I'll fill this out later. Hi though!
As a young filly, Fluttershy had trouble fitting in. She's far too timid to make friends in school, and at home she slowly finds her solace and optimism crushed by her cruel drunkard of a father. Her parents argue every night, and her father has threatened to walk out many times in the past. Fluttershy wants nothing more than for her parents to stay together and be happy, but where does a filly turn to when bitterness and conflict are all around her?
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You should probably rename this 'foalhood'. As, people may confuse 'fillyhood',with a filly's genitals. Just sayin'.
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1082182 That was pretty funny
Okay, I give this a 10/10. I can't say I cried while reading it, but you did elicit some feeling from me. Not sure how to explain it, but I'm sure it means this was a great story.
I don't recall seeing any spelling or grammatical errors, but I do have to question something:
"Oh my, there aren't any left. Oh well, maybe you can have them tomorrow night instead." Twice Shy would buy her daughter some cookies tomorrow.
I'm not sure why you added that last sentence. I'm sure the reader could assume she was buying cookies the next day. I don't know, that's just me, and I myself am a horrible writer, so take it as you will.
Anyway, it gets a 10/10 from me. The characterization was nice, the plot was solid, and the ending was worth it, I think. Everything seemed to fit together. Of course, that part in bold above would be my only complaint, and it's probably nothing major; just something to look at. Anyway, great job writing this!
Aww Shy. Hug hug HUG!
Good story.
1082182 Umm, no... Just, no... Only a few people might make that error.
I am most certainly not one of those people... and I do read TAW!
Aww...it's sad. Sorta confused with the dad and when that letter was written, but it was well written and I think you did really good with emotions and showing how the parents fought. So yeah, all positive from here.
...oh, my feels...
Very good, Shorty! An excellent example of how story ideas that one would think are completely played out still have some life hidden within them. All it takes is a good author.
Poor Fluttershy... It's actually refreshing to see a fillyshy story without Dash in it.
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Oh! Hey GB!
Thanks.
Very nice start
"You're a good pony, and being successful means nothing if you're not kind. The world needs more kindness. Never lose it."
This line really hit me the hardest, because I have lived believing this my whole life
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This story has just been sitting in my "read later" stash and after reading this, I feel very nostalgic and can remember lots of times when I would have to deal with these kinds of things as a kid. My parents would fight and argue about once or twice a month and over time, it got worse and worse. I would just lay in my bed hearing them scream, sometimes even while on vacation. It wasn't until when I was 18 that my dad told me that he was seeing another woman and didnt want to live with my mother anymore. They were at least kind enough to tell me after my high school finals.
This story is very reflective and has touched my heart deeply. Thank you for writing such a heart touching story about my favorite pony
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You're welcome. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
This is good reading I have to say. Nice work.