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If you came here for any sort of sanity, You came to the wrong page! heh heh HAHAHAHAHA! But yes, I love HIE and some good funny stories and love depending in how it's done. Have fun out there!

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This story is a sequel to The Celestia look-a-like.


(Takes place before Season 9, reading the previous story is not required as the prologue covers over it briefly but you are welcome to read it.)

Sun Glow is a Pegasus that is a doppelganger of Princess Celestia with a few differences. She has had this appearance since birth and Sun Glow sees it as a curse. All she wants is for Ponies to see her as Sun Glow and not a Celestia look-a-like.

However, with her new job as Princess Celestia's assistant and having a personal guard following her around, how will Sun Glow cope with Canterlot and the events that will trigger by her appearance in a city where the Princess is revered the most?

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 105 )

Sequel time! Yes!

Oh heyyy, you made a sequel !
You struck on a good idea with your first story.

It's refreshing to read such a "grassroots" story as this so late in the fandom, but I have been seeing many stories which have that early season freshness to them popping up.
It just proves that there are many stories of "earlier history" which remain untold.

This is an enjoyable read, I hope you continue it :ajsmug::pinkiehappy:

Looking good so far. Have a like and fav :pinkiehappy:

All she needs now are some princess look-a-like friends who can relate and you'd have a legacy of stories on your hands.

A Princess Cadence look-a-like unicorn from Manehatten
A 'young' Princess Luna look-a-like earth pony from Appaloosa

Well I know I'd read them at least. I mean she has to have a life outside of work right?

IT'S BACK.

Yay!

Okay, but could use some tweaking grammar wise.

You know what the funny if rumours spread sun glow is celestial secret love child that make for some hilarious moments

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it's doubtful she does due to her appearance, remember the Changelings are still segregated, and racial tensions don't just disappear over night.

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I'm not talking about her life prior to this point, I'm talking about from here on. If she's going to be an individual, she needs to get a life.

Comment posted by silverthorn deleted May 24th

"I've just about read every genre and you pick up patterns after reading a lot of books, but I do believe I really enjoyed a series of seven books about a colt who attended a fictional school in another dimension and its his destiny to destroy an evil unicorn who acted on a prophecy that the colt was the one to kill him" Celestia answers.

"Don't think I've heard of that one" I answered honestly.

"It's about 600 years old, I did get a chance to meet the author, a lovely mare that unfortunately decided to make edits as her popularity got to her head and started to make unnecessary changes to the series' lore but I do have the originals in my old collection" Celestia told me.

I see what you did there 😊

is it negative feedback if I like the story too much? also congrats on getting featured

NEGATIVE FEEDBACK!

Nah, none of that.

Many of your quotes have no punctuation at the end; the ones that have attribution (for example, "Words," she said.) should end with a comma, if no other end punctuation is appropriate.

I wonder if Sunny will eventually get so fed up by others saying she's a clone or changeling that she'll just step up and slap the pony.

Sun Glow and Sharp Spear as a couple? who is with me?

So, how many chapters until we get a Rainbow Dash moment? :facehoof:

The proof she’s not a Changeling thing kind of reminds me of Corporal Nobbs.

You know...

Maybe Princess Celestia can make an Equestria-wide announcement reproaching any and all discrimination against Sun Glow for her looks and explaining her circumstances.

Oh. Inevitably, the Changelings will take advantage of it. :applejackunsure:

"Glow, you mustn't spend all your time reading books, else I may have to dye your coat lavender and change your mane so you look like Princess Twilight instead" Celestia said to me.

This made me smile. :pinkiesmile:

As a matter of principle I have to tell you that I feel very slightly offended on Twilight's behalf, but all's well that ends well.

"I've just about read every genre and you pick up patterns after reading a lot of books, but I do believe I really enjoyed a series of seven books about a colt who attended a fictional school in another dimension and its his destiny to destroy an evil unicorn who acted on a prophecy that the colt was the one to kill him" Celestia answers.

HARRY POTTER! YES!

*freaks out*

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Realistically, a changeling wouldn't try to take advantage of Celest-alike's appearance anymore than any other pony. or Human in Equestria for that matter. Probably even less likely because they appear more out-of-the-ordinary, and bring more scrutiny.

If Sun Glow gets a changeling scan way more often than normal in the palace, the guards would have to justify singling her out because of her being so close to Celestia, not from looking suspicious.

I’m waiting for someone to ask if she’s her daughter.

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*shrug*

Let's be realistically meta: it all depends on whether or not the plot needs it.

I did not expect that story to continue. Well, I'm not complaining.

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I mean, sure, but it’s only the first day.

See what I did there? ‘Cus the chapter is called... you know what never mind.

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Give it a few days at the castle for the rag mags to start coming up with outlandish articles at the grocery store stand.

And it wouldn't be authentic if it didn't also have Bat Boy on the front cover...

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So am I, you know its bound to happen.

I would things out a bit more. It just seems like everything was crammed in this chapter. My find a way to give a better separation of events.

Looking forward to more!

Not gonna lie, it was extremely satisfying to see "doughnut" in place of "donut"

Hmm The thing is... before clone or changeling I think that the first guess would be daughter...^^;;
The "changeling" guess by the various commander of the royal guard is also a bit "meh", in the sense that it is OBVIOUS that she is with Celestia and she is taking the situation as normal. So a harsh reaction like that is a bit stupid and demeaning toward Celestia herself

*sigh* I like the concept of the story and I really want to like the story itself, but the constant tense-switches throw me off all the time. Can't ignore those, no matter how I try. There are also typos, repetitions and constant punctuation problems, especially in dialogue. All of this would easily be caught by a pre-reader on first read-through.
Not giving you a dislike - what I've read of the story is cute and a refreshing idea.
....
Just, please, a pre-reader? You're at the top of the featured box - finding one shouldn't be a problem at all.

Comment posted by jaime_lion deleted May 26th

Well, that as fun.

"I've just about read every genre and you pick up patterns after reading a lot of books, but I do believe I really enjoyed a series of seven books about a colt who attended a fictional school in another dimension and its his destiny to destroy an evil unicorn who acted on a prophecy that the colt was the one to kill him" Celestia answers.

You sonouvabitch! That was CLEVER!:rainbowlaugh:

Well done and looking forward to more

The Monk
Her hands were still bound with rope, she debated an escape before all the stupidity gave her an aneurysm. -Scarheart

There's a little jab at the "famous serie of books", a few references here and here, this is pretty innocent and a good laid back story.
Loved the prequel, and it seems I'll love this one too.

Very good story so far. Love the life lessons Celestia is imparting as she spends time with her new friend.

"I've just about read every genre and you pick up patterns after reading a lot of books, but I do believe I really enjoyed a series of seven books about a colt who attended a fictional school in another dimension and its his destiny to destroy an evil unicorn who acted on a prophecy that the colt was the one to kill him" Celestia answers.

"Don't think I've heard of that one" I answered honestly.

"It's about 600 years old, I did get a chance to meet the author, a lovely mare that unfortunately decided to make edits as her popularity got to her head and started to make unnecessary changes to the series' lore but I do have the originals in my old collection" Celestia told me.

Haha JK Rowling reference

Eh. Feels like Celestia and Sun Glow are talking too much about economic class. When you get down to it: People are people. There are rich snobs, sure. But there are also rich normal folk! Along with poor snobs, and poor normal folk.

In other words: What really matters is the content of someone's character, not the size of his bank account.

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Not gonna lie, it was extremely satisfying to see "doughnut" in place of "donut"

I didn't even notice.

i'm liking where you've set the story up so far. It seems like there can be some interesting commentary based on how ponies (and people) judge things at face value sometimes without even knowing that they have. The entire doughnut metaphor was a rather interesting read. It almost feels like a life lesson,a metaphor for all ages.

I will say that one thing that I would look into is making sure that when you use a quote of dialogue that doesn't end in a ! or ?, that you instead use a comma. For example:

"We're back" Celestia said.

There should be a comma after it so that it reads: "We're back," Celestia said. Whenever you break up dialogue and insert a clause outside of quotes, a comma is used for punctuation. The only exceptions are when using ! and ? instead. If it was a question, then "We're back?" Celestia said. would be appropriate.

It's a very cute story! I would recommend putting out a little message for an pre-reader, someone that you can send the chapter to and have them go through for grammar errors. It would really help! But as it is now I'm still very invested and dropping a like on this one.

*Alondro trots along down Canterlot Lane... and spies the Princess and the Pegasus. He gapes in utter shock and dismay!* ERMAHGERD!!! WERN ERV DERM ERS ER CHERNGLERNG!!! *he immediately leaps upon Celestia and begins beating her with a brick* REVEAL YOURSELF, QUEEN BUGHORSE!!

:pinkiecrazy:

9642290 Only a really terrible infiltrator tries to look like a famous person. It NEVER works in practice, and only leads to greater scrutiny.

One of the most critical aspects of espionage is DO NOT STAND OUT. Blend into a crowd, be invisible in plain sight.

That's why I've always said Chrysalis' invasion plan in "Canterlot Wedding" should have been utterly doomed to fail in anything resembling a realistic progression of events. She completely squandered her species' most critical ability and imprisoned Twilight when there was absolutely no longer any need, confirming absolutely that she was an imposter, and THEN sending her straight to the real Cadance, without disabling Twilight's powers at all. Chryssi then attacked out in the open and didn't have ANY infiltrators at all already in the city, not only losing the element of surprise, but also revealing their entire existence to the ponies for no other reason than Bughorse Queen's insatiable narcissism.

From a tactical sense, it was an insanely stupid strategy which only succeeded as long as it did because The Plot said so.

I'm going to need some time to point out all of the grammatical and spelling errors here.... I should have it up in a couple hours, tomorrow at the latest. hope it helps.

"We are attending some meetings today, first is with Captain Stone Wall of the Royal Guard. If you are ready, we may head there now" Celestia answered.

Past sins reference I see

"40 bits for the dress." Green Sew answered.

Ah, the too common mistake of mixing up bits for dollars.

RIP J.K Rowling, you have been roasted by Celestia

Hi there, I'd like to file a complaint. There isn't enough chapters. And the story doesn't update 10k long chapters each day.

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