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Nathan Sheffield never considered himself to be that fortunate at anything but when he finds the perfect gift for his girlfriend's birthday, he starts to think his luck has changed. Little does he know that the gift he just bought is about to turn his world upside down and send him on a quest to save two worlds from an evil force that wants to control it.
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yes let twilight drive that sounds like a good idea
This look's really good. Keep it up.
1297689 Thank you, you're too kind. So many people start these concepts but don't finish it, I feel compelled to take all the way.
Another great chapter.
But, it look's like I need to keep a eye on this chapter. You like to add to your chapters as you go. 
But, that ok, I need the back reads here and there anyway.
Wow this is great I faved it
horses
1707157 ?
Ok, I've read two chapters now, and I have to say: It's good, but the frequent errors in spelling and grammar really throw me off. Most of them are in the form of missing commas or using a period rather than a comma to finish a sentence in a quote. The story itself is good, but I really have a problem with the following quote:
Then you know how dangerous he is. We're not entirely sure how he broke out but when he did, he demanded that Princess Celestia give him the Elements of Heroism. She didn't know what he was talking about though and he disappeared. It's then we started to look them up and found that they were on Earth.
Besides the missing commas after the words "broke", "though", the fact that Princess Celestia doesn't know something that is written in a book is absurd. Princess Celestia is over a thousand years old, and she knows things nopony in Equestria knows, including stuff that isn't recorded at all (like the Crystal Kingdom). Besides, how is it written in a book that the Elements of Heroism are in Earth if Earth is just a fictional story in Equestria? According to Twilight's speech, the Elements of Heroism were used to save Equestria in "ages past". Wouldn't you think that Celestia would know about the objects that were used to save her kingdom? She knew everything about the Elements of Harmony, after all (even the ponies who represented them!).
It's a good story, it just could have used a little more work on the grammar and contradictory statements.
BTW: Alyssa sent me
1721178 It is still in the 'rough draft' phase, a friend of mine is helping me edit it. As you can probably tell, it's a complex story so I anticipated a few holes to fill. I started this story in August and just completed it a few days ago. I've had to go back a few times already to make adjustments, make things tie in together better, etc so please if you find any more mistakes, let me know immediately. As far as Celestia not knowing something, there were things she didn't know about the Crystal Empire so her knowledge is not unlimited. I know, a book in Twilight's library is one thing but where exactly did this book come from? Why is it they JUST NOW found out about it?
good story. I really enjoyed the ending. You should read up on writing though, format was hard to understand. I hope you write more!
2279370 This was my first attempt at creative writing since high school so it's to be expected. It's actually in the same format I read from a teleprompter on which is why it's so condensed. New Elements is still in a rough draft form but it was an idea I just had to get out and felt like submitting at the same time, my other works are slightly better, at least I hope so.
Good story, only one major problem that is consistent. Every time someone else speaks, you should start a new paragraph, because it's really hard to follow along when it's all in one huge paragraph.
This story needs to be edited a lot. Hopefully, one day it will be.
amazing
super cool
3561737 My first and if I ever get around to getting it edited, one of my best. Thank you
Wow, our main guy seems to be the ONLY one who is thinking clearly. Every point he made was perfectly viable. His girlfriend was just ignoring his points and changing the subject. Extremely rude to his intelligence.