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I'm just someone who likes writing stories.

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This story is a sequel to The Brushie chase


Foxy Stripes is on the outside a sunny mare, who likes bringing sunshine to those who are down, lift their spirit and chase those gloomy clouds away. She's a caring mother and a supportive friend who will go out of her way to help.

Yet she carries a burden not many get to see, a pain she carefully hides, preconception that constantly torments her.

In the end, sometimes the sunny ones need help chasing those dark clouds away.


Written in memory of my sister who passed away in summer 2013, who served as the inspiration for my pegasi sisters, Dew Doe and Foxy Stripes.


This story is part of The Equestria Tales series.

Marked as a sequel to the Brushie Chase as it happens roughly during the same time period and touches on Dew Doe's little (yet big) sister Foxy Stripes.

Cover made by Tambelon

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Care to tell me more about The Equestria Tales series?

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I can really only just quote from my blogs when I occasionally list the stories in chronological order:

The Equestria Tales series is a series of loosely connected stories that share the same fanon universe of my own creation. It follows the canon of the show most of the time up to the end of season 8. (This is done mostly for simplicity's sake.) The comics and books are not canon, although I do insert nods to them and even sometimes borrow characters from there for cameos.

There is no main character for the overall series, each story has their own main characters and I often switch between canon and original characters.

That's really all there is to the series. It is currently going through two story arcs, that I unofficially call "The return of the Dark Ponies" and "Barricade's redemption" so the focus is a lot on certain characters. But I might switch gears in-between and I will eventually do other stories with different characters.

This particular story is not party of any arc, but touches on a very personal character of mine as she's based off my late sister along with the other character that appears at the very end.

Body dysmorphic disorder is a hell of a thing.

The lullaby was very cute. I wish there was a bit more to explore and pin down something more exact to what Foxy has, because while one commenter pointed out it could be body dymorphia, there's other probable things too (very bad self-esteem issues, perhaps?). This wrapped up its point nicely, but it still would be neat to see something more fleshed out, especially when I can't remember seeing many stories about ponies with issues focused primarily on their weight/the weight they feel they have.

There's also parts where a few proofreading fixes could be made, like having 'rats nest' be spelled properly as 'rat's nest'.

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The lullaby was very cute. I wish there was a bit more to explore and pin down something more exact to what Foxy has, because while one commenter pointed out it could be body dymorphia, there's other probable things too (very bad self-esteem issues, perhaps?). This wrapped up its point nicely, but it still would be neat to see something more fleshed out, especially when I can't remember seeing many stories about ponies with issues focused primarily on their weight/the weight they feel they have.

Yeah this story does show its age a bit, I wrote most of it back in 2013 very shortly after my sister passed away, who is the inspiration for both Foxy Stripes and her sister Dew Doe, then I just didn't finish it until last week, adding the bit where Dew Doe comes in to calm her down.

I have considered adding another chapter, but it's more likely I'll just write another story that touches more on this. As this story is more of a me grieving my sister's passing.

There's also parts where a few proofreading fixes could be made, like having 'rats nest' be spelled properly as 'rat's nest'.

I have fixed the bit you mentioned, will go over it again a little later. This is one of the stories that did not get proofed as usual by Hail King Sombra since it was written during the editing break I'm giving her.

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I'm surprised it wasn't finished for so long.

In hindsight, this does feel like a very sibling inspired story, too.

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Woops didn't see this one. :twilightblush:

The main reason it took so long is that it was written in a period were I nearly just quit writing all together, related to the loss my family suffered, so this story and few others got shuffled to a corner. I eventually managed to pull myself back together to continue writing, but quite honestly forgot this one and only really re-discovered it recently when going over old story files.

And I just now noticed, I forgot to put the memorial into the long description. Fixing that.

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