Octavia enjoyed her simple life as a cellist, playing in pubs and bars for drunks and or people relaxing. But, she loses work due to the unruly prohibition of alcohol from the Supreme Court of Equestria, and Princess Celestia herself, and is forced to enlist in the Mafia, consisting jobs of protection, supply, and assassination.
My tumblr to where you can badger me if you want: http://wolfoblivion.tumblr.com/
Inspiration from the Ask Mafia Octavia tumblr and pictures made by the artist, Zedrin.
Chapters (24)
Thumps up and favorited. I love mafia-based stories and you're making this sound very interesting. I'll be looking forwards to more chapters.
What Mr Haze said
I'm glad to see somepony else has seen the great mafia Octavia tumblr. Very good story so far, looking forward to more.
Oh wow. Marshal's gonna have a field day when I tell him that his tumblr was the inspiration for a fanfiction. >.>
BTW, if you're curious, check out Marshal's stuff.
http://ask-mafia-octavia.tumblr.com/
http://storm-shock.tumblr.com/
http://zedrin.deviantart.com/
I'll admit that I almost didn't read this when you misspelled "prologue," but I'm a fan of mafia Octavia and this looks like it'll be an interesting read.
1098374 Yeah, i just re-read it, it was 3 in the morning when i wrote this, so i made more (TONS) mistakes then i let on in this.
I clicked like and all of a sudden a dislike showed up as well...
You need work on you grammar that is paramount, however as that is a running occurrence with almost every writer here do not be discouraged. Glaring problems is WAY to many commas and please for god sakes capitalize Nightmare Night.
Grammar aside very good start this is how a prologue should be, setting the stage for events to come
1102447 Yeah i noticed the commas. I'm just about to finish the second chapter, and i included an apology for my butchery on linguistics. As for the Nightmare Night thing, I hadn't really seen it written with capitals, but in hindsight, i see that it's just a case of simple pronouns. Actually, i could use a pre-reader to point out grammatical errors and glaring issues (such as the ungodly amount of commas), since i am terrible at evaluating my work. So any volunteering would be wonderful.
Awesome chapter.
Can't wait for more.
1102476. I'd be glad, you gotta good one here, and you need alot of work to make it perfect
Octavia with a Tommy Gun.......
IT
Awesome
Fuckin awesome.
I still cant get over the fact that my girl is the ringleader of this operation, let alone at war with her best friend.
but that's what alternate realities are for. 
Now for grammar, your getting better however when you described the room at the beginning of the story, i think you over used the word Brown. Now the line "Brown is what seemed to be the entire over-haul of the entire room." following "It was Brown." word of advice, remove both lines and replace them with "Brown was the theme of the room." or something along those lines because the two you got know make each other redundant and not necessary
So far, so good. Keep the chapters rolling.
1175546 Redundancy is actually what I was going for, it was to emphasize BROWN. Too overload the senses.
1178334 trust me bro I'd pick effect over grammar any day but that was a little much
This has potential. I'm interested, to say the least.
A girl with a gun.
Rawr.
Yeah, now things are gettin' good.
I just realized that chapter three had the title that is the title for the first side stories third chapter. Shit....
'Octavia sat at a empty table,'
You should have wrote:
'Octavia sat at an empty table'
1188341 Derping as usual I see.
So Vinyl wont be in any chapters right?
1216173 I never said that, you'll just have to wait. Or I could spoil it privately if you wish.
Octavia is so bad ass in this story it is not even funny. Applejack is so cold i can't believe i enjoy her character, and if Twilight lives up to the story line you've put for the rest this story will be a hit. I'm also impressed at your grammatical improvement from the first chapter so you get seven mustaches
Well I'm thoroughly enjoying the story as it is. As for thoughts, slow down on the non actiony scenes maybe? I dunno.
I like seeing a cold side of Octavia; it's a refreshing change of pace.
You need take take a little more time in editing and slow down the non-action scenes a little. I've noticed several paragraphs crammed together for no reason and the swiftness of the dialog makes a reread more of a necessity rather than desire. Otherwise, I'm curious as to how this will progress. And I'm hoping to see Vinyl somewhere, but that's just me.
NOOOOO. AJ NOOOOOOOOO!!!
I am just going to guess that AJ was a spy before Octy and is now apart of the equestria equiviliant of the witness protection program, because i do not wish to think that she may be dead
You just keep gettig better with this man.
I don't buy it for a second.
AJ dead? If some punk or fellow mafia member killed her, I can't imagine AJ going down without a fight. Someone's going to bleed, even if she gets killed in the process.
Now if it was someone within her own mafia and she was punished in some manner or another, I highly doubt it would go down like that. Her body would have disappeared off the face of the earth, or she would have been made a public and very clear example of. But she's without a scratch? Yeah, she was a mole and is in witness protection. I can't buy anything else.
Speaking of, that was a very sudden jump. Just tossing out that AJ was dead? I reread the chapter because I thought I missed something. This is a character we've spent most of the story with. If she's alive, dead, killer, mole, or Dalek, she should have been given a better send off than that, even if it was supposed to misdirect us.
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Maybe this will help. Piece all the different scenes together from the previous chapters, all the little hints (and the one big one in A Politicians Dream), i think it might make a little more sense. The next chapter something big is going to happen anyway, so you will know just what the hell is going on soon.
hmm i wonder if that address has a double meaning besides the obvious
Damn it I was going to write a story like this
Luv it.
okay who the buck was that
Vinyl must live!!! Other then that its getting intense
Looks good. Lets see where you take Octy from here?
Oh and weekly updates. Very good.
i wonder what celestia would think of the one time famous cellist carting away her nephew
Gah, the wait! Anyways, things really are going fubar for Octi no matter what she does, and the bit with Mena with a cigar reminds of a specific image.....>.>
edit: found it
fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/175/9/d/pinkie__s_got_a_shotgun_by_soulspade-d54qz27.jpg
and so the inevitable team up begins XD
I like where this is going. Keep up the good work, Wolfy.
kind of ironic that they tried to prohibit alcohol in an attempt to quell crime rates but all it did was cause crime to sky rocket
so fluttershy decided to stay away from all of this what about rarity
2128337 You'll see.
Sexy fun time with Vinyl?