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Many centuries before Twilight Sparkle would arrive at Ponyville a young foal falls from the sky. He bears a destructive power not seen in any Alicorn before. Taken in by King Lunard the young foal has lived in isolation for many years in a castle tower. One day he is brought out from his home and into the rest of the world. Joined by Princess Celestia, the pair set out on a journey that will change both their lives forever. But there are many who would use his destructive power for evil. Voidera will find friendship, love, and hardship in his long quest for answers. Ultimately Voidera will have to make a choice...use his power to save the Alicorns...or destroy them.

My take on the origin of many of the elements in the show. From Celesita to Discord to the very existence of the three races of ponies.

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Generic and overdone clichés everywhere.

will read later

I seem to be the only one who actually likes this story...:unsuresweetie:

This was not as terrible as some people seem to be making it out to be. One quick critique, Jacoboby, in your first 9 sentences, 7 of them are started with he or him. This trend carries on throughout the fic. If your looking to improve, you might want to vary up your writing style a bit in your next story. Anyway, thanks for writing this.

1040016So I guess the question remains, should I continue this or should I let it go?

1040129 If you enjoyed writing it, keep going. Alternatively if you have another idea bouncing around your head and you want to give it a shot, I`d say go for it.

Lunard suddenly awoke from the dream he was having. He didn’t imagine the surge of magic he just felt. He raised his dark head to look out at the midnight sky. He swore he felt that magic, and it wasn’t the good kind. He was compelled to investigate.
He stood up and stretched his dark wings. “I just hope this is just my imagination…”
He looked over at the bed he just left. His queen, Solara was sound asleep. She looked beautiful even when she was locked in slumber. Lunard wondered what he had done to deserve such a fine Alicorn as his wife. Lunard shook his head bemused. Now was not the time to think of such things.
Lunard opened the window and spread his wings. Now was the time to find the source of that surge of magic. He knew Solara wouldn’t awaken for hours and Lunard hoped to be back in time to see her awaken.

*Lunard awoke from his dream with a gasp. He hadn't imagined the surge of magic that shot through him... Had he? He swore it had happened, and it didn't settle well in his stomach. He couldn't help but want to investigate. With a hefty sigh, he stumbled to his feet and stretched his wings. I just hope that was my imagination...
He glanced over at the bed he just lurched from. Solara, his mate and queen, was still snoozing peacefully. She's beautiful, he thought to himself. even when locked in slumber.Lunard wondered what miraculous twist of fate had gotten himself such a gorgeous Alicorn as his wife. With a bemused look, he shook his head to clear his thoughts. Now wasn't the time to think of such things. The jet black Pegasus trotted over to the window and flapped his wings. Today, right now, he was going to find the source of the surge of magic.

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