Sunset Shimmer visits Ponyville from her human home. She hopes Twilight Sparkle and her friends accept her for who she is.
Most of my MLP stories feature meetings of G1 and G4.
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Who made the cover art?
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I drew it. Not bad, huh? In fact, I drew the cover art for all of my stories.
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You... might want to work a bit on body shape and proportioning...
I don't know what I was expecting when I started this, but this sure wasn't it.
I'll start with perhaps the easiest problem to fix: Your dialogue punctuation. Here's a handy guide from a handy guy on how to do dialogue punctuation correctly:
As for the rest? Your pacing was insane. We just kept moving from one thing to the next and spent about no time developing any one event. It was just so jarring to have Sunset suddenly tied up and thrown back through the portal? And there was no resistance from Twilight and friends? What in the world
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I already fixed the cover art for this story.
Will there be a sequal with Cadence apologizing
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I never thought of that. Something to think about in the future.
This is just awful. You tried to do way too much in just 1200 words