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The journal of Princess Twilight Sparkle,as she tells of the rise and fall of the Pony way of life. When the world she knew lost its harmony and its friendship.

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Interesting story. Had seen this concept before, though usually just like a journal of a long dead/dying survivor. So, I didn’t expect an ending like this, one that makes this seem more like a prologue to some epic story. Should you ever expand on this universe, I’d be curious to see it :pinkiesmile:

Grammar and spelling-wise, it was a rather solid story, the crossed out sections making for an unusual touch. The only issue that annoyed me was the rather frequent capitalization of random words, such as City or Raid. Oh, and I assume you had the borders of a state in mind, not boarders :ajsmug:

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Oh wow, thank you! I have a habit of capitalizing things I think a character would refer to with a certain reverence, or events that become common enough to "earn" a title almost.
And yes, yes I did, will be correcting that.. thank you :twilightsheepish:

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You’re welcome! Well, I’m afraid it sort of loses the effect when overused and/or applied to words that the reader deems rather insignificant.

And no problem. I can remove that part of my comment so it wouldn’t stay there as a tombstone to that typo, if you wish :pinkiesmile:

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