This story is a sequel to Equestria Girls: Time, Space and Justice
Twilight has been having dreams, dreams that involve hearing the voice of Midnight Sparkle calling to her for help. After the dreams get in the way of her and the Champion's hero duties, Twilight decides to seek help from some of the greatest minds in world. But after getting no where Twilight looks to the world's magic users for a solution and once she discovers the source of the dreams, Twilight will find out that to rescue Midnight Sparkle she must confront her inner darkness.
Chapters (8)
Great job on the start of this story. The action, exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I especially liked the trouble Twilight has been having with her nightmares and how she didn't want to worry her friends because they all already have enough on their plate (despite the fact that her lack of sleep caused her to have trouble in school AND in hero work). And, to be fair, Twilight IS technically right about the problem being in her head AND how she DOES need to go this one alone as, at present, the others can only provide moral support.
Anyway, considering the stakes in the previous three stories, I suppose it DOES make sense to dial this one back to something more personal.
I'm definitely going to be looking forward to seeing what comes next.
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I'm glad you approve
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You're quite welcome.
This looks soo awesome
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glad you like it
Well, thanks very much for getting this chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort on this. Once again, really good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places. And, yeah, I can sympathize with Twi as far as the lack of luck with the scientific and magical experts (and, unfortunately, Vice-Principal Luna doesn't have her equine counterpart's experience with dreams). Of course, now I'm wondering what Doctor Fate has found, but that's for next time.
I've got a possible idea for an exchange in a later chapter, but I can understand if it doesn't work.
Twilight: I'm going to need to go into a journey inside my own mind. It's very likely to be a dangerous one, but it's one that I'm going to have to go alone.
Sunset: I understand, but those of us who have a measure of psychic ability (such as Raven, Megan and myself) can still act as a spiritual anchor to improve your odds of making it back.
Applejack: And those of us more suited for physical stuff (such as Rainbow, Conner, Victor and myself) can work to protect you from the outside to make sure some bad guy doesn't try to attack you while you are adventuring in your own mind.
Rarity: And we've still got a large enough group to make sure the city is well protected in the meantime.
Twilight: Thanks for understanding AND for the offered support.
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I'm glad you like the chapter and thanks for the ideas
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You are quite welcome.
Thanks greatly for getting the next chapter up. I loved the exchange between Twi and Fate. Now we have to wonder what dangers Twi will face in the dream world.
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glad I could help
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You're quite welcome.
Really good job on the latest chapter.
Absolutely loved the peek inside Twilight's mind (especially the fictional version of Daring Do and the sentient version of Miss Smarty Pants). And, yeah, the idea that they are going to have to face nightmare versions of the villains of every adventure book Twi has ever read (plus monsters loosely based on stuff from OTHER books too) DOES provide A LOT of potential for great action.
Anyway, the exchanges, characterizations and future action/chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places.
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I'm glad you like the chapter
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Indeed so. :-D
Whoa. Again, you did a great job on the exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I LOVED the spin on the periodic elements and, yeah, kind of feel bad for Twi concerning not just the taunting from her reflection but also the destruction of the realms of her mind one by one.
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as always, I'm glad you like the chapter
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My pleasure as usual.
REALLY good job on the exchanges, characterizations, action and climax set-up in all the right places. I especially liked how Doctor Fate figured out certain details concerning his and Twilight's quarry. Though, yikes! Twi's over-eagerness to accomplish their mission got her and Doctor Fate trapped. Of course we already know they will make it out all right, but we don't know HOW yet.
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as always glad you like the chapter
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Once more, you're quite welcome.
Excellent work on the exchanges, action, characterizations and epilogue set-up in the second-to-last chapter. I particularly liked how Twilight acknowledged Doctor Fate AND her shadow self's points (especially how deep down, she is afraid of losing her friends) and, once Twilight MADE that acknowledgement, her shadow self started to lose her power and threat.
Well, on to the epilogue.
Loved the reveal of Midnight's outside world form (I have a feeling Raven could be a REALLY good mentor to Midnight if the latter still has her telekinesis and teleportation) as well as the reveal of Shiny and Cadance's news (which will probably double as set-up for the debut of Chrysalis's human world counterpart if I'm not being Wrong Genre Savvy [which I COULD be]).
Anyway, really good job on the exchanges, characterizations, general wrap-up and future story set-up in all the right places.
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As always thanks for the comments, and the support
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You are quite welcome, as usual.