It was just a typical day of work for Applejack. Eager to get home, just one last errand in the freezer. That is, until she finds herself locked in.
Just great, now she’ll become the butt end of everyone’s joke. That is, when she gets out.... if she gets out.
No! That’s silly, of course she’ll get out... right?
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Couple of grammatical errors
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don't be shy, point them out and i'll give you proof-reader credit 0w0
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Ok, understand
That was dark.
Did she die?
Reminds me of that scene in Short Circuit 2.
Very dark. Love the ending where we are not sure if AJ survived or not.
This was an alright read. Some grammatical issues, felt like it had the potential of being longer and I think it kind of pushes itself towards a T rating more rather than an E. Other than that, it's completely okay.
So she doesn’t have her super strength?
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What is this camp everfree you speak of?!
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I think I get what you’re saying.
Period and " missing.
There's a huge space between the sentences.
That can't be good!!
Damn*
Also there were 2 or 3 large spaces a few sentences up.
Space is needed after third sentence.