After a tragic accident that nearly ended his life, Chance was left a broken and discarded pony. His appearance forever altered and his heart broken beyond repair, Chance struggles with thoughts and attempts of suicide. After a random encounter with a persistent mare, Cherry, Chance tries desperately to hide his past in order to live a lie for a last attempt at happiness. Between happy endings and nightmares, Chance struggles to cope with loss and fears of forgetting the very thing that drove him to depression.
[Editing will be completed once the story reaches completion. Est. 4/20/19, taking a break to let my fingers heal lol]
Chapters (13)
Okay,so I just binge read the whole thing and I must say, I quite like how realistic the character development is, overall the story is pretty good. I am surprised there is no other comments aside from this one. Maybe the story is too "recent", I don't know, but it looks like a hidden gem to me.
I wonder how their relationship is going to to develop from now on, and how will Cherry react.
Anyway, to keep it short, awesome story, I'll keep an eye on it.
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Thank you so much for your comment! This story is going to be a lot like my other story, Letting Go, in that I plan for it to be 3 different stories. I really worked hard on the character development and I hate that I had to rush it, but the real story has yet to developed. I plan for it to be a roller coaster.
Once book one is done of this story, I need to move to Letting Go's sequel and i will come back to this one for another speed write. Thank you for actually giving me real feed back, you are actually the first person to do so and it means the world to me!
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If I'm honest with you, this story is miles better than Letting Go, mostly for character development and pacing. This is just my humble opinion but Letting Go felt rushed, the relationship they had was going way to fast for my liking, I'm not saying it doesn't happen but still, it would be a rare case, and the pacing affected the development of the characters (the plot itself, not so much).
In The Long Road Home however, is feels so much better, it must be those small time skips you do between chapters, letting us know time passed makes the relationship believable.
So yeah, the pacing does make a huge difference.
Please do not take this the wrong way, Letting Go is still an enjoyable story, but I prefer this one
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On the contrary! I actually really appreciate it! Letting Go was more of a story that was meant to deal with trauma than an actual relationship so I do feel I botched the relationship quite a bit. Sadly, I did not notice it until I had finished writing it. Than being said however, knowing that in this story I managed to get the relationship thing correct really is cathartic to me! I put so much work into the time skips to make a lot of the things you would see happen normally in a story like Letting Go all happen behind the scenes. It's a bit of a pain keeping things on track, but from what you have said, it feels well worth it in the end. Now in The Wildest Dreams, I feel like I used puppy love and time as a crutch, taking nearly 150k words before bringing the love interest back into the picture.
Even then, I still used zebras and Somber's format of the tribe system to exploit a romantic involvement early on in their relationship. I honestly wanted to write more about Rose and Cherry's personal relationships with Chance, but I also wanted to be concise and to the point. The relationship thing is kind of the background to the story and Chance's inner thoughts are the spotlight. Suicide is such a touchy thing to write about and depression in ways is even harder, but I'm still ecstatic that you feel the way you do about the story!
Your input has been beyond helpful and your words very kind! I don't expect you to love or even enjoy everything I write, such a thing would be rude and demanding of me. If anything, I value honesty above everything else when it comes to my work and you have given me just that. That being said, I plan to work on the next chapter tomorrow night (tonight?) and have it out as soon as I type the last words. There are about 4 more chapters to go in this, maybe more if I decide to carry it through rather than break it up into different books. I can't say much for what i have planned, but I can say that it will go out with a BANG!
For a second I considered the possibility of Cherry being some sort of ghost, helping ponies in need or something like that but nah it can't be.... right?
It definitively feels like something is about to happen, something BIG, rainy days can be scary sometimes (though I normally like them).
Anyway, great chapter as always.
P.S: If Chance can't flight cause he has a bad wing , can't he get a prosthesis? I remember Rainbow Dash having one in one of those alternative timelines Twilight visited.
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Cherry is just... weird. I actually modeled her after a friend I had in high school back in the day. She would only hang out with me if we were alone, at first I just thought I was a potato but it turned out she had social anxiety and didn't want the attention of being with someone in public. So Overall, she was just an awkward potato like me that she felt comfortable around.
Chance is in fact missing his right wing, the only thing he has on his right side is a nub of where his wig used to be. I toy'd with the idea of a prosthesis quite a bit actually, but it doesn't fit his character at the moment. With him lying in a pool of depression for so long, I envisioned him in such a way that he would not do anything to change his position in life. So getting his wing fixed to me would go against the self harm thing, it would also go against letting go of what happened by taking that important step forward.
I do plan for this to be more than one 'book' so to speak, so I have not ruled it off the table just yet. This being 'technically' the Fallout Equestria universe, such prosthesis do in fact exist and I am not against them in the slightest. But writing them in could be a little lengthy, it would mean longer chapters. Again, not against that either, I'm used to writing 25k chapters for FoE already. I just have to wait and see if folks want to see that sort of thing.
That all being said, let's talk about that something big... All I can say is that it is going to be one hell of a chapter (ironically it's actually the next one). Lots of things are going to happen very soon to Chance. He will be left with a decision that will change his life forever and with any luck, the ponies around him as well.
Just stay tuned, I promise I am giving this my all!
I knew something was going to happen, still that caught me off guard.
I don't have much to say, I hope Rose and Cherry are okay, but it is not that simple, is it?
I'll be waiting for the next chapter, good work as always.
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Thanks for the praise! The next chapter will take some time to get right, but it will be worth it! He will be heading out to find 'one' of the girls in the next chapter. I will have to toss the ideas around as to who will make it through the explosions... as of yet, i have zero idea who myself so no need to read into that lol. Stay tuned, i plan to write tonight and depending on the flow, maybe release one.
Me: *Browsing Fimfiction like any other day*
*Sees new chapter from The Long Road Home*
*Deep sigh*
*Opens Youtube and plays Metro 2033 soundtrack*
"Okay let's do this"
I don't know where to start but I'll try. First of all I'm so glad he could meet up with Rose, the more I read the more I worried she was gone. Second ,and I must congratulate you for this, is how well described is the post explosion setting, the feeling of desperation and sadness was there (or whatever you are suppose to feel, I'm not good with describing emotions, please bear with me), though I must say, I was surprised Chance didn't see or interact much with other survivors.
I'll be waiting for the next chapter, hopefully a happy ending? We'll see.
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I'm going to wait to 'fully' answer this due to spoilers lol. But the lack of 'survivors' was not without reason, i will be addressing this in the next chapter (actually i already have but you will have to wait for me to release it XD).
I wish i could take full credit for the aftermath, but being a huge fan of the Fallout franchise, studied the effects of nuclear bombs for lord knows how long because it interests me so and had been primed by the Fallout:equestria series a good bit... i feel it influenced much of the world i created in my head.
But yeah, I had to get him back to Rose, i love those two together too much.
Also expect the next chapter to be rather long. I actually haven't decided whether or not I'm going to add a Chapter 13 or not due to the fact that I have quite a bit to explain. But as always thank you for your comment, trust me when I say that they have strongly influenced me in both plot line and writing style. I simply cannot thank you enough!
Edit...
(Don't forget, cherry is still out there.)
YES! Chance got his wing "back", I wasn't expecting it to happen so soon, maybe in the sequel, but the sooner the better.
I really enjoy those Rose and Chance moments, they are so sweet.
Now, off I go to the next chapter.
Wish me luck.
I KNEW IT! But somewhere deep inside me whished I was wrong, damn it.
When Cherry was telling Chance her backstory and how she died, I was close to shedding a tear, actually no, I probably did, rather not think about it.
That last question to Cherry got me chuckling, good one Chance
I had such a mix of emotions in the last two chapters, but I can safely say that it was enjoyable.
I should more honest with you here, the reason I started reading this story was because I was looking for stories with the romance and OC tags in them. You also had Rose in the tags which is uncommon, you don't normally see her in many stories, so that definitely got my attention. I haven't read any fallout mlp fic just yet (aside from this one of course) since I normally read only romance so I had little knowledge of it (I did play Fallout New Vegas though) but even so, as I said before I enjoyed the story, the romance plus the plot going on, it was amazingly well executed, you have my congratulations.
You said the sequel was going to focus on Click and Clack, but I hope you mention Chance and Rose every now and then. It may not have romance as this one, but I'll still keep on eye on it. Until then, keep up the good work.
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As always, thank's for the kind words! But yeah, since day one Cherry was slated to have both been a ghost and to have caused the very accident that cost Chance his family. I wanted to paint a full picture that nothing truly operates out of balance in some way or another, Cherry being the cause meant that she also had to be the cure. A life for a life so to speak. I pictured Chance as the most effected of the accident due to his analytical background and need to pick everything apart to the last detail. That being said, it set the stage for those two to connect and balance out the universe so to speak.
As with all stories, Chance is doomed to be the good guy, so he is needed to be kept alive as long as possible in something like this. Him succeeding in suicide would leave the world he is in unbalanced so to speak. Cherry is a polar opposite of Chance in a lot of ways, to me that made her the perfect pony to bring him back out of his shell and start to go on the mend. Chance will see her again, granted I guess you know what that means, but that being said, that is the fate of almost all Fo:E Characters.
As far as Chance and Rose... What are ya? Crazy!? Of course they will be seen together for MUCH of the Sequel! I worded thing wrong in that blog post I made... But It was like... 430am and I had just speed typed two chapters out and was basically typing my the side of my face at that point lol. what I actually meant in my sleep deprived stooper was that Chance and Rose will still be the stars of the show. I love writing romance, every story I have is romantic in nature, even The Wildest Dreams, so to take them out of the spotlight, just feels too wrong to do.
Click and Clack will play a bigger role, that's how I should have worded it. I just love their banter too much to pass it up lol. But Rose is still very much so the 'star mare' of the show here lol. So no worries! I also plan to re-hash some loose ends through investigation and 'dreams' but this is going to get complicated. I purposefully left what happened during the sting operation with Fluttershy up to the reader for a bit so I could really pick it apart. I tried to write it out, but the chapter was nearly 12k words long and needed A LOT of vetting. So, I will be going into detail about that as well.
Just as a heads up, because you have been so kind and all, My discord is Rocco Rocks #9605 if you ever want to shoot me a message and just talk or something. I have quite the revolving door policy when it comes to anyone who wants to chat with me for whatever reason. So feel free!
I have barely finished chapter one and I really like this.
It's poignant in a great way.
Okay, in no way does this say it's a FoE crossover. I didn't realize until he said MWT.
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Yeah, about that... My bad. I have a terrible habit of writing Fallout stuff even when I try not to. This was set pre-war so I did not know if it actually qualified as a FoE fic or if there was some strange other annotation I needed to use. I got so caught up writing it that I totally forgot to even check if there was a pre-war genre, so I am very sorry about that.
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Don't fret or be sorry. I was simply commenting, not criticizing, this is a fun fic and I really wonder if he'll ghoul up or just live in the moment until the end.
Perhaps a run in with scavengers or alpha version raiders.
So much can happen and I'm excited for it all.
😃