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AstralMouse


Ponies ponies ponies ponies ponies. And changelings too.

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Comments ( 17 )

... oh well I'm gonna go cry now bye.

At once beautiful and heartbreaking. A masterpiece.:pinkiesmile:

Why must you hit me with the feels? :raritycry:

Very sad and bittersweet.

You spin a lovely yarn, and it was proudly entered to my Group.

This hit hard. Both of my grandmothers had strokes and came out of the experience less lucid, to say nothing of what happened to one of my grandfathers. Seeing this through the eyes of the sufferer...

You certainly conveyed the experience with skill. Painfully, excellently done.

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Thank you, and I'm sorry to hear about your grandparents. I have (luckily) so far had no personal experience with it, but I tried to research and write this carefully so as to make it realistic, especially given the subject. Learning about it was quite sad, but it's something that deserves awareness, especially because it is surprisingly common.

This was the most bittersweet, most original take on this issue. I nearly cried. Okay, I did cry. You did a good job.

...Ouch

This was good. Really good. It was a bold move choosing to write from this perspective when it would have been so easy to go from Pinkie's, but you absolutely nailed it, and between this and Twenty-Eight Boulders (or was it twenty-seven?) you've got a real knack for changing your voice to match 'non-standard' character perspectives. Great job.

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That's... extremely high praise coming from a writer like you. I'm kinda speechless. I really poured my heart into this one, and to see that it paid off is just... a relief is putting it lightly. Thank you.

Ouch my heart it hurts so.

This was beautiful and sad at the same time.
Great work.

When my mom got diagnosed with bone cancer she slowly drifted into dementia. She could not remember anything and anyone. She got angry often like she knew could not remember, and directed it at herself. It is a horrid thing to happen to your love ones.

It's incredible how you're able to nail a story from such a perspective. I've seen the video you were referencing ages ago and reading this story gave me the same exact feeling. Hats off to you.

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I'm sorry to hear that. It's certainly an issue that deserves awareness.

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Thank you for the compliment. That video really made me realize how awful it can be, and I wanted to do the subject justice and do my little part in bringing it to light.

For what it's worth I personally feel that this surpasses Boulders. Once again your narration is very strong, and the more visual mental imagery is incredibly well done.
I'm glad you went with the ending you did as well. Having the brief lucidity heightened the emotional impact in a very heavy but organic way.
In short, another excellent piece

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