of skepticism.
“Well, if you’re willing to part ways with them for a bit, then I’m offering.” she counters.
“How long is a bit?” I ask.
“A few hours, a day at most.” she says nonchalantly.
I study her for a moment. Even for the element of generosity, I still find it hard to believe she’d do it free…”What’s the rub?”
She raises an eyebrow at me this time. “What do you mean rub? You asked if I could do it, and I told you I could, and am willing to. While I may not personally see it as a style I’d wear, I still appreciate fashion in all its forms; Even an otherworldly form, in your case.”
Again, I study her intensely for a moment, searching her face for any hint of deception. Without my left eye though, I’m purely guessing, as I’m a terrible judge of character, and admittedly have come to rely on my eye for this kind of stuff; maybe too much. Eventually though, I decide to follow Luna’s advice, and give her a chance. “Know what, sure. Just gotta find something else to change into first.”
She gives off a smirk. “Well, I have no shortage of dresses available. Some minor alterations and I’m sure I could make one fit you.” she says with no small amount of amusement.
“Yeah, not happening.” I say firmly.
“Well, if you don’t want your clothes mended~” she says teasingly.
“...Your bluffing.” I challenge.
“Am I?” she questions, maintaining that smirk.
I squint at her, trying to determine if she’s actually serious or not. The absurd image of me in a dress amuses me for a moment. So much so that I’m surprised I find myself entertaining the idea.
“Know what? I’ll make a bet with you. If you can make me look like a female, I’ll let you put me in a dress. Fail at it though, and I get to burn the dress you put me in afterwards.”
She involuntarily shudders for a moment, but her smirk returns in full force. “You’ve got yourself a wager, darling. But if I win, you have to keep the look for three days.”
It’s my turn to shudder, and I start to reconsider the bet. On one hand, she’s got no idea what a human female looks like. On the other hand, she’s a fashionista. She probably could pull it off. I decide to take the risk though, as a fun little bet has no harm in it.
I reach my hand out, and we shake on it. I then turn to Luna with a childish smile. “So how about it Mom? Can I stay for a bit and play with my friends?
Luna rolls her eyes at my childishness, but smirks. “Very well. I must admit, I look forward to seeing the outcome of this little wager. Though we will have some important things to discuss later on, as well as you having to appear for the court martial, regardless of whether you win or lose the bet.” she says, maintaining that grin.
My smile drops as I register what she says. “Son of a…” I stop before I finish, and just sigh. I cast another look around the room, seeing everyone smiling and giggling at the little bet that I had just made. Even Celestia seemed to forget that I nearly just killed her. Well… part of me did. I still despise her, but for whatever reason, I just can’t muster up the strength to care right now.
Rarity starts walking out the door, and I sigh and follow behind. I notice Starlight, and Rainbow Dash follow suit, and I raise an eyebrow at them. “And what do you think you’re doing?” I question the two of them.
“What, you think I’d miss the chance to see Rarity shove you into a dress? And make you look like a girl on top of it? I wouldn’t miss that for the world!” Rainbow Dash says.
“Uh huh… and you?” I ask, turning my attention to Starlight.
“Well, aside from how funny it will be to see you in a dress, I also wanna make sure you don’t end up hurting yourself. You aren’t exactly up and at 'em right now.” she says with a smile on her face and a bit of genuine concern in her voice.
I smile a bit at her concern. “Well, let’s get this shitshow on the road.” I say as I turn back around and hobble after Rarity.
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...yeah I'm done here.
I'm doubly done here. I'm tagging out my dudes.
Y'know, this was a nice decompression chapter
I really like this story... but that kinda came outta left field to be honest. I hate getting secondhand embarrassment, so reading the next few chapters is gonna be hard for me.
After all the crap he's gone through, I thank he deserves a win and burns the dress
YAY! great chapter! Knull your poor fool, good luck with rarity. Xp
Yeah…was this part necessary? Not to sound mean or anything but this part kinda threw me off.
Considering how crossdressing led to being smacked in the face, tied to a chair, and secondhand embarrassed, I'm keeping my expectations at an all time low.
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He's going to lose and attend the court martial dolled up to the nines. (My prediction).
10205522
...erm....err...they made up?
So Rarity doesn't actually want to repair his clothes for him for free, or allow him to wear what he wants to wear. She actually just wants to see him naked, force him to wear what she thinks he should wear (ie dresses and women's clothes) and emasculate him. If this doesn't end with Luna slapping Rarity's shit in I'll be very dissapointed.
I'd recommend a gender swap spell. It would make things less... awkward.
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A little too quickly. But it's your story, not mine, so it's not that big of a deal. Although it's been awhile since I read that particular part, so maybe I'm remembering the resolve differently.
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Uh.... No idea what either of you are talking about? I'm gonna assume you're talking about a different story...
10205673
Well, she doesn't have anything for him to wear, and I imagine a dress would be easy to make fit him with a few changes considering how open ended they are. Besides, lil spoiler, next chapter will show you to be wrong.
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Was it necessary? No. Did it come out of left field? Yes. Why did I do it? Null is insane. As it says in the chapter, a passing thought amused him. Random bouts of things that people wouldn't expect area going to be plentiful. Personally, I'm comfortable enough with my sexuality to have no problem writing stuff like this, and I imagine that 1000 years of watching relationships of all kinds go by, he's grown numb to this kind of stuff. Numb, but not too the point of not caring. He still knows what he likes.
As for
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You in particular tinman, he just had half his emotions beat to hell and I'm of them put to sleep. He's gonna be emotionally out of it for a bit. So it makes sense that for now he can't bother to care about Celestia at the moment, he's all out of wack. By the way, I really appreciate the Markiplier meme hehe.
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...No, this isn't about what he's likes or doesn't like, this is about him becoming a Whipping Boy for the story.
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From what, one stupid bet? That's hardly enough to jump to calling him a "whipping boy". The sum total of everything in this chapter is hardly enough.
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I have no idea either.
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Excuse me, I have misspoken. He has been The Whipping Boy the entire story. But now it feels like it's happening for comic relief. The fact the author is writing him into a bet that is specifically supposed to emasculate him shows that it's going in a direction that I am not a fan of.
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Yeah. Hawker's
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On what, Rarity forcing him to wear a dress or Luna standing up for her friend? Because it pretty much seems like he doesn't want to wear a dress and Rarity does want him to. Or do you mean he'll be forced to wear it only to like it? Because that still makes Rarity look bad because she tried to push it on him unwillingly. She is saying "unless you wear female clothing you don't want to wear, I won't repair your clothes" taking pleasurefrom the idea of forcing him to do what he doesn't want to, and everybody is just laughing at him while he is being extorted.
Plus this is all taking advantage of an injured person in emotional distress. It makes the ponies all look shitty that they'd do it bow of all times, and makes me hate them.
Make him wear a corset and let celestia tie it. It could be pay back for trying to kill her.
I, on the other hand, look forward to seeing how well Null pulls off being in a dress.
I've seen this move pulled in that many fics on here, that I want to see Rarity lose, to make it stand out.
Maybe make the eye what throws her off.
Hello, my name's Orthoros. You might know me from such classics as: The only other comment I left on this story. I've read through both the 1000 years stories over the past two days, and thought I'd leave a small review of them up to here. I'll try to be as constructive as possible.
Let's first go for the good, shall we?
- The premise of having the protagonist stuck in stone is in no way original, yet is still intriguing. All in all, you approached a difficult theme for your story, and managed to write it in a compelling fashion.
- Nulls character is interesting, and while powerful, has many flaws. F.e. the physical pain in exchange for using his powers, or his mental state. This makes Null an interesting character instead of a boring mary sue.
- The grammar seems fairly consistent, with only a few spelling errors in between. Hardly enough to fault you for it.
- It's already been hinted at that there is an overarching story in the sequel, and that tells me that you've at least planned out some of where you're going with this.
Now let's dig into the "bad".
- Holy walls of text Batman! The first story is particularly offensive in that regard. Big chunks of text without a break are just not fun to read. You seem to have come to realize this, as it is much less a problem in the sequel, but they still pop up here and there. Try to neatly space out your paragraphs, as it is much nicer on the eyes of the reader. Better have one line break too many, than not enough.
- The major draw of the story is the unique premise of having an MC who cannot move, communicate, or do anything at all, really. Telling a story like this is a challenge, for sure, and you were doing good, until Null discovered his power to share vision with ponies. While this power is perfectly fine for him to have, the chapters involving it felt like a huge cop-out. The reader came here to read Null's story, but then you're suddenly dragged into a story that revolves entirely around someone else. It feels like a cheat, having him witness these events first hand, when you could have Luna pour her heart out to him about the events instead. It would have been much more in line with the core of the story, which is about Null, and how he's stuck in the garden. (Wall of text, I know, but I wanna keep these points together, because formatting...)
- Null, or rather, you, seem to sometimes forget that he has an almighty eye that can tell him the names and information of everything he looks at. With him not only suffering from this ability for a long time, but having had it for more than a thousand years, it's hard to believe that he'd just forget about it, and everytime he does, it's followed up by him discovering what he wants to know by some other way. Not terribly offensive, but it just feels wrong.
- In the chapter where Null is split into his emotions, you take the reader through how most of them are discovered by switching the perspectives to the elements in turn. Which is absolutely acceptable to do, the mistake comes in once they are all gathered in Twilights library. Each of them gets a whole paragraph recounting exactly how they found their Null, which is so redundant, it's not even funny. You're basically forcing the reader to read the same information twice, and I'm sure a good portion of them just skipped over it, including me. This can easily be solved by getting rid of either one or the other. You could have either let them meet in the library from the start, where each of them tells their story. Or, you show them finding the Nulls, and once in the library, all it takes is a single sentence to get the point across. "They each told Twilight how they came across their version of Null." <--- Sometimes, less, is more.
I'd could probably start nitpicking here, but I feel like these are the bigger mistakes that happened, and I hope you can take away even one good thing from my little review. If there's anything you disagree with, I'd be more than happy to engage in a more detailed conversation, be that in the comments, DM, or Discord.
I wish you the best of luck, and I hope you continue to improve! You've already come a long way, and I hope you keep on going :)
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Not really a fair statement. Right or wrong, Celestia is the one who brought about Null being turned into a statue for vague and unfair reasons. Null has reason enough to kill Celestia, and a few of the characters -even Celestia herself- understand this. So saying Celestia should punish him for trying to kill her, would only be fair if Celestia gets punished for the one thousand-or-so years of false imprisonment on Null's life.
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And he was only turned to stone because Discord sent him X amount of time into the future, making the sisters think he was in league with the Spirit of Chaos. (Correct me if I'm wrong)
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Hmm, I actually don't recall that. Did it happen in the story prior to this? Near the beginning?
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Happened in the story before this one, yes.
Maybe not like that exactly, but that's the gist of it.
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yes, Null was teleported into the future by a few days by discord.
Basically if you didn't read the previous story, about halfway through i wrote a flashback section of how Null actually got into his situation. TLDR, he wandered equestria after ariving and found discord, discord snapped his fingers and whisked him away into the future to a random point in time. that point in time was a few days later, right in the middle of Luna and Celestia's fight with him. theres a lil more too it than that, but i think it's easier to just go back and read it for yourself.
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I agree. This is starting to take the same weird turns that so many other great fics took, eventually killing them. I'll stick around to see how things play out, but if things go the way they are looking, I'll be right behind you.
(No offense to the author. This is your story, write it how you want. But I'm not going to read a story that no longer interests me personally.)
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As you might agree I'm not saying the story is written poorly, I'm just saying it's going in a direction that I've seen many times. That "direction" might be "popular" in this fandom but I do not subscribe to it.
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good riddance then! : )
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Good call friendo.
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Not going to lie this comment was fine until
Then you sound like a passive aggressive 12 year old.
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interpret how I sound how you want, doesn't make my comment any less true :p
Aaaaaaaaaaw, I'v reached the end of the current chapters up, I hope more are on their way soon, I'm really liking the story.
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Yes i so agree with this. He doesn't have to forgive but neither does he have to be always angry all the time. People in general are really dynamic on how they handle situations and problems and now that he has had some time to wind down so to speak. He can start to think about what has been done to him and maybe figure things out more.
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Holy cow everyone's having extremely mixed opinions on the entire chain of comments
It seems people where really mixed on this chapter.. I liked it, not s good as some of your others but still good.
I'm kinda liking the gender swap spell that was mentioned in the comments, though I'm wierd like that.
That bet will be stupidly hilarious when Null loses it.
This is a great chapter. Short, light-hearted. Better than the last one, but not by much.
Null, you just made a mistake.