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I'm pretty sure you can't do both of those things at the same time
Contest judge quickly chiming in..
I think this one sentence highlights my feelings about this fic:
This needed some more editing. Strange grammatical errors and unusual phrases throughout the fic..
A little disappointing because I actually thought the premise for this was solid. Execution is just.. ham fisted and bizarre. The transition from them playing the game to the sudden sex was.. jarring.
It's all so strange because in other areas of your fic the writing actually seemed okay?