A Finnish brony for twelve years and counting, once a fanfic author for a short while. Nowadays just hanging around, sometimes reading new and old fanfics.
It was a relatively warm winter morning, and it was Sunday. Twilight Sparkle was going to have good free time with herself reading some good books, until Pinkie Pie bounces in with a suggestion for a fun activity with her friends.
That is, a snowball fight on a field at the outskirts of Ponyville.
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This is my first fanfic ever, so constructive criticism as well as praises are welcome.
Please comment and tell when you find out any grammatical (or other) mistakes. English is not my native language, so there is likely something that needs fixing.
Thank you in advance for reading and commenting!
1040865 Brilliant. Especially for a first fic. Too many self-insert alicorn ships, not enough light-hearted stories. This was really, really nice. Thank you. I look forward to seeing more from you! Also, if you want typography or anything done, I'd be happy to help out. Once again, thanks for writing this. It makes a real difference from the bland HiEs on the main page.
I would read this if I didn't get the 502 error on whatever page I click off of this one.
1048111 My Little 502: Friendship is (Error 502: Server is not Accessible)
This song went through my head as I read this fic
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lDQ7hXMLxGc
1048166 Nah, Hell March 2 ;) Kirov Fluttershy, reporting for duty! Tesla Pinkie, charging!
1048199 lol
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1048230 Da, comrade.
i loved this. awesome work.
i just had a funny thought, i could just imagine spike hiding out on the roof ready to throw some snowballs at the returning ponies
1048161
Pretty much sums up this site
1048455 Ironically, I just had to wrestle my way through several goddamn 502 pages just to get here
1048111
I KNOW! I have that same problem...
Alrighty, here are all the grammaric and spellaric mistakes I found! (I know spellaric and grammaric aren't words.)
"Instead of returning Applejack's taunt, Rainbow decided for more straight approach."
For a more straight approach is correct.
"She grabbed a few snowballs with her as she flew up at high speed, about to make and aerial attack on her opponents, while Pinkie and Rarity were ready to give her covering fire on ground level if any of their opponents showed their heads."
The and in that sentence is supposed to be an 'an'. Also, split the sentence in half. It'll look nicer.
"She deserved that, for ruining my mane."
No commas there, young colt!
I noticed some more improper use or overuse of commas, so check those out, will you? Other than that, this is good for a first try and I very much like it!
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dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
1048408 Should have thought of that...
1049099 Thank you, fixed those mistakes. About fixing comma uses, it is quite difficult for myself to fix that kind of mistakes as even when proof-reading my own text, I tend not to notice that kind of mistakes. Thanks for pointing that out, though. Got to be more observative next time if (when) I write a fanfic.
Thanks to everyone for kind comments! This received way more positive reactions than I thought when I posted this story!
Wheeee!!! I realllly liked this :)
A few grammar mistakes here and there, but I don't expect perfection, and I was able to understand everything.
WUBBED ITT!!!!
1048110 and here
1145254 How the hell did you get here? Get back here! *rushes off to next page*
1145254 Hey, my story comments is not a place to randomly teleport into just to show you can be everywhere!
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1145278 Get him before he invades other comment sections also!
(By the way, I don't really mind, I't just funny that you suddenly popped into here out of nowhere
1147851 *diving tackle* Got ya! Now, I'm no Celestia, but I banish 1145278 to 9gag for 1000 years!
Quite a nice lighthearted story. as Sierra, now known as Quantum said.
Seemed to have been wrapped up a touch quick though, but the Twilight getting snowed under once again was rather hilarious. A good shot for first fic. So have a like.
1414565 Yay!
Nice to see that this story is not yet completely forgotten! 
I know that I could have easily made it longer, and if I wrote this story today I probably would make it longer, too. But I guess for it being my first fic I just wanted to start carefully with a short slice-of-life, not wanting to stretch it much longer than necessary.
1417748 Thank Quantum/Sierra for the read/review. It was on his/her (don't remember right now) user profile recommended stories list, and I'm a fan of one of his/her stories so I read this.
And LOL... I started off big for my fanfic. Up to 21k words with 37-1 ratio XD