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Firestopper


I like to write stories about anything. I take requests if you want a story written.

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Vinyl Scratch and Octavia have been arguing more and more since Octavia was offered to perform at the Orange a family reunion. During the trip, Vinyl reveals something about herself that wil change her and Octavia’s relationship. What could it be? Find out in this heartwarming story!

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I don't see why this has so many downlikes besides the obvious distaste for the content. I for one think it's adorable, if a little choppy and a little bit confusing (since when do ponies have laptops and websites?). :rainbowhuh:

I also think Octavia became accepting a little too quickly, she went from being shocked and disgusted to accepting of it in the blink of an eye and I really like that could've been fleshed out more. Let her spend some time thinking about VInyl's secret and have her slowly come to accept it and agree to be Vinyl's "mommy". :rainbowkiss:

I liked this story. It’s too bad there aren’t as many stories like this with these two ponies. Also, I enjoyed the little fourth wall breaking on vinyl’s part where pinkie jumped in. I couldn’t help but laugh a little. :twilightsmile:

@SuperPinkBrony12 Well I do appreciate the criticism. The whole laptop/website thing was just something I used to try and implement a more modern feel into the story.
As for the choppiness, I’m still getting my bearings on how to write. This actually was the first time I’ve written a story in a few years. I’m glad you enjoyed the overall story though.

Yeah this whole story is a bit neutral imo. Not too bad but not too good either. Definitely some room for improvement no doubt about that. As for the dislikes it's probably the people that hate the diaper fetish (I don't either but I'm not gonna bash you just for that). It was an okay story but like @SuperPinkBrony12 said, Octavia was definitely a bit too fast in accepting her kink.

A very sweet and delightful story. I like how it tells a tale that can genuinely happen to a 'little' in real life. It also helps to show how any pony can be a 'little'. No profession, background, etc. determines it. It's just something one tends to come into as a result of stress and a need to feel like life isn't as overwhelming, lonely, or uncaring as it can be.

Big props for the Pinkie Pie "4th Wall" refs. I thought they were all well timed and it was great imagining them happening. :)

9505832
I understand that, and after reading it, I can definitely see where you two are coming from. I think what may have happened was that writing it took time and I didn’t realize that it was really short. To be honest, I should have proofread the story. Thank you for reading and giving feedback though!

9505849
Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed!

9505719
I’m glad you liked it!

ADORBSIES!
ALSO...

leave the fourth wall alone!

:rainbowlaugh:

Pacing is something that could be worked on. But don't let the dislikes discourage you. I just completed my first own rewrite. :heart::pinkiesmile:

9507846
I appreciate the feedback, thank you for reading!

a very nice story and an easy way of explaining some of the lightheartedness of the kink to others.

my only real gripe of the story is the number of times "seen" is used when it should be "saw" and

They passed Rarity’s boutique and seen the mare putting out harlequins with spring-colored dresses on them.

should be

They passed Rarity’s boutique and saw the mare putting out mannequins with spring-colored dresses on them.

9509067
I’m glad you enjoyed it, and thank you, I’ll try to keep that in mind for the future.

the 4th wall breaking got me real good

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