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OblivionShadow


A Brony and a Gamer!

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A battle between dragons ends with a village in ruins and one ponies life changed forever. Phoenix is now on very close terms with an Ancient Dragon. With the village in ruins he needs a new place to call home. Celestia gives him a new job working in research and development for her. He is sent to Ponyville and reconnects with a familiar mare.

Chapters (18)
Comments ( 33 )

9579950
It is not. Its a stand alone that is done by my roomie

get rid of the whole avatar thing for the dragon.
This part makes it stupid that he was killed by two random dragons.

Uh oh, that's not good. :rainbowderp:

9650890
Angry dragon...Never a good sign.

He looked out the window and he could see Twilight and Spike. “Their early.”

*they're

“I’m okay with you knowing since you and I have a bit of history so it’s not to revealing.

*too

I don't remember any other spelling mistakes. I'll comment them for the other chapters if I remember.

I've noticed you've used the word "your" when the word "you're" would be correct, more than a few times.

I have caught up now, I guess.

9895761
Nice. No problem, my guy.

9895809
Thank you for reading. I'm glad you're enjoying it. :twilightsmile:

Maybe some retarded archeologists thought they were "artifacts" and did some gravero- I mean, ""archeology"" on them.

10137302
It’s not a maybe that happened

Good chapter, the only thing I can think to mention is replacing the Break!'s in the chapter with FIMFiction's page breaks like so.


10191436
Oh crap. I forgot them. I’ll correct it tonight. Thank you for letting me know.

Edit: Fixed!

Neat.
You used the wrong 'there' a couple times, but I forgot to mark down where.
Other then that, I didn't see anything wrong.

10204435
Thank you for letting me know. I'll go through it when I get a chance and try to fix it. :twilightsmile:

10204475
Ah, crap. I think I might have had a brain fart. It was either some wrong 'there' variants, or some 'your' ones. I might have messed up which I said. Oops.

“Lay it down on the hearth. The last thing we need is to accidentally slip and engrave the couch.”

You can have a sword and you can have nice things. Rarely both.

10613733
LMAO! I love it. You're not wrong though is a sad thing. :twilightsmile:

10614460
I have axe myself, there have been mishaps.

This great, hope you make more soon.

9605544
Ok you can just stop reading this if you don't like it that much in my opion the whole avatar dragon thing make this story have alot more character

I was wondering if you are still writing this story, I really like it but it has been almost a year since the last update and I'm worried it is dead.

10761853
It's not dead. I hit a bit of a wall with it so I have been working on redoing one of my other stories to try to fall back in love with the stories I do have in the process. I am hoping to have more for it in the coming months. So I am sorry it has fallen by the wayside though. Thank you for reaching out. :twilightsmile:

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