I am here to prove that even someone that has dyslexia can write stories. All feedback is appreciate, and always have a smile.
The Rock Farm, home to Pinkie Pie's family. They have a very happy life on their farm. The last thing they were expecting was to find somepony digging tunnels all under their farm. Or what Mysteries that he would show them under their home. How long will Limestone have to put up this intruder and all the pain that follows? And why does she hate him so much?
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Ooo Limestone gets a coltfriend maybe? Liked and fav
Weird way to end the story. Is there a part 2 to this? Either way, it’s good to have Pinkie’s sisters featured in it.
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It says it's incomplete, so I would assume a second chapter is coming.
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Chapter 2 isn't complete yet. I wanted to see what you all think of the story first.
Anything with the Pies on the rock farm is good to see
I think you could probably give Limestone more bite, though. I'm a little wary of where this canon-characters-meet-OC idea is going, but hoping you've something good planned 
What the...
Your story has my attention. I'm curious what's up with this unicorn. I think your portrayal of Limestone was decent; her curt sentences are evocative of someone who cuts straight to the chase (It also reminds me of how Maud speaks). Her mom's okay, good to know. All of her family members are working on schedule, great. Dad's stuck in a sinkhole, I'll bring help. There's someone on her farm, they need to explain what they're doing there. Limestone is definitely a pony that isn't interested in small talk or distractions.
Not bad but grammar could use work.
Loving this story
Interesting story. If I could give any form of critique I'd say to look for an editor. Just someone to help out with grammar and such.
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I know. But everyone can make mistakes.
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Oh I understand. Just a second set of eyes can catch more of them
Jesus this needs an editor. I could barely follow what was happening in this chapter. It's an interesting premise, though.
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Editor need. Can't pay, open to suggestions.
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I'd try asking on some of the editor/pre-reader groups here on FiMfiction.
Yeah u r still alive. Can't wait for more. This is a great story.
I forgot I was still reading this.
I'm enjoying this! nice little bit of mystery (the underground city) and romance! I especially love the interactions between limestone and the digging unicorn! (If he ever got a name I can't recall...)
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Think about it. How did I describe him? Can you guest who he is?
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I am a bit uncomfortable regarding how casually they talk about murdering Diamond Dogs for the crime of being a bother.
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It was a figure of speech. No ponies dies in this story. They just really big booboos.🤕
I really like this story! the chapters come few and far between but it's worth the wait
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Lol George Of The Jungle reference