Part of me is imagining what Bolero will think when he finds out... assuming you're going with the Cadance = Bolero name others have used. But then, I've always been one for 'Cadance and Shining have an open marriage and Cadance is suuuuuper kinky' thing, myself. Can only imagine the fun if it was R63 too.

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It depends on whether or not I want to handle the potential sequel as a clopfic or something a bit more grounded. One idea for a bonus chapter is Bolero finding out and then doing something about it. Probably not what anyone would do catching their wife and brother having sex, but still.

Oh hecc... I didn't expect the feels. Well done.

i need a sequel, someone get this man 20 likes!

A sequel sounds awesome but I would also like to know what happened the day after Dusk and Gleaming had sex. And Dusk's reaction to learning he did something illegal. I don't know I think there are a bunch of one-shot ideas for what happened in those ten years.

“He wants to have a foal.”
I mean, you can give her one, s'not like Bolero has to know //fingerguns

Damn fine end to this story man, damn fine!

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Prince of love. I personally could see him going oh I knew from the minute we met. Then asking if he can watch next time... but that's my personal head canon. Prince/princess of love (lust and all forms there in.) I also uave it in my head that for some reason being a alicorn gets rid of alot of negative genetic information in the dna... take that how you will.

I am betting Flurry Heart was his.

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Thank you. Feels just seemed realistic in such a situation.
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The likes have been achieved! So, yes. A sequel is definitively a prospect. I just have to finish a commission (my first ever commission) and a free request for someone I'll initiate the planning of it.
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For a continuation, the 'day after' would be the prologue for sure. However I'm not exactly sure at this point in time whether the continuation would be after chapter 3 of this fic with 'aside' chapters detailing the past ten years, or just continuing straight on from the second chapter of this fic and eventually leading up to chapter 3 of this fic. But, like I said with the comment above, I'm not exactly sure yet.
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Thank you for the nice words. I mean, technically yeah Dusk can be the one to impregnate her, but he's guilty enough as is, stealing fatherhood from his friend and brother-in-law would definitely inflame things to say the least.
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One of the ideas I had for a non-canon bonus chapter is Bolero finding out, being half-okay half-angry with it, and forcing his wife to deepthroat her brother's dick, with some degradation thrown in for good measure. Like, realistically, would someone be totally okay with their wife committing an incest affair? Eh, I wouldn't know As for the second portion of your comment, I know what you're getting at. But, at this point in time, I'm unsure if that's the route I should take in the continuation. It'll definitely come up, I reckin.

Thanks for commenting.

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I'd love that drama if I'm being fully honest, hehehehe. Plus I'm a sucker for incest impreg.

But good show, my dude, this was a heck of a read and I looooved it.

Gonna give this a thumbs up even though that last part touches on things that I personally find... Distasteful... But honestly this story was a good take on the concept of incest and forbidden love o.o Heck even though I have issues with it personally, I STILL can't bring myself to say it's not a good story XD

Side note: Though I cannot fathom why the internet is so damn hyper-size fixated... like really? Does everything have to be ''BIG'' to be worth writing about? XD It's freaking everywhere! xD

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I'm glad you didn't let personal grievances get in the way of liking this story. The final chapter and Dusk's guilt is supposed to be an acknowledgement of how wrong it is. But the thing about me is: I love, love. So I couldn't bring myself to make it too much of a downer in the end.

As for the 'hyper-size' comment, I must apologise for that. My own kinks bleed over into the fics, even where it's not suited. In this case, cock worship, cock awe and large cocks in general. Initially I was going to make him more 'reasonable' in terms of size. Believe it or not, he used to actually be larger than depicted, with his member going to his chest, but even I realised how ridiculous that it - that that I'm saying a member that goes above halfway up the belly isn't in itself ridiculous, but still. If it means anything, I had originally envisioned a clop scene taking place in chapter 3 where due to his growth his size was a lot more 'proportioned' and less ridiculous. He's still hung mind you, but it seems less insanely obscene.

But anyway, thank you for the comment I appreciate it sincerely, and I appreciate your like as well. Thanks!

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You're welcome!

As for the hyper-size, well you manged to make it so it wasn't obnoxious or anything so I'm very grateful for that, I've seen one too many works that personify the idea of ''That's just too big...'' xD

But it's not like it's wrong to let your own tastes bleed into the story in a logical way, it just makes the story more ''Yours'' =P well as long as it's done logically xD

It's a bittersweet ending but a realistic one based on how you established the characters. Dusk needed to come to terms with his relationship and realise for himself that he has to move on. The two of them confirming that they still love each other, even though their physical relationship has ended was a nice touch.

This alternate ending brought to you by The World's Strongest Writer.™

“Do you love me as much today as you did yesterday?”

“Yes,” Dusk answered, tightening his grasp about his sibling, his consciousness half-sleeping. “But not as much as much as I will tomorrow...” For it grew stronger every day. Gleaming pulled her little brother closer into a hug.

"So Bolero wants a foal..." Gleaming mused.

"Yeah," Dusk confirmed with a heavy sigh.

"I've always wanted a foal too," she said. She rolled onto her back, pulling him on top of her. She pulled his face down to hers to kiss him. She whispered into his ear. "But that doesn't mean it has to be his."

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Alternate, alternate ending, brought to you by Jackelope:

"You're cheating on me?! With your brother!?" Bolero exclaimed, disbelief in his tone. He turned to face Dusk, teeth bared. "Why I oughta-" the crystal prince was cut short, a shift kick delivered to his crotch, falling onto his face. "OOF, right in the crystals!"

"Oh, that's gotta hurt!" Barb exclaimed.

Sliding trombone noise.

Winona covers her eyes.

All Star by Smash Mouth starts playing.

Credits roll.

9591488 Wait, so who kicked Bolero? Barb?

also

"OOF, right in the crystals!"

>not making a crystal balls pun
-10 points

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Wait, so who kicked Bolero?

I can't tell you that! That's the whole point of a cliff hanger ending, to build suspense and make people eagerly await the sequel! Who kicked Bolero? Gleaming? Barb? Some off screen character? Who knows! That's for the fans to speculate.

The neutral expression the merchant wore broke, becoming a large grin as he gave the Prince a nod. “Atta boy,” he lauded, and would have gave the purple stallion a good natured nudge if he could reach – and if he wasn’t worried that the act would be perceived as 'monarchal assault' from onlookers. The seller’s horn became enveloped in a blue light as he picked up some flowers from his stock, some crimson, some so bright they bordered on pink, creating a bushel. “From the look of ya, I’d guess she’d like some poppies. Typically a soldier’s flower, I know, but still pretty to look at, and the-”

Soldier’s flower, eh?

He shrugged. “I don’t know. Which is weird, because I know a lot,” he chuckled. “I saw your purple coat, and red popped into my head. Hmm. Mix red with white and you get purple. Is the mare you’re feelin’ sweet with have a white coat?”

Sweet, but isn’t it red and blue?

That aside, I particularly liked the exchange between Dusk and the florist.

“Maybe she’d like fudge!” Berry pondered loudly aloud, ignorant to the brawl going on besides him...

For kin’s Honor!

For it grew stronger every day.

Romance.

‘Tis a shame that they can’t reveal it to Bolero, but I guess that makes it all the more precious in this case.

Contest judge.

Just wanted to quickly let you know I liked the fic. I have no sweeping words of sage advice or grand praise to give. It's a solid story front to back.

.. I guess if I really wanted to find one thing I scratched my head about it was the ending. Not that it didn't make sense; I think it's sensible. But it kind of felt like it went against the tone of the rest of the fic. It does take place 10 years later so obviously things will have changed in that time, but it was still notable to me. All the feelings and emotion from Dusk and Gleaming are revealed and concluded in a handful of paragraphs at the very end of the story. Because of the brief and sudden nature of it, I feel it ultimately didn't have the gravitas to really impact my experience one way or the other. And I think something like that should.

Besides that, a good entry.

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Thank you.
The third chapter is there because it serves the purpose of giving some kind of conclusion, whilst at the same time opening up the possibility of a sequel. Now, one thing you're definitely correct on is that it lacks weight, and that's my problem, mostly one of pacing and what really just amounts to 'cut content.' I know, I know: "Shoulda, woulda, coulda." But there was a deadline to meet unfortunately. Anyhow, I'm glad you thought it was 'good' at the very least, it's appreciated to hear feedback of this note.

HHhhmmm I think I like the male version of Rarity more than this Blitz here and I don't really like the situation with Gleaming having to keep two Stallions even if one is her brother to keep up some sort of disguise. I have nothing against this being complicated but that element with the wrong husband is not my taste even if she loves them both if I understand it right.
Not sure if it would be better or worse if Bolero is the male version of Cadance since I hardly like her either most of the time.

God... the feels...

You know, we had assumed that Bolero was simply waiting for them to stop playing games and propose a herd...