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I'm the best at what I do: being late. I also write stories, commission art, and translate between English and Spanish.

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Princess Celestia has lived for a very long time and, as such, has had many regrets. One of her biggest ones was driving away her beloved protégée, Sunset Shimmer, who had abandoned her and jumped through a portal to another world.

As time had passed, Celestia's guilt over Sunset had only grown. To resolve their issues, Celestia made it her mission to bring Sunset back home. Whenever the moon lets her, Celestia crosses the portal herself and uses the little time the portal allows to look for Sunset. Many moons and a few attempts later, Celestia finally finds Sunset!...Or does she?

The girl Celestia finds certainly looks like Sunset and even says that is who she is, but this girl claims to only be a simple guitarist and knows nothing about any "Princess Celestia." What will come of this meeting?

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Will there be a sequel?

I love, love, LOVE this story! :raritystarry:

From the get-go, having Princess Celestia traveling into the human world to search for Sunset Shimmer only to run into the human Sunset was a great story idea! What's more, I love your interpretation of the human Sunset! The interactions between the characters was greatly written, the pacing was excellent and it was very heartwarming and bittersweet!

Once again, you've done an amazing job RS-Belle14! :twilightsmile:

This story earned a like and a spot to my top favorites! :raritywink:

Wanderer D
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I like this, although I think you could polish it a little. The "Sunset! Sunset! Sunset!" gets uncomfortably repetitive and I feel it detracts from the rest of your scenes. Changing that a little should make it read a bit easier and let the readers follow the flow a bit better. It is pretty unusual to see a "Celestia across the mirror"-centric story. In fact, I don't think I have seen this before? :rainbowderp: I mean, yeah Celestia crossing at some point happens, but her being the focus is pretty unique.

Wow. That was amazing. Heartwarming, a little sad, and just really wonderful. Honestly, I've been having kinda a bad couple of days, and reading this made me feel a bit better.

Thank you.

9790398
Hmm. I'm not sure. I fully intend for stories I post to be complete one-shots. Sequels are hard but never say never.

9790410
Thank you so much, Sonicfan! I have high hopes for this story.

9790466
Thanks! Yeah, you're probably right on that. I guess I should correct that.

9790496
Thank you! I'm sorry to hear you've been having a hard time. I hope things get better for you.

Wanderer D
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"That is exactly what I'm saying, Miss Celestia; you don't," Sunset calmly spoke. "Miss Celestia, let me just

This is what I mean. Really distracting. It's way too repetitive. There's only two people talking for like 99% of the time so far, you don't need the name to be repeated so much.

Sushi bar

I see what you did there.

9790529
I had someone tell me the opposite, saying that they got confused who was talking. Now, I'm just stuck between a rock and a hard place.

Wanderer D
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This was a sweet story, I hope it helped with what you're going through on your side as well!

9790559
Thank you so much. I like Sunset's words, here. You're likes and support really do help out.

Very well done fic! :D I loved the concept of Celestia searching Canterlot High's world for Sunset and finding the Human Sunset instead. Their interactions were well done and you did a very good job writing how Human Sunset would act. :D Definitely a fav! :D

9790597
Thanks again for all your help! Couldn't have done it without you! I'll be sure to take your advice in the future.

9790466
hey wanderer, look up cheer princess. its also a princess Celestia going across the mirror. That other story is about Princess Celestia actually running into the portal right after Sunset, and decide to stay in CHS to prevent Sunset's bullying and her school 'take over' thing

9790648
Sure thing. :) I'm glad you will and I hope it helps you along with future stories. :D

9791039
Sure does. I'll stay in touch.

You know, I don't think we've ever had a fic where Princess Celestia goes to the human world to find Sunset, and meets the other Sunset instead. Consider me intrigued.

9791534
Yeah, I know. It just came to me in a humanities class and I don't think I've come across a story with that plot.

9790532 You don't always need to have "Miss Celestia" or "Sunset" every time they start a conversation. Especially if it's just the two of them talking. If you do a good enough job of describing and acknowledging your characters then your audience should pick up on who's talking when.

9791560
I had someone tell me the opposite in proof reading, so I guess I just ask the masses what to do.

Quite interesting - a follow-up might be neat.

9792061
Unfortunately, it doesn't look like a lot people want it.

9792199
Well it kind of cries out for one, you know? Not sure when it should be set, though.

9792627
I was thinking for after Celestia reconciles with pony Sunset. Perhaps even tip toeing past Twilight to get to the mirror.


9792199
If you want to write just write. I can't understand why an author with a vision lets another dictate the story.

46 likes to 1 dislike.

Also, I just feel this story wants a sequel to tie things up with pony sunset.

You can do either honestly.

9792627
Well, I suppose I could think of one scenario, but I never did intend this story to have a continuation I guess it's something to think about.

9793054
The two Sunsets should probably meet, at least - with Celestia or without.

9792924
I try to give the people what they want through my view. With this story, I thought I'd show a scenario where Celestia, after years of guilt, learns of lesson of selfforgiveness and love and end the story with an open future as it is her choice as to where to go with this new outlook.

I'm not saying I can't think of a scenario for a sequel, but I'm not sure if it should have one. I never write a story with a sequel in mind.

9792930
With enough requests, I'll consider it. Thanks for the read.

9793064
Like I said, I can think of scenarios, it's just a matter of people or me want to see it.

Yes, this definitely calls for more too it. I'm thinking two follow ups maybe. One where pony Sunset and human Celestia spend some time talking and getting Sunsets point of view on everything, since we got Princess Celestias pov here. And of course an actual sit down between our two pony protagonists where they finally have that long overdue heart-to-heart.

9793078
If enough people want, I'll consider it. Thanks for the read!

9793128
I'd say go for it!

Personally I'd want to see more of this world as well. While not the most polished of works, the heart in it shines through, and it's an interesting premise. I hope life treats you as well as musician!Sunset treated Celestia.

Thanks for writing~

I was trying to hang up some posters and tell people to show up, but everyone was just so mean to me. Whenever I tried to talk to anyone, they would just give me a weird look and run away. Never gave me a chance. Heck, I saw a few of them tear some of my posters to shreds!"

...I think you two just discovered where Celestia's Sunset is hanging out.

9793611
That's one of the jokes/metaphors of this story: the answer is right in front of them, but they didn't notice/explore it enough to see it.

9793570
Thank you so much for the read. I'll try to improve with each story. Thank you.

I loved this so much! I always wondered what this scenario would look like! It's amazingly good. I also loved your version of human Sunset. Everybody gives her a different personality. This was the best, and is definitely one of my favorites.

I wonder if Celestia will ever find her Sunset. Or how Celestia's and human Sunset's next get together would go. Any chance for a sequel? Yet, no problem! It's a beautiful stand alone.

<3

9793671
Thank you so much! I intend for all my stories to be one shots, but if enough people ask, I'll consider a follow up.

This is really nice. Really nice.

Though I half-expected Pony-Shimmer to step out of the bushes at the last second or something. Halfway through I thought it'd turn out this WAS Pony-Shimmer and she was playing a long-con.

9794274
I thought about including Pony Sunset at one point, but I decided against it. This story takes place before the first Equestria Girls movie, and I think it might defeat about the story's purpose if Pony Sunset was already reformed.

Thanks for the read!

Finished the first chapter. Can't wait to read the rest.

9796233
Thanks! Hope you enjoy it.

Man, the dialogue between the two is just so...beautiful.

I have a feeling that Celestia bonds with Human!Sunset, because she is everything Celestia wishes Pony!Sunset was.

This story had a wonderful bittersweet ending: one that created hope without feeling completely satisfactory or schmaltzy.

9798751
Thanks! Glad you like the story! Really means a lot to me :twilightsmile:

Doggone it, RS. As usual, you hit me right in the feels with a story. This time, hard enough to give me heartburn... or maybe that's the coffee. Either way, I absolutely loved this.

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