Omg more please and what his level mah men

Yes. I am pleased to see u are here

(“Is this the right decision, Luna?”)[/quote

yea it is cause if luna found out about colts and fillies being kidnapped by slavers and the "nobles" were behind it then they are gonna face a level 9010 angry moon goddess

I am really enjoying this story keep it up

Ahhh so celestia wasn't evil it was just nobles doing whatever they felt their entitled to. Oh and starswirls either racist,incompetent, or corrupt take your pick. Will the main 6 be in this story. With the captain being fired I thought we might see shining.

Amazing details. Why wasnt Celestia shocked to see him having Horn ( for Magic use ) Wings ( for flight ) and apperantly earthpony like strength?

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he was hiding his wings in his clothes

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Didnt think wings can be folded that mutch. Thanks

"do not read unless you are over 18+ or with an adult."
*looks behind me*
*parent leaning over shoulder staring at the screen*
"You need a adult."
"I am a adult"
"You need a better adult."
"Fair enough"

“Really Captain Stronghold.” Stronghold paused as he was sweating bullets as he turns around slowly to see Princess Celestia herself, extremely pissed off “Because I swear I didn’t appoint you as Captain to harass creatures of different races?” Solo snickered as everyone looked at him.

Oh dear. This is going to be unfortunate for somepony.

In the castle, at the highest balcony Solo was sitting at a table with Jelly, Sky & the princess, having tea & honey coated baskets. “These are so good!” Said Sky.

I take it you mean biscuits. I can understand the rest (typos aside) but... honey coated baskets?

“Um… I heard there was a lovely at… the castle. If… you don’t mind please?” She said nervously. The sky looks at Solo with interest.

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God damn Grammarly! Why they add ‘the’ when Sky is one of my OC’s name? Thanks for finding that error.

Enjoyed rereading this chapter the most... Corrupted guard arrested by Celestias orders... Neat

Red Rain

That's not ominous at all.

race nut my consol said it was false information. Why would they lie?”

You have a lot of errors in this story. Still fun so far.

“I can believe what I have witnessed. A young unicorn colt defeated 3 grown stallions with the natural strength and no usage of magic. Could that colt be the source of the magic I’ve sense?” She wondered as she failed to knowest the unicorn stallion was silently recovering from his unconsciousness.

can't

“Very clever and their 2 nd contracts aid in arresting so many corrupted nobles that hired them.” She closed her eyes. “I was outraged by the information of my own ponies would do this for wealth & territory. I did learn that your parents used their ill-gotten payments to create nature preservation of a forest with dangerous creatures. Do you know why they preserve that dangerous forest?” Asked Princess Celestia as she looked at Solo Level.

endangered

Celestia didn't know about corruption? Than she is naive and ill suited to rule.
More likely she knows and didn't have the drive or means to root them out!

Great story so far.

Mom & Dad park the carriage near a lot in an alley, place a sign with mom’s picture holding a knife and words that said, ‘Steal from a housewife and you’ll pay a finger.’ (“Holy Shitballs… Moms are fucking scary.”)

Ha! You should see her with wingblades!

“Um… I heard there was a lovely at… the castle. If… you don’t mind please?” She said nervously. Sky looks at Solo with interest.

A lovely at the castle?

“Young Colt…” Solo stood his ground. “Are the most courageous and truly honest pony that I could ever meet.” Both Sky & Jelly were surprised as Solo still stood his ground. “Please… follow me to the castle.” Solo stopped Sky & Jelly.

If a touch blunt. Like a sack of hammers.

“Please don’t hate me. Even I was completely oblivious about the corruption of my ponies.” She looked at Jelly Lyric.” I'm so sorry for any pain my ponies did to your… school? Is that the right word?” She asked.

Celestia is apperently very incompetent if that is the case, guess Celestia will fire her advisors, since they are the reason Celestia is incompetent due to lack of informations that they should have provided.