The Hand of Friendship
The Fall Formal was officially over, and silence ruled Canterlot High School. The darkened hallways were absent of any sound, save the occasional echoing sniffle. Thin rays of moonlight fell upon the school’s shattered entryway, illuminating the tear-stained face of a girl with red and yellow hair. She knelt before a collapsed wall with a trowel in hand, and gingerly set a brick into place before wiping her nose. Her bleary eyes drifted up to the sky and watched as the moon finally obscured the star above it in full.
No going back now, Sunset Shimmer thought mournfully. I’m stuck here for another thirty moons, whether I like it or not . . .
It was a bittersweet realization. On one hand, it meant this entire Element of Harmony mess was finally over with. On the other . . . The memory of dozens of scowling faces flooded Sunset’s vision, and her head suddenly felt too heavy to hold up. Years of work had gone into positioning herself at the top of this school. She’d schemed, bled, even harmed a few people along the way, and it had all amounted to nothing. Twilight Sparkle had seen to that.
No, not Twilight Sparkle, she thought to herself as she spread mortar onto another brick. Not really. The only person truly at fault here was Sunset herself. And that was the part that stung the most. Once again, Sunset felt her eyes begin to well up with tears. How was she supposed to know that friendship could be as powerful as magic? That sounded like some cheesy line from a children’s cartoon, not at all like reality. Certainly not this reality, where magic didn’t even seem to exist in the first place.
Sunset vaguely remembered her old mentor, Princess Celestia, teaching her that other ponies were the true source of power in Equestria. It had seemed a simple, logical observation. So Sunset had worked hard to show the world that she was in charge; the best, bar none, and worthy of fear and respect. Ponies—and people—would follow her no matter what, and Sunset would be the most powerful pony in Equestria.
Only now, it seemed, did Sunset truly understand what Celestia had meant. And it had taken Sunset’s replacement to show her—after she’d turned the whole school against itself, stolen her homeland’s most important defensive weapon, and destroyed half of her new home using it.
The whole thing left a bitter taste in Sunset’s mouth. On top of that, she was back at square one: alone and lost in a strange world, surrounded by people who looked at her fearfully. Except now they had good reason to. Instead of simply thinking she was odd for picking objects up with her mouth, they’d all be remembering the time she’d turned into a giant, red-skinned demoness and brainwashed them all to fight in her personal army.
I’m a monster, Sunset thought, laying her forehead against the remains of the cold brick wall. Tears welled up in her eyes, but she decided to let them fall; her eyes were already rubbed raw. She wondered if staying in this world had been the right call, after all. Lying at the bottom of that crater, listening to Twilight Sparkle explain her failure, all Sunset could think about was how horrible of a person she was. How misguided she’d been, and how she’d never have the chance to change now that she knew there was another way.
Then, something she never expected happened. After all Sunset had done, and with the entire school looking on at her with utter disgust, Twilight Sparkle had bent down and offered Sunset her hand. It was a simple gesture, but one that Sunset would never forget. Nor could she ever forget the sincerity and compassion in Twilight’s eyes. It filled Sunset with a sense of warmth she hadn’t felt since she was just a filly, walking the halls of Canterlot Castle with Princess Celestia. A sense of warmth that Sunset hoped would never leave her again.
So, naturally, it vanished the first chance it got. Everybody had gone right back into the gym to finish the dance, and Sunset had been left outside with a trowel, a pile of bricks, and the memory of each student’s scowling face.
A set of footsteps echoed from down the hallway and Sunset, fearful that it might be Vice Principal Luna coming to check on her progress again, ripped her head off the wall and hastily slapped a glob of mortar on the closest brick she could find. She peered over her shoulder with a sinking feeling and found herself looking at Trixie’s deep frown and cold eyes. It was the same look each of the other students had given her as they’d passed by on their way home. Sunset grimaced and offered her a small wave, but Trixie simply huffed and pressed her nose to the air as she walked down the steps. A few moments later, she’d disappeared into the darkness.
Once Trixie was gone, Sunset groaned and rapped her head on the wall. How was she ever going to face everyone in the morning? Twilight had offered her help, but it was safe to say that she was back home in Equestria now. Her friends had agreed to “watch out for her—” whatever that meant, but Sunset doubted that they’d actually follow through. Not that she blamed them, really; Sunset had been the very person to drive them all apart. It was pretty obvious that she was going to have to deal with the fallout of her actions on her own.
I deserve every bit of it, Sunset thought bitterly. Through her blurry vision, she could still see the tattered remains of her dress still clinging to her body. Yet another reminder of the terrible creature she’d turned herself into. And so much worse . . .
It was this thought that kept her from breaking out into tears for the hundredth time that night. She deserved whatever came to her in the morning, so she would stand and take it without complaint. It didn’t stop her lip from quivering, though. Or her hands from shaking.
Sunset swallowed thickly and raised the brick in her hand up to the portion of the wall she’d been rebuilding. The mortar squelched and popped as she pressed it into place. A moment later, she brought the trowel around and scraped away the excess. She hadn’t made much progress during the dance, but she’d managed to rebuild a few feet of the hole she’d ripped out of the school entryway. In a few more hours, she might even consider herself halfway done.
The minutes passed slowly as she worked—mudding, setting, and scraping. Sunset tried to keep her sniffling down to a minimum, but her nose simply refused to stop running. Once it started to drip, she set her current brick down atop the brickwork and reached to wipe her face off, but it slipped off the wall and mercilessly crashed onto her hand. Crushing pain ripped through her fingers as the brick clattered away. With a yelp, Sunset seized her fingers in her hand and rolled onto the floor, hissing and cursing this world’s lack of nice, protective hooves.
The pain slowly started to ebb away as the minutes passed, and Sunset managed to find her way back onto her knees for a look at her hand. Her knuckles were red and swollen, and the back of her hand was bleeding, but nothing seemed to be broken, at least. A good thing, too. It wouldn’t have taken long for rumors to start flying that she’d hurt herself on purpose to get out of doing the repairs.
After a deep breath, Sunset steadied herself and grabbed the next brick. She pressed some mortar against the bottom and raised her good hand to set it into place, but the interruption of a throat clearing made her freeze.
“Y’know, that wall’s pretty crooked.”
Rainbow Dash? Sunset whirled her head around to see the rainbow-haired girl standing behind her. A zip-up hoodie dangled at her side, the cuff of its sleeve picking up masonry dust as it dragged across the floor. Her face was lost against the shadows cast by the broken wall, but Sunset was easily able to recognize her crackly voice and magenta boots.
Sunset’s eyes fell back to the floor. Of course she’d only come to mock her. “I’m sorry,” she murmured, “I didn’t realize—”
“I mean, look at it,” Rainbow Dash continued, raising her hands and gesturing at the wall, which Sunset now noticed was bowing at a nearly seventy-degree angle. “It could fall on top of you at any second.”
Sunset realized that was a prospect she didn’t exactly mind right before she registered the concern in Rainbow Dash’s voice. She narrowed her eyes. “Why does that matter to you?”
There was a long pause before Rainbow Dash responded. “Um . . . wow.”
Faux sympathy, that’s all it was. Sunset wasn’t buying it; she’d played that card more than enough times herself. She turned back around and pressed her hands against the wall. Pushing hardly seemed to do anything to correct the wall’s angle, though, even as she rose to her feet for more leverage. It seemed she hadn’t given herself enough credit for how many bricks she’d laid. Another push pressed the wall back a bit, but she could feel it trying to lean back toward her. She pushed again, but the wall refused to budge any further.
A second set of hands planted themselves on the wall next to hers. They were cerulean and toned from years of playing sports. Sunset heard Rainbow Dash grunt, and the wall righted itself without protest. She grinned and gently patted the brickwork. “There we go. Just took a little elbow grease.”
Sunset blinked slowly as she brushed a lock of hair out of her face. “Why . . . I thought you went home.”
Rainbow Dash shrugged but averted her gaze. “Forgot my jacket.”
Sunset nodded and stared at the floor. Maybe Rainbow Dash hadn’t been completely bogus, then. At the very least, she didn’t seem to want Sunset hurt. She briefly wondered if the rest of the school felt that way before immediately deciding that she didn’t want to find out.
The two girls stood in the darkness for a long moment with only the crickets chirping. Rainbow Dash was the first to break the silence, rocking on the balls of her feet. “Are you still crying?”
And the other foot drops, Sunset groaned. She should have seen this coming—she’d used other peoples’ tears as ammunition for years. Somebody was bound to fight fire with fire after so long.
But the teasing never came. Instead, Rainbow simply scratched the back of her neck. “Look, uh . . . We all make mistakes, y’know? Don’t beat yourself up over it.”
Sunset’s jaw dropped. “A mistake,” she echoed flatly. “A mistake?! Is that what you think that was?” Sunset clenched her fists and snorted as a fire ignited inside of her belly. “You forget to zip up your pants before leaving the bathroom? That’s a mistake!” Raising her hand, Sunset pointed her finger directly at the twenty-foot crater that scarred Canterlot High’s front yard. It was a sight she could barely make out through her blurry vision. “I planned that for years. Aside from Twilight’s interference, it went off without a hitch! It was entirely intentional!”
Suddenly, Sunset’s knees buckled, and she fell back against the wall. Without ceremony, she slid down onto the floor and cupped her head in her hands. “I never realized . . .” She trailed off as her voice failed her.
When Sunset noticed that Rainbow Dash wasn’t walking away, she wiped her tears and looked up at her. “Why are you still here?”
Rainbow Dash grimaced and crossed her arms. “I promised Twilight Sparkle I’d look out for you.”
What? Sunset blinked. Did she actually intend to keep that promise? Twilight wasn’t even around to know if she did or didn’t. She probably wasn’t ever even going to set foot in the human world again. And, in the off chance she did, why wouldn’t Rainbow Dash just lie?
“You don’t want to be my friend,” Sunset grumbled. “It wasn’t even your choice.”
Rainbow Dash shrugged. “Hey, we don’t always get to pick our friends.” She frowned. “Well, I mean, we do, but we also don’t.” Immediately, her eyes narrowed as she started tapping a finger on her cheek. “I mean . . .”
Was this really Rainbow Dash? The same girl who’d screamed in her face dozens of times? The one who’d been first to protectively leap in front of a wave of magical destruction, and who’d taken nearly a dozen different plans to turn her against her friends? Now that the anger was gone, she seemed like an entirely different person.
“Well, you know what I mean,” Rainbow Dash finished with a conclusive nod.
No, I really don’t, Sunset thought, even as she felt a chuckle tickling the back of her throat. But I think you meant well.
A soft smile broke out on Rainbow Dash’s face. “Here,” she said, squatting down beside Sunset and extending her hand. “Hand me that other trowel, will you?”
Sunset’s stomach tied itself into a knot. She peered at the rainbow-haired girl’s face, expecting to see a smirk, but found only earnest eyes looking back. “. . .You’re offering to help me?”
Now, it was Rainbow Dash’s turn to chuckle. “Well, duh. I’m not gonna hurl it into the street or anything.”
I would have . . . Sunset admitted to herself as she reached for the second trowel and handed it to Rainbow Dash. The other girl took it without hesitation and immediately set to work on buttering a brick with the mortar. Sunset watched with a frown as Rainbow Dash wordlessly set it into place and started reaching for another one.
Before Rainbow Dash’s hand could reach the brick pile, though, their eyes met. Rainbow Dash frowned. “What’s wrong? You don’t want any help?”
It took Sunset a few moments to gather her thoughts. She didn’t understand Rainbow Dash’s angle—didn’t get why she’d offer to help her, of all people, with her punishment. But, instead of dwelling on that mystery, she settled for asking a question that had been burning inside her for hours.
She looked at Rainbow Dash and hoped her tears and desperation weren’t as obvious as they felt. “Do you think they’ll ever forgive me?
Rainbow Dash’s gaze softened. There was a long scraping noise, then a dull thunk, as the other girl slid down beside her. “Y’know,” she said, drawing her knees up and staring down the hallway. “I used to be a pretty crummy person, too.”
Sunset gave her a look, but Rainbow Dash just waved her fingers. “No, really,” she insisted. “I mean, okay, I never destroyed the front wall of the school or brainwashed an entire dance or anything, but I wasn’t exactly . . . nice.”
Rainbow Dash took a deep breath. “Everybody’s the good guy in their own story, y’know? And, back in middle school, I had a heck of a story. I was popular, the captain of almost every team, a wicked guitar player, an up-and-coming black belt . . .” She paused for a moment, drumming her fingers on her knee. “I thought everyone was stoked on me. But a few too many bad jokes here, a couple of not-so-awesome pranks there, and one really bad fist fight with Applejack later, I realized that everyone actually thought I was a big bully. All the friends I thought I had . . . they were just people who were scared of me.”
Sunset was surprised to find herself nodding along with Rainbow Dash’s words. It was a different song, perhaps, but definitely the same music. She wrapped her fingers around the unzipped pieces of her leather jacket and pulled them tight against herself as the other girl continued.
“I felt awful about it. Who wouldn’t? So I know where you’re coming from, but trust me, everyone deserves a second chance.”
That sounds like something Princess Celestia would say. . . Sunset thought with a heavy heart. “Maybe,” she answered tentatively. “But I definitely don’t deserve any friends.”
Rainbow Dash actually snorted at that, and Sunset felt a sudden rush of heat flood her cheeks. “You really think that? Everyone deserves to have a friend.”
Sunset bit her lip. She’d seen Twilight Sparkle and her friends together. She’d seen the love they shared, and the way they’d stood together. They’d even been willing to sacrifice their very lives for each other. How could she ever consider herself worthy of that kind of bond after everything she’d done? She wrapped her jacket even tighter around herself. “E-even somebody like me?” she practically whispered. She wasn’t even sure she wanted Rainbow Dash to hear her; the answer was too frightening.
Rainbow Dash stood up and dusted herself off. She turned to face Sunset, and then, for the second time that night, something happened that Sunset Shimmer could never have predicted. Rainbow Dash offered her hand. “Especially somebody like you,” she said firmly.
Tears once again found their way into Sunset’s eyes as she took in the sight of the blue hand reaching down to her. She reached up and latched onto it with both hands, suddenly afraid that it might disappear into the darkness, but it didn’t, and Rainbow Dash pulled Sunset to her feet without a moment's hesitation.
“Now come on,” Rainbow Dash said quietly. “We’ve gotta get this wall built before the rest of the school gets back, or they’ll be even more ticked at you.”
Sunset nodded shakily, unable to keep her tears from washing down her cheeks. Rainbow Dash was right. It would be far easier for the rest of the students to forgive her if the destruction she’d wrought was fixed before it became a real problem. And with two of them on the job. . .
Two of them . . . Rainbow Dash was going to stay with her all night? Sunset felt a wave of relief wash over her, even as more tears threatened to follow the ones currently dripping onto her jacket. Was this what friendship felt like?
If it was, then it truly was the most powerful magic Sunset Shimmer had ever felt.
“Um, Sunset,” Rainbow Dash said with another chuckle. “I kinda need my hand back.”
Sunset jumped at the sudden interruption of her thoughts. The warmth that had filled her chest quickly extended to her cheeks as she released Rainbow Dash’s hand and backed away, rubbing her arm. “Sorry,” she said quickly. Then, she dragged her gaze back up to match Rainbow Dash’s and said: “Thank you, Rainbow Dash.”
“Just ‘Rainbow.’ Or ‘Dash,’” Rainbow said with a smile. She bent down and picked up one of the trowels Sunset had been using and banged it off on the brickwork. “That’s what my friends call me.”
Sunset nodded and wiped her eyes. “Thank you, Dash.”
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Absolutely adorable, and great backstory for Human Dash! Reminds me of a quote, this.
Welcome back, Blundy. It's been entirely too long
Downvoted for no lesbian kissing.
Well that was a pleasant surprise. I'm really glad I gave this a shot. This was wonderful.
well done to you on this very fine story.
I love it!
Well, this is Headcanon now.
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...I'm not joshing here, but I'm honestly worried for that meme guy; looks like he's having a goddamn heart attack. I know that's the whole point of the meme, but heart attacks are quite serious; hope the real dude's okay. Quite old too, which makes it worse.
I agree with the meme itself, but...ugh. 'Old guy having a myocardial infarction' isn't something I believe should be joked about, is all.
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Do we need that? Especially when there's no romantic chemistry here? I mean, sure, Rainbow's agreed to be Sunset's friend and spend time helping her, but she doesn't know Sunset's past in any great detail, and they've only just met on friendly terms - only just 'turned over a new leaf', as they say. Definitely no romance here, yet.
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What story's that from? Sounds potentially interesting.
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Very nice, though the school would be in bigger trouble by attempting to repair a public structure without certified professionals being involved.
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I do not agree with that image, not all stories need lesbians, that would get annoying really fast
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Actually a quote from Eiji Hino, the lead of Kamen Rider OOO. Basically sums up his philosophy right there.
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Exactly; there are stories where it's warranted, but that's mostly straight-up 'Romance' or 'Sex' or 'Fetish' stories, and even then not all of them (some stories have the far more common and traditional straight relationships).
Like with everything, forcing lesbian relationships into a story into which it doesn't belong only serves to reduce the story's overall quality, as it will stand out like a sore thumb. It's like forcing a man into a beauty contest, or a woman into the army; neither of them belong there (for various reasons), and will only reduce the contest's or army's quality and effectiveness.
Plus, not all of us are interested in lesbian relationships. Some of us prefer it when a male dominates a female, and prefer not having a dick on a mare (unnatural and usurping the stallion's role).
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Very few of us care what you're interested in, yet you insist on posting it. If you want to express your hetfag ideas, write your own story. I can assure you it would be improved by adding more lesbians though.
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There are very few stories that cannot be improved by adding lesbian ponies.
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I agree with everything you said exept for the part with women in the military, they can be in the military if they want to
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Thanks! It really is nice to be back. I'm excited to see what comes next.
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Thanks! I'm glad you all enjoyed it. Also, I love that this story, in which masonry features so heavily, was first commented on by somebody with a username like yours, Bricklayer.
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Well, obviously Dash brought her home when they were done. ;)
But seriously, I was sorely tempted to actually make this a SunnyD. It just didn't fit, though. It's a story about friendship and acceptance. Feelings that are more than that really didn't belong. If you look closely, though, and read between the lines, you might see the beginnings Sunny developing a bit of a crush~
Of course, the story's finished, so interpret it however you will.
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I... Wow. You know, when I was first reading your comment, I found myself nodding along with you for about the first half-sentence—right up until you insinuated that being a lesbian is a "fetish." And then you just devolved into sexism and homophobia from there. I've personally written dozens of lesbian stories, and I've assisted with dozens more. I'm currently working on original fiction in which a lesbian is the main protagonist, and none of my stories have fetishized it in any way. I have several friends, whom I cherish, who happen to be lesbian, and some of them, like Cryo, have served in the army. Even the women on my department are far more combat ready than most of the men that I meet, so your assertion that they're a detriment to the service is not only bigoted but grossly misinformed. I'm asking as a medical professional now, what exactly is it about being female that makes a person a liability in combat? Because it seems to me that the biggest, most glaring weakness of the male form is fundamentally absent from female anatomy. And sure, generally speaking, males have a proportionate predisposition for muscle mass and hematocrit, but any fighter worth their salt will tell you that intelligence matters far more than size or brute strength.
You can have your own preferences as much as you like, but understand that others are entitled to theirs, and some of them aren't even a choice.
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Alas, I have deviated from the accepted flowchart, but I shan't for long. There's even a RariDash competition that just got announced on Tumblr.
These two are my favorite pair of sisters.
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The irony has struck me just now...
Very heartwarming - nice story!
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Eiji said it, but I feel it could apply to all lead Kamen Riders. In one way or another.
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It can be a 'fetish'; I'm not homosexual, but I do enjoy seeing F/F on occasion - if it naturally fits the story and is well-executed. Same with all my other fetishes, which can be done F/F but I prefer M/F. If it's not done well, or it doesn't fit, these can become awkward instead of fetishistic.
Also not discounting lesbian people as a whole - just saying that forcing in a Rainbow/Sunset kissing and/or sex scene in this fantastic story would be unnecessary, stand out like a sore thumb (because Sunset doesn't truly know Rainbow and vice-versa, this soon after Sunset's defeat), and would lower the quality of this story. That's all I meant by it, I swear.
Sure, they can be, I'll grant that. There were also several well-trained women in my old Taekwondo classes. But men, as civilisation has known since time immemorial, have greater upper-body strength, muscle fibre density and testosterone - which give them an innate advantage over women in close-quarters combat and overall stamina.
Not 'sexist', but 'realistic'. Biologically speaking, men are inherently superior than women at fighting, which is why women could generally not become soldiers or mercenaries back in ancient Greece, for instance. Guns, however, are a great strength equaliser, negating the 'close-quarters' element, but that still leaves general stamina, in which men still show natural advantages over women.
...What, the penis? How getting hit there will incapacitate a man? Sure, women don't have that Achille's Heel (but I imagine a breast shot will also be quite painful), but in all other physical aspects men are inherently superior fighters.
As for 'intelligence', there's plenty of intelligent men too. Unlike what media likes to portray, men are not exclusively 'brawn', and women are not exclusively 'brains'.
I do indeed realise that - but even a heterosexual man like myself can find lesbian acts quite a turn-on, making it a 'fetish' in my book. If I need to update said book, then I unreservedly apologise for being unclear as to my meanings.
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They barely know each other. How can there be a lesbian relationship between two girls who A) barely know each other, and B) were enemies until just a little while ago?
Very nice. You know, we've had the "Make Rarity not Trash" series of stories: we need more "Make Rainbow Dash not a Jerk" stories.
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I don't disagree. It's the primary reason why there isn't any shipping in this story. Forcing a romantic subplot would have been just that: forcing. This decision, however, has nothing to do with their genders, and everything to do with thematic resonance.
We, (humans, that is,) are one of a very small handful of species in which the males fill the roles of hunter/protector, yes. That, however, does not mean that women are somehow less capable. Keep in mind that the reason why women were treated thusly had nothing to do with their combat effectiveness, and everything to do with patriarchal beliefs, religiosity, and the perception and treatment of women as property. The Spartans trained their women for combat, and a cornerstone of Greek mythology not only named a woman as a key goddess in the realm of combat but also created belief in an all-female tribe of legendary warriors who could only be bested by Heracles himself.
Testosterone, which you seem to be so madly in love with, isn't even an exclusively male hormone; it's produced in a female's gonads and adrenal cortices as well. Smaller amounts, granted, but it's by no means a trump card for males to claim dominance in physicality. Denser bone and striated muscle fibers are impacted less by the presence of testosterone, and more by the activity and stress levels of the individuial—this is a fundamental fact of individual adaptation. Males have a greater predisposition toward denser tissues, but by no means rule the roost in this area. This is setting aside the fact that muscle mass inhibits movement, adds weight, and slows the speed at which a limb can move. Females are, generally speaking, far more flexible than males because of this. The "overall stamina" you refer to is a side effect of a lesser hematocrit (population of hemoglobin on red blood cells) due in part to lesser testosterone levels—which can easily be rectified if said female regularly engages in physical exercise and takes an iron supplement.
Testicles. And if you need me to explain how pressure, kinetic energy, or thermal changes applied to testicles affects a male, then you obviously didn't spend enough time on the playground. A breast shot, while painful, is nowhere near as debilitating. There are numerous other advantages females have over males in your beloved hand-to-hand combat as well—a much lower center of gravity increasing their sense of balance secondary to their skeletal structure is just one of them.
I've never insinuated that women are inherently more intelligent than men, I merely pointed out an obvious caveat to your line of logic. If you're a large man facing down a woman, you can be sure that she's going to be thinking far more tactically than you are; she doesn't want to be anywhere near you.
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The same place any other relationship starts: from the beginning.
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It’s almost like you don’t know what the word fetish means. Kink and fetish are not interchangeable.
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Oh, that's the word! 'Kink'! I did have a feeling I was using the wrong term to refer to it, but 'kink' slipped my mind; my humblest apologies, and my thanks.
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I can get behind that.
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You know this guy's an obvious troll right? You're just giving him what he wants by responding to him, so my suggestion would be just to block him entirely.
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True, but I think Eiji's one of those who embodies that quote the best, alongside Haruto and Yusuke Godai.
This was superb work. I really loved it, especially the insight into Dash's past and how she herself had made serious mistakes in the past. I don't often see much stories going into this sort of depth with her and Sunset - usually it's with one of the Twilights or Rarity I think - but I really like this idea, and now I want to see more Sunset/Dash character interaction!
love love love this story! beautiful :)
Great job. Sunset Shimmer is one of my favorite reformed villains. She's hit rock bottom and has to work her way up to earn forgiveness and friendship. Friendship and forgiveness was not handed to her like it was with Starlight Glimmer. This is why her character arc in Rainbow Rocks was so good.
A lovely story, and very much in-character, IMO.
This isn't the first story I've read about the moment Sunset began her transformation. What sets this one apart from the others is Rainbow's involvement. While she doesn't have an obvious character arc in either FiM or EG, there's enough information for a writer to connect the dots and create one for her, as you have here. It makes perfect sense, and it's also appropriate that the Bearer of Loyalty would be the one to help Sunset repair the damage.
Fantastic work in capturing Sunset at this early, awkward stage of her reformation. She's still coming to grips with the revelation that rainbowed her in theface, and while Dash might not be the most erudite person to help her figure out applied friendship, she's still an excellent tutor. Thank you for it.
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Neither was it to Starlight. They got the same opportunity, and have grown into their redemptions similarly.
Very, very amazing story, indeed! I wonder what would happen in the next chapter, can’t wait! :D
And keep up the good work! ^w^
A pretty good take on that first night after. A very good short read.
I'm interested in a sequel of rainbow dash in middle school upto the point of her fight with AJ and her realization people was scared of her
Very overdue review notification and upvote for you. I like the Equestrian tone (despite the setting!) and the Sunset-Rainbow interaction. Quite simple, but it's effective with it.
Awesome chemistry between the two great stuff
There are no words. This is... I’ll say it with an emoji.
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. You just pulled at my heartstrings and punched my feelings hard. Wonderful job.
You're not alone Sunset