Sunset Shimmer rules Canterlot High School like a spoiled empress, with the ego to match. Sunset is the reigning Princess of the Fall Formal for three years running, the president of the school, and is the daughter of Principal Celestia to boot, increasing her influence- and her ego. All that changes when Twilight Sparkle, a new student, comes along in addition to the takeover schemes of her (soon-to-be-former) vice president Vignette Valencia, followed and aided by her bumbling yet optimistic henchmen, Pinkie Pie and Bulk Biceps.
After a botched attempt to off Sunset, which instead changes her into an animal, Sunset ends up in Twilight's household and they (along with her new friends) get off on the wrong foot until they come to an uneasy truce until Sunset gets her throne and her body back. Meanwhile, Vignette plots to take the school presidency and the Fall Formal crown from Sunset so she herself can rule the school with an iron fist. Along the way, Sunset gets a much-needed reality check on what is really important in life. Will Sunset learn a new groove, or will she spend the rest of her days in a beast's body...?
Not bad for your first story here on fimfiction. Welcome! It was no April fool when you came here and joined this site! ;D The description could have less information in it...maybe limit it to two sentences or a paragraph. Nice job, but make sure to practice spelling and grammar! The Grammarly app helps a lot! Keep on practicing and writing...you can DO this! :D
Okay, I’ll do just that when I get the chance. Thanks for the advice!
This has alot of pontential and the fact that this is somewhat inspired by the Emperor’s New Groove (a movie which i love) already guarantees this on my favorites list
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Much appreciated, dude. I love The Emperor's New Groove myself! I must confess, though, that I also incorporated elements of Noah's New Groove by Numbah296 on fanfiction.net into this story of mine as well. Here's the link so you can see what I'm talkin' about https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5223702/1/Noah-s-New-Groove. I mean, nobody likes a ripoff artist.
Also, I'd love to hear your opinions on the story in general in the followin' questions.
1. What did ya like about my story in particular? (Don't leave anything out, and please keep it short and to the point)
2. Was there anything that needed improvement? Somethin' I could've done to make it better and less like a B-Grade ripoff? If so, what?
Please, be brutally honest with me.
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Just got Grammarly yesterday, and I tried it out. How did I do? Be brutally honest, please. I’m still working on it.
This is really good! I like it where you made Sunset as Kuzco.
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Looks good so far! Nice job. And also, just so you know, I suggested it out of improvement help, not to be mean. :') I'm glad you took the criticism well. By the way, the author's note would be better at the bottom of the story, and the narrator's can be mentioned throughtout the story so the reader can guess who is reading without having to go through a lot of text; and see if they were correct at the bottom of the page. :3
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Done. Thanks for the tip.
So, honest questions: What did ya like about it so far?
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Thanks, I figured she'd make a good Kuzco. And your thoughts on Vignette and my choice of hench-people/lackeys? I wanna hear your honest opinion.
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Well I don't see her as the serious villain type but I wanna know how would you execute her role
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Well... I thought to have Vignette fill the shoes of EG1 Sunset and expand on that a little. Y'know, like a modern (and teenage) Yzma, for the sake of the story.
And what of Pinkie & Bulk's role as Kronk? I admit I initially considered Derpy, of all people, but decided against it. Probably for the best, I thought. Thoughts?
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To be honest. Pinkie can be Kronk because their both funny
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That’s why I chose 2 for the role of Kronk.
Now, serious question: did I keep anyone in character so far?
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Don't worry I feel ya
Your really nervous about your first story huh?
Of course you did
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Good, because that’s difficult to do, especially with the background characters, who I hope to flesh out in this story, however slightly.
What kind of animal did vignette turn sunset into anyway?
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Oh, you’ll all see soon enough in the next few chapters...
loving this so far!!
Glad to hear it! So, what's your favorite part so far...?
Vignette taking Sunset's role on bullying Fluttershy is okay and I was surprise Sunset was super nice to Twilight.
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For now...
I can not tell how much I love this story all ready
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Glad to hear. What did you like so far? Anything I could do for improvement?
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I just love how all the characters are being portrayed
Who is the Yzma in this??
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Vignette Valencia.
when is the next chapter
YOU'RE BACK! I've been waiting for this!
I'm loving this story and your choice of characters to fit the roles is a nice touch, especially Vignette. Can't wait to read more.
This story brings me so much joy
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Glad ya liked it!
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Rest assured, ya will. Sooner or later, y'all will.
how long till the next chapter
Great update!! Glad I read it
Please update it
Will this continue?
I love that Spike is a human instead of a lowly pet.