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Steelborne will be updated on the Sunday after I complete the next chapter. Also, Maud is best pony.


Twenty years have passed in Equestria. Old friends have moved on. Old foes were laid to rest for eternity. And new friends have found their way to Ponyville.

One such friend is Twilight's second assistant, Paper Quill. Driven, hardworking, and professional, she tries her hardest to keep up with the tasks assigned to her, from giving tours to filling out forms.

But all is not well in her world, as she finds herself plagued by questions. Why has she been having such terrible nightmares recently? And why does Twilight seem obsessed with getting her to open up about them?

Much thanks to Snow Quill for pre-reading, advice, and the amazing cover!

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Enjoy what? It was fine until you made Starlight a villain for no reason that I can see. Then you lost what good I was going to give to this.

Thanks for your comment. I do have my reasons, and whether or not she is the true villain is a matter of perspective, in my opinion. I will keep your criticism in mind for the future, though.

Because of her relationship with twilight. In the story they seem to be secret lovers and twilight ‘abandons’ her. She’s already been abandoned before, by sunburst as a foal. She can’t understand why twilight doesn’t marry her, the political and social nightmare isn’t what she’s thinking of because she’s *hurt*. Starlight is a very emotional mare, take ‘All Bottled Up’ or ‘The Parent Map’, hell her whole town of equality backstory as examples. She is a very powerful unicorn who never really grew up from that scared little foal who’s best friend left her behind.

until I get details on why starlight did what she did. I can't find myself liking this story, yet what is here is good enough for me to not dislike this.

That is no less stupid of a reason now than it was in season 5, and I love Starlight Glimmer as a character. Just not that.

May I ask who you would suggest as an alternative villain? You seem to have an idea of what you dislike, but I'd be interested to know what you think would have worked better.

I honestly don't see why there even needed to be a villain in the story in the first place. Wars in Equestria are a cheap tactic I feel.

Paper Quill's revelation about her connection to Starlight I do like. But I felt it would've worked better if she had been like this because Starlight had made a tragic mistake.

Heck, even keeping what happened to Luna, but have it been an accident that, no matter what, Equestria could not let go without some punishment. Hence Starlight 'dying' and Paper Quil existing in her place.

Hmm, an interesting point, and not one I'd considered before. Thanks for the suggestion. I suspect I personally just enjoy the larger war-type conflicts myself, which may have led to me going a bit far. It's good to know the base concept is sound, but some of the execution needs work.

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