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Ice Star

🖤 i eat children 🖤

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Flora Blossom
Flora Blossom #1 · Feb 25th, 2019 · · · Untitled #4 [Gore/Violence/Death] [One Shot] ·
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oneshots for me is pretty hard. However, some oneshots can be good... Don't kill me... I read this it seems not story based fiction this is more like a poem to me I guess. Is it post to be a poem?

NaiadSagaIotaOar
NaiadSagaIotaOar #2 · Feb 25th, 2019 · · · Untitled #4 [Gore/Violence/Death] [One Shot] ·
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This was interesting! I liked some of the language here, especially towards the end when it got all bloody and squickified ( "I am cramped in what has yet to be a shell of her with her hot blood coating me thickly." :heart::heart::heart:)

"Water-weakness," too :raritystarry:

If I have one complaint, though, it's that I had a hard time, from the first few sentences, believing this was meant to be a filly from how she narrated things.

Ice Star
Ice Star #3 · Feb 26th, 2019 · · · Untitled #4 [Gore/Violence/Death] [One Shot] ·
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Thanks for the feedback! I honestly didn't expect to get any with this story of mine, at least not until maybe a few chapters in. My first try at explicit gore was probably going to be alienating, but I'm so glad to see it worked.

If I have one complaint, though, it's that I had a hard time, from the first few sentences, believing this was meant to be a filly from how she narrated things.

The voice was pretty frustrating, for sure. I had a few limitations to what she could say and how she could say them and I haven't written children in a while, so it was sure to be rusty.

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It's meant to play around with repetition in prose, that's for sure. I'm not sure I'd call this piece poetry, but I have written poetry before. Does that answer your question?

IndigoStorm27
IndigoStorm27 #7 · Feb 19th, 2023 · · · Bastard Juice [Original Version] [Archive] [Bonus Content] [Gore/death/violence] ·
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I was not prepared to see that today. Also why does Cadance look so undisturbed by the monstrous Sombra right next to her?

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