Twilight's Gift

Animatorsnake #1 · Jan 10th, 2019 · · · Prologue ·

From just looking at the cover art, this is either a Naruto-crossover, or something involving Naruto and other shows... I'll be keeping a close eye on this story

Nagato

Nagato #2 · Jan 11th, 2019 · · · Prologue ·

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Yep, it is a crossover with Naruto featuring as mc both Naruto and Sasuke(though you can guess that from the cover, so... xP), and well, I hope you stick for the next few chapters at least; my main focus with this is the interactions between characters, though there will be a lot of adventures here and there while the plot is moving forward.
Thanks for the comment!

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #3 · Jan 16th, 2019 · · · Prologue ·

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What happened next I like your story so far I'm am curious can you do the next chapter please

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #4 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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I love the pictures too cute

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #5 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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I like the story it's cool

zachary12

zachary12 #6 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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nice work.

Sonic Rainboom Dash

Sonic Rainboom Dash #7 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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i agree. too many authors make their characters to receptive, or too OOC. a healthy dose of skepticism, followed by actual thought is what makes these stories shine. and yours is as bright as a beacon

The Faceless Maker

The Faceless Maker #8 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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Excuse me, I'm just going to perform a premature-
HHHNNNNNGGG
-okay, better now. just getting that out of the way now.

Nagato

Nagato #9 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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Haha, Thanks, I'll probably going to change that pic for a new one soon, but I'm glad you liked it.
And Thank you for comment!

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Thanks!

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Even now, I'm not completely satisfied with the way I wrote this, I feel the pace doesn't seem as natural as I'd like, so I'll probably going to change a few things in the future. I tried to make Twilight quite receptive of the situation while at the same time questioning what's going on, more of that attitude is in later chapters.
And Thank you for the comment, I appreciate it.

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Haha, are you okay now that you let that out?

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #10 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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I do have one question for this story is Twilight going to adopt them ?

The Faceless Maker

The Faceless Maker #11 · Jan 21st, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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Absolutely. Now, instead of one every half chapter, I'll be doing one every second half chapter.

Nagato

Nagato #12 · Jan 25th, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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That's the most probably outcome, yes. But she's not going to take the bulk of that responsability alone.

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Awesome

link4

link4 #13 · Jan 28th, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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odd... showed up on my updated tab. hmm

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Nagato

Nagato #15 · Jan 28th, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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Sorry guys, my fault. I was editing the chapter and...accidentally published it...
I think it'll be ready tomorrow.

link4

link4 #16 · Jan 28th, 2019 · 1 · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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Done that before. Good luck

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Heartdrop

Heartdrop #18 · Feb 1st, 2019 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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"I talked to Applejack. I told her about this sudden need of...of protecting them, of being sure they are safe and that nothing bad happens. I've never, ever , felt like this before Rainbow. Are these feelings artificial? Is this some kind of spell?" Her voice cracked a little at the end"I don't want it to be like that...just thinking about it makes my heart feel so heavy...But if it is true and nothing is real, then what does this mean for me? And for them? I..." She couldn't even finish, tears falling from her face. When she felt a tiny hand touching her snout she smiled softly at Sasuke.

Don't worry you feeling rainbows right the feeling is real that's a instinct to being a mom

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #19 · Feb 1st, 2019 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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By the way I think it's about the queen wrong it's Queen Chrysalis not queen monarch ok

Nagato

Nagato #20 · Feb 2nd, 2019 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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oh, that.That's actually a queen from another hive, it's not the same as chrysalis.
There's multiple hives around Equus(in this story)
P.S: To everyone.
I'm currently without electricity, again, and honestly I'm not even mad right now. Just tired to be honest. So, I have no idea when the next chapter will be published.

HB_DS2013

HB_DS2013 #21 · Feb 2nd, 2019 · 3 · · Friendly meeting ·

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“I honestly don’t really know how they arrived here, and that frightens me. A certain part of me wants to know how did this all happen, but the rest of me wants to take care of them until they don’t need me anymore…it’s strange. And being honest, I haven’t ever felt like this, you know?”

It's called motherly instinct- they're stronger among predator species, of which humans are among their number.

KyuubiMakai009

KyuubiMakai009 #22 · Feb 2nd, 2019 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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Probably a different changeling queen from another hive. It was never actually stated there was only one, ya know?

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #23 · Mar 24th, 2019 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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Dude it's been almost Lake since February sent February and we're almost at April tomorrow and I haven't updated your story yet And I speak for a body here what's happened next we wanna know We're dying to know what happened next pls

Nagato

Nagato #24 · Apr 1st, 2019 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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I'm sorry for taking so much time to update, but life has been kind of difficult recently. My Dad just died a few weeks ago and I kind of lost my energy to write for a while. Also it does not help that I found myself with a writer's block so it was kind of difficult to go forward with the story.
Right now I'm working on it, it'll probably be the longest chapter so far, around 12K words I think. I don't want to give an specific deadline cause I don't want to dissapoint anyone, but I promise I'm working on it!

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #25 · Apr 21st, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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I see the the babies on a cute moments are adorable

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #26 · Jun 10th, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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So when's the next chapter you don't mind me asking

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thedarkalicorn

thedarkalicorn #28 · Aug 15th, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #29 · Aug 16th, 2019 · 1 · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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I agree I'm curious what's gonna happen next

Nagato

Nagato #30 · Oct 8th, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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Hi guys, I'm back for a bit.
So...well, as you can tell I haven't updated this story in months. To be honest, that was never my intention(Initially I wanted to update at least once a month) but well, life got in the way.
My dad died back in march, and in july I had a fight with my sister and I left my house(or was forced to, but whatever). Now I'm living somewhere else, but this has greatly affected my mood, and I have found myself pretty sad lately.
But I want to change that. And honestly, after re-reading this story, I don't really feel pleased with it. So I'm rewriting it on its entirety.
The weird thing is that I had already plotted pretty much all of the two sequels for this story(well, the broad details mostly) but this one was the one that was giving me problems. Besides, I also decided to rewatch the first few seasons of FIM in my spare time, if only to get some inspiration. And reading the Naruto manga again, mostly to get both MC's characters down.
So well, I'm working on it, but I don't want to make the same mistake of posting the story and then leave it hanging forever. As such I'll try to finish the entire thing before publishing it, so I can have a good flow of chapters for you guys, and you can enjoy it without having to wait several months between chapters.

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #31 · Oct 11th, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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Huge

Torielfan2019

Torielfan2019 #32 · Oct 21st, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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I hope to see more of this in the near future!^^

NeoKun

NeoKun #33 · Nov 20th, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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Take your time.

Torielfan2019

Torielfan2019 #34 · Dec 7th, 2019 · · · Prologue ·

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I hope this story continues since I'm curious on how it plays out!^^

Torielfan2019

Torielfan2019 #35 · Dec 7th, 2019 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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I hope there will be more chapters of this story in the near future!^^

Torielfan2019

Torielfan2019 #36 · Dec 7th, 2019 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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Can't wait for the next update!^^

Nagato

Nagato #37 · Dec 10th, 2019 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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I promise, I'm working on it!!! Hopefully, It will be ready to mid january(I'm talking of the whole story, not just one particular chapter).
I really hope to live up to your expectantions!!
Bye.

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #38 · Feb 28th, 2020 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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I know you taking your time in all it's been almost one year now I ever going to you story again

Heartdrop

Heartdrop #39 · Jul 30th, 2020 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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It's almost a year I can update it

The First DemonFox

The First DemonFox #40 · Dec 10th, 2020 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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Wellness check. I hope this gets updated.

Pete100

Pete100 #41 · Dec 29th, 2020 · · · Prologue ·

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“I guess Pinkie and Rarity are right though, I do need to get out more often…” Her eyes went upward, gazing at the starry sky brought by Princess Luna “I suppose I could ask the girls for some advice about social interactions…all of them seems to be pretty social, even Fluttershy…” Her almost closed eyes were filled with uncertainty, her mind wondering how even her shy friend seemed to have more friends than herself.

I wouldn’t say that.

After all, she was Celestia’s student, and her teacher was the most sociable pony on all of Equestria; she didn’t even need to talk to make new friends! Now that was a goal worth of being achieved.

But, that’s because of status, isn’t it?

The purple mare thought of bonds with all her friends, but especially the rest of the elements and Spike. To be so close to somepony, close enough to even share your deepest secrets, your fears…it truly was something beautiful, and every day Twilight tried to make the most of her time, to spend it with all the girls, to make Spike laugh, to share smiles with all of them.

Something tells me I know where this is going.

Also, being the student of the supreme ruler of the country had its perks, although she more often than not chose to not abuse it. However, she did use that influence a few times, especially when she was younger and didn’t have the patience to wait for the new books for her collection to arrive. Of course, she eventually snapped out of it, mostly because of a talk with her teacher; Celestia wasn’t harsh on her, but her words did transmit that she was disappointed of her student showing such attitude.

Something tells me she’ll find out why, soon.

And just like that, the then purple filly decided to stop and learn patience. And it worked out quite nicely. Her patience was one of her most positive traits, not even Fluttershy had her ability to wait so much.
Now that she thought of it, most of her friends were quite reckless sometimes, even Fluttershy.

Really?

Sighing loudly and with a tired smile in her face, she started to walk a little faster. Humming to herself, she suddenly remembered that Spike wasn’t in their home; the little dragon had gone with the Crusaders on a sleepover. She was thankful for that, she didn’t want Spike to be alone when she wasn’t around, and honestly, she felt that with him around them those little fillies might hold back a bit their need to go ‘’crusading’’.

Why not take him to the party?

Maybe the pony wanted some of her pillows? As silly as it sounded, she remembered that there was a Pillow thief in Canterlot back when she was a filly.

That was in canterlot, not ponyville.

The full brightness of the glow hit her right into her eyes, making her yelp in surprise and then fell in the floor. Gritting her teeth, she waited until she felt her sight back, and after several seconds she opened them slowly, the light still bothering, but not enough to blind her.

Are they glowing?

“Four limbs, like a pony but not quite the same, no. Completely different structure, arranged in a different way…hmmm, bipedal probably-“She stopped for a moment, looking at the one with blonde hair that was giving her its back “-no tail to balance itself…how does it walk?”

Balance itself for what?

“Maybe they don’t need a tail, because they use magic!"

What would they need a tail for?

She was ecstatic. They certainly weren’t the first species to use magic to facilitate their movement, even ponies did that.

Really?

They were dressed.
Twilight wasn’t aware of it, but in her excitement she had activated her magic, and the horn on top of her head was covered in power, buzzling as if it was alive. The purple glow emanating from her horn was mixing with the almost white glow present in the whole room, and suddenly she felt the need to take an even closer look at them. As if a voice was urging her to do it.
Is it hagoromo?
Also, sorry about the long comment, just had a lot to say and lots of questions.

Pete100

Pete100 #42 · Dec 29th, 2020 · · · Naruto & Sasuke ·

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With curious eyes, Twilight inspected the objects, lifting them with her aura. One was a simple thing, the only remarkably aspect of it was the green gem that seemed to be wrapped in some kind of mystical aura, in the mare’s opinion. The second one was made of metal; the most noticeable featurette was the metal plate that had some kind of inscription, in a completely foreign language!

I don’t get it.

She gasped. A new language wasn’t something to joke about. It meant that there was a civilization that they didn’t know about!

Does that mean ponies and humans speak different languages?

But Twilight did know a little about other languages, especially the ones for the dragons of the north, all of which had a completely different way to speech than the rest of the dragons that inhabited Equus. However, that didn’t mean that she was able to learn a completely new and foreign language on the fly.

They all speak different languages?

Running from one spot to another, Twilight was busy making breakfast, her magic working as fast as it could, her mind was filled with thoughts about how much she could write about her new little friends.

That’s not a good idea.

“Sasuke…Naruto…” Those names had some kind of ring to them that she just liked.

Is it because those were the correct names to call them?

he gestured to the creatures that were now wrestling much to the dragon’s amusement and the pony’s disapproval.

Well, they are meant to be fighters.

Pete100

Pete100 #43 · Dec 29th, 2020 · · · Friendly meeting ·

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"If you want to go, you can do it. I won't be mad you know. Besides, you are a kid, and kids need to have fun. Go, Pinkie here will help me, right?" She looked at Pinkie, who nodded eagerly. Spike seemed about to argue with her, but a simple stare from Twilight was enough for him to be gone in a few moments.

What was the stare?

When her tree appeared in her line of sight Twilight could see that the rest of her friends were there; so when she arrived at the door and all of them kept looking at the babies, Twilight let out a nervous giggle and asked them to go inside.
And with that, the Elements of Harmony had officially met the Sun and the Moon.

Is this foreshadowing something?

The element of laughter was shaking with uncontained excitement. Her mane seemed even puffier than before, and the smile on her face was a little too big for Twilight’s taste.

Is that even possible in pinkie’s case?

To say that Princess Celestia, ruler of Equestria and master of the sun was having a good day, would be an understatement.
Last night, she suddenly felt a pang of pain drilling her head, and as she sensed a completely foreign power extend its tendrils through the entire world, and her kingdom, her entire brain was shot down and the next thing she knew was that her sister had arrived at one point in the night and had been worriedly trying to wake her up.
The moment her mind finally started to work properly, the ivory mare was aware of the flows of energy that now were circulating through the entire place overflowing it with power. She could feel it in the air itself, the very ground where her castle had been built was buzzing with energy. It was wild, ever so changing and moving from one place to another. But to Celestia, the most frightening thing was that it felt alive. The entire world felt alive, and not in the same way as before. The ponies, the dragons, the changelings and every creature in Equus were what make the planet feel alive in the past, but now, it was the world itself that riffed with life. And that made Celestia uneasy, because she didn't know that to make out of it.

How does that mean she’s having a good day?

"Somehow, I have this feeling that Twilight will soon know about this, and the moment she involves herself in, she'll figure out what is happening..." The solar diarch said with a smile, one that quickly faded away when she looked at her sister's eyes "However, this does not mean that we will be at the sidelines waiting for the elements to solve this problem, we have to act, and quickly. We'll need to contact the rest of the races in Equus, and inform them about this, although I'm sure that some of them already know of about this fine mess we're in..."

They’re finally gonna be useful?

"I talked to Applejack. I told her about this sudden need of...of protecting them, of being sure they are safe and that nothing bad happens. I've never, ever, felt like this before Rainbow. Are these feelings artificial? Is this some kind of spell?" Her voice cracked a little at the end"I don't want it to be like that...just thinking about it makes my heart feel so heavy...But if it is true and nothing is real, then what does this mean for me? And what about them? I..." She couldn't even finish, tears falling from her face. When she felt a tiny hand touching her snout she smiled softly at Sasuke.

It has to be hogoromo.

Without saying anything Twilight hugged Rainbow tightly and let out a few whimpers before using her magic to wipe out her tears.

With just her magic?

Both babies were lying on the bathtub, and while yes, neither of them had fur, what actually had surprised them were their limbs. Naruto's right arm and Sasuke's left arm were completely different from the rest of their bodies. If Twilight had been worried about Sasuke being pale before, now that she was able see their arms she was truly worried.
Their limbs were of a chalk white tone, and all along their arms there were strange black rods sticking out of the skin, as if they had been pierced.

What are those?

Her mother and leader, Queen Monarch, had sent her to the ponies’ city to gather information and look for potential sources of love. Right now she was going back to give her report to her mother, hoping to get some kind of appraisal, which honestly wasn’t really hard, since her Queen was a really kind creature.

Cool, a kind changeling.

Those creatures that appeared are like “avatars” of the Bijuu, although heavily modified, and they have the vaguest of memories from their tailed beasts.

What does that mean?

Again, sorry for the long comment.

Pete100

Pete100 #44 · Dec 30th, 2020 · · · Twilight's not so little problem-Part 1 ·

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In front of her bed, Twilight's tired eyes were looking at the two crying babies in front of her, their cries being contained inside the house thanks to a handy spell she found, otherwise she would have a lot of annoyed neighbors in her door at that very moment.

Damn, is the walls that thin?

It wasn't a matter of pride, it was that she felt the need to take care of things herself rather than let others do it. She didn't know why, but it was like that.
Whatever was that affected my mind; I hope it won't last at all...

Is that sasuke making her think that?

"Don't you think that it is a little suspicious that those babies appeared to Twilight right after the event? Something is a little suspicious here, sister" At that, Celestia could only agree.

I thought they appeared before the events.

Ditto's gaze was on her mother and queen, and she couldn't help but think about how powerful and regal she looked. It probably had a lot to do with the fact that Queen Monarch had make sure that the entirety of her hive would never feel hungry. The Queen never seemed to be pleased by the way the had to feed themselves, which led to her being the one that ended the lives of all of the creatures they brought when they finally couldn't give energy anymore. In her own words, it was her own way to pay them respect.

I’m starting to think she’s not nice, anymore.

She felt horrible, and tried to remedy it. However, not a single one of her books said anything about dreams so strong to pass through shielding magic. She had casted a variety of spells on herself to sleep, but whatever the hay was happening, the dreams kept bypassing her shields, and every new day she would wake up feeling like crap.

What were the dreams?

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