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Element of Malice

One day my heart felt heavy so I set it down. Then I lost it, someone stole it because it was made of gold. Yours looks heavy, can I borrow a piece? I'll return it when I find mine.


A crystal guard pegasus goes mad after following an unknown creature into the artic glacier field, the changelings cut themselves off from the rest of the world for no apparent reason, and the danger is unavoidable even in the human world. A new enemy has arrived and he will test the limits of how powerful friendship really is. Will Twilight and her friends overcome this new adversary or will they fall victim to his tyrannical methods?
You can also read this at Archive of our own: https://archiveofourown.org/works/18675481/chapters/44289397 please check it out

with many thanks to the editor versaceseok, chapter one has been improved and updated.

*The editing of all chapters have been completed with the help of The Fan Without a Face and four days worth of me applying said edits. (like I stated before I'm a little slow:raritydespair:)

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Comments ( 9 )

That’s an encouraging first comment. :applejackunsure: please tell me you’re talking about my grammar. :applecry:
Edit *or did you mean awful as is awesome, or wonderful?

Why do I feel like Zecora was actually Chrysalis?

So far, I really like it. I would suggest more description to make it look less rushed, and in some areas, there were period's and commas were a question mark should be.

“What is (cough) going on?” Shining Armor asked, grateful that he could use his daughters vomit to mask the earlier stench.

You could also make it: "What is going on?" Shining asked between coughs, grateful that he could use his daughter's vomit to mask the earlier stench.

Page one alone has about a dozen errors, editing this is gonna be a complete rewrite.
*cracks knuckles*

I figured it would be about that bad. There’s only so much I can do on my own.

Does that mean you’ll help me with this one?

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