Anon wants to live a simple life but ends up in Equestria with the powers of an (Eldritch) God. Weeks after his arrival, Rarity buys him a diner/bar as a welcoming gift and business franchise where she can get her clients. Anon then works at his diner/bar and successfully lives a simple life, though things get more exciting each day for every pony he meets. Anon also occasionally uses his infinite powers to poke a little fun. Good slice of life stuff.
wholesome
Anon your such a gentleman.
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I hear you, my guy.
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The deed is done. Have a nice day.
Instantly faved, tracked, upboated.
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More to come my friend. I won’t spoil but references will be made.
There seems to be quite a bit of telling over showing.
Cool story
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How so my friend?
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it is mostly things along the lines of ‘you did this’ and ‘you did that’ and basically just saying what the action was and not how the action was done, like with teaching the magic tricks, or when reminiscing it feels like you are listing events. That sort of thing.
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Hmmm... perhaps it’s just my style of writing. Although I’ll try to fix it from here on. A little bit of chapter 2 is already written so please don’t mind it my friend. Have a good day.
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Also, my bad for that mistake. It seems I mixed up recounting events and telling the ones that are currently happening. I haven’t written stories in quite a while though so I’ll try to get better.
Seems a bit lazy for a guy who could just answer most her questions by conjuring up an Anthropology textbook. She would probably even be more satisfied since she'd get to read a book full of knowledge no other pony has ever seen.
Equestrian ponies don't eat potatoes. The writers even stated that they are toxic to equine stomachs and they changed any dishes in canon that have them to hay.
Anon is a very simple mind when it comes to his powers. Not only could he extract who Angel was from her mind at a glance, he could also just summon Angel with a snap and make him land in a huge bowel of salad...
for some reason, as im reading i imagine someone with a really soft voice, like Fluttershy, or Bob Ross, narrating this.
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That’s what I was thinking too but I figured the action means more to work for it than just making it happen, else he could solve all of Equestria’s problems. Also it’s an extension to make the next chapter fairly plausible. Though it’s all in good fun. As King Crimson would put it, it just works. Hope you had a good read and have a good day.
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I did enjoy it. I'm acctually happy he is kinda simple minded to not jump to using his powers in such complex well thought out methods. It sticks to the ideology of simple solutions for a simple life. Anything goes wrong, he can just reverse time and show up sooner anyway.
Second sentence and you already had me. Good ol' JoJokes.
This is beautiful
Feels good man
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Already off to a great start. And it has a good Isekai feel to it. I hope you continue makeing this.
I can't fault you for changing things up with Sweetiebelle being in Twilight's school instead of Ceerilee's class, as she is in canon. Writing is hard and it was a convenient way to get him there and inform Rarity that she has more employees at the same time. Love where this is going and good luck with school.
Nice reference
Leek, not leak. :)
Good story!
The new chapter is indeed adding a new spice to things, as well as building Anon's character.
Nice.
Is that a jojo reference!?
Yes, goed
YEY!!!!!
Wasn’t expecting a Kira reference but I dig it. Also would he go {even more} insane in equestria I wonder no hands
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I bet he’ll be thrilled to discover Eqg. Also, anyone’s thoughts on Lyra X Kira?
Anon: "Well, you must sleep more than a koala."
Trixie: "Uh... Thanks?"
Fluttershy: *Pops her head in the front door for a second* "Koalas sleep between 18 and 22 hours each day."
Trixie: *Blushes*
Hell yeah! When I used to work a projection booth, I had a lot of down time. Before I went to work, I would open up like twenty different tabs, depending on length, of fimfiction chapters on my laptop and read those throughout the day. I always opened them at home and avoided linking up to the business internet, since companies always heavily monitor network access, and I didn't want to get fired for being seen as a weirdo.
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Or a reference to Jsyrin on Spacebattles. You know.
Whichever.
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I think that Lyra wouldn't like him, because she likes humans and Kira has made it a point to reduce the number of humans.
Started out a bit rushed and meh, but now you're really getting more creative with his limitless power I'm digging it.
Keep up the good work.
Needs the Second Person tag.
Should have the 2nd person tag.
Oh my Luna... Another Evening Star fan! :D HUZZAH!
Judging from reactions, the word you were probably looking for was appealing. Appalling is a very negative descriptor.
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My bad, as you can tell I lacked a lot of experience in those early chapters. It was my first time writing something long after all. I don't have much time to proofread my writing either. Though winners don't make excuses so all I can do is apologize for all mistakes in my writing. I do hope that you all are still having a good read nonetheless, and I really hope you'll find the more recent chapters to have better writing. Next chapter comes up eventually so please be patient, and thank you all for at least batting an eye in this little novel of mine. Have a good one, fellas.
I've had a great time reading this so far. Anon's good-natured shenanigans always crack me up, and I love the dynamic between him and Chrysalis. Really looking forward to more.
That said, there is one thing that has been bugging me a bit from the beginning.
Is appalled the right word to be using in a case like this? I've seen it used this way several times throughout the story in what appears to be a positive fashion, similar to "amazed" or "impressed"; however, I've only ever known appalled to have negative connotations by definition, meaning shocked and horrified, or disgusted. Its current usage just doesn't feel like it quite fits to me, but maybe you know something I don't. It's left me rather puzzled.
If Anon gave Flurry Heart and the Cake twins beeps on their noses, would the old NBC chimes play?
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Time, my friend. Time is what I don't have. That's no excuse though. This aside, I hope you all had a good read. I'll make sure to change them all as soon as I can, which is probably now. Have a good day, fellas.
A great read Ponka I'm looking forward to more of Anon's shinnanigans definently worth a follow :D
This is actually a really good fic and makes me want to write my own inspired story of ‘All powerful Anon’.